Naruto cards a 1st attempt

[vash13]

 

hope you like it (still dont know how to post multiple times being a noob sucks T___T... but how do you do that from card maker?... cuse my pg expires when i try to do that ><

[Saturn of Elemia]

Since you are new, I shall go lenient. Here are my thoughts:

 

1 - This is not how a Synchro monsters works. This would be better suited as an Effect monster.

2 - The text in the card is in all CAPS! Don't do that, please.

3 - Most people on here don't think highly of Level 11 or 12 monsters. Try to keep your monsters Level 10 or below for better results.

4 - Your OCG (Official Card Grammar) is WAY off. Here is how it should go:

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except when "Will of Fire" is activated when you have "Naruto", "Kakashi", "Jiraiya", and "Sarutobi" in your Graveyard or on your field. This card can attack your opponent directly. This card is unaffeced by Spell and Trap Cards. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. Damage calculation is applied normally.

(This may not be perfect, but it is the best I can come up with)

 

5) - Should include the card "Will of Fire" so we can see what else is needed to summon this card. (I will mention how to post multiple cards later)

6 - OVERPOWERED! Needs serious balancing.

7 - Image could be better. It's not bad, but it has too much text in it.

8 - NEED a disclaimer saying that you don't own any of the images. If you don't have one, you can get in BIG trouble by mods or super mods.

 

To post multiple cards, paste the tags for EACH card you want to post in the thread next to each other. Each card should show up.

 

As it is, this card would receive a 0/10. Since you are new, I will give this a 3/10 since you tried and this is your first card. I'm not trying to come down or you; I want to see you improve. I would suggest the following tips for you:

 

1) Check out DJ Osiris' OCG Thread to learn how to use proper OCG. Here is the link:

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/showthread.php?tid=51261

2) Check real Yu-Gi-Oh cards to get a general idea of balance and effect.

3) Find a good site to get images from. I would suggest Photobucket or Deviantart.

 

I hope this helps you out. I hope to see good things from you. 8)

[Spire]

*sigh*

 

0/10.

 

Everything stated above.

[vash13]

THANK YOU Very much! ^__^

 

I do not own any of these images...

 

hope this one turns out better than the last one ><

 

 

for those of you who read the manga, you may be able to decode what the serial number means ^__^

[Atomix]

*sigh*

 

0/10.

 

Everything stated above.

[narutocooper]

......4/10

[Professor Cobra]

Don't capitalize every characters, pic is okay, grammar problems, overpowered. 2/10

[╬「Selatcia」╬]

Naruto cards go in pop culture.

[zero_89]

shikamaru card is pretty good, you'll get better over time

[Ivarboy]

first one is weird...

shikamaru have pretty good OCG