Im losing it =/

[Bloodrun]

[align=center]Sacrifice is a part of life that we all must live with. It entitles us to have what we want, whether or not we get what we originally set out for. Sacrifice being a part of the imperfect Human Life, has it's own downside. As we must all sacrifice a part us, to protect what we think sets our living excursion. My sacrifice, being, how safety swaddled me in the arms of danger, explains just how imperfection constricts and molds the form of life.

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Thats the intro, im losing my "philosophical" way of writing >.<

that paragraph took me 20 minutes >_>

when i use to be able to write a while essy in 15 >_>

and still get a B+ -.-

[Guest JoshIcy]

:| When I write something like this I always do it like this >

 

Intro (Which talks to the reader in the form of a Question).

Body (Which contradicts itself but at the same time eliminates the possibilities that you dont want).

Conclusion (Which talks to the reader and finalizes the question stated in the intro).

 

Slightly different than the standard procedure and it works.

[Bloodrun]

:| When I write something like this I always do it like this >

 

Intro (Which talks to the reader in the form of a Question).

Body (Which contradicts itself but at the same time eliminates the possibilities that you dont want).

Conclusion (Which talks to the reader and finalizes the question stated in the intro).

 

Slightly different than the standard procedure and it works.

 

you see, this is a anylytical exspositoric essay, i cant contradict my thesis, i have to support it with both side of the story >.<

[Static]

[align=center]Sacrifice is a part of life that all will inevitably experience. It endows us to attain what we desire' date=' whether or not we achieve our originally intended goal. However, it does have it's own downside, because to obtain what we want, it requires us to allow something we perceive to own or hold dear to be thrown asunder to protect what we perceive sets our living excursion. My sacrifice, allowing safety to swaddle me into the arms of danger, vividly expresses just how immensely the imperfection of having to let something go constricts and molds life.

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Thats the intro, im losing my "philosophical" way of writing >.<

that paragraph took me 20 minutes >_>

when i use to be able to write a while essy in 15 >_>

and still get a B+ -.-

 

I rewrote it, just so you can see a different perspective on what you said, and have a basis to make changes.

 

Hope you liked :D

[Bloodrun]

[align=center]Sacrifice is a part of life that all will inevitably experience. It endows us to attain what we desire' date=' whether or not we achieve our originally intended goal. However, it does have it's own downside, because to obtain what we want, it requires us to allow something we perceive to own or hold dear to be thrown asunder to protect what we perceive sets our living excursion. My sacrifice, allowing safety to swaddle me into the arms of danger, vividly expresses just how immensely the imperfection of having to let something go constricts and molds life.

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Thats the intro, im losing my "philosophical" way of writing >.<

that paragraph took me 20 minutes >_>

when i use to be able to write a while essy in 15 >_>

and still get a B+ -.-

 

I rewrote it, just so you can see a different perspective on what you said, and have a basis to make changes.

 

Hope you liked :D

 

o.0"

im so using that!

 

and

damn! ebay doesnt sell static >_>

[Static]

[align=center]Sacrifice is a part of life that all will inevitably experience. It endows us to attain what we desire' date=' whether or not we achieve our originally intended goal. However, it does have it's own downside, because to obtain what we want, it requires us to allow something we perceive to own or hold dear to be thrown asunder to protect what we perceive sets our living excursion. My sacrifice, allowing safety to swaddle me into the arms of danger, vividly expresses just how immensely the imperfection of having to let something go constricts and molds life.

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Thats the intro, im losing my "philosophical" way of writing >.<

that paragraph took me 20 minutes >_>

when i use to be able to write a while essy in 15 >_>

and still get a B+ -.-

 

I rewrote it, just so you can see a different perspective on what you said, and have a basis to make changes.

 

Hope you liked :D

 

o.0"

im so using that!

 

and

damn! ebay doesnt sell static >_>

 

Fine by me, you have my permission to use that, technically, I stole your paragraph in the first place, but I don't think you mind ;)

 

And now you can use the "letting go" thing as a body paragraph, which should make this IMMENSELY easier.

[Bloodrun]

[align=center]Sacrifice is a part of life that all will inevitably experience. It endows us to attain what we desire' date=' whether or not we achieve our originally intended goal. However, it does have it's own downside, because to obtain what we want, it requires us to allow something we perceive to own or hold dear to be thrown asunder to protect what we perceive sets our living excursion. My sacrifice, allowing safety to swaddle me into the arms of danger, vividly expresses just how immensely the imperfection of having to let something go constricts and molds life.

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Thats the intro, im losing my "philosophical" way of writing >.<

that paragraph took me 20 minutes >_>

when i use to be able to write a while essy in 15 >_>

and still get a B+ -.-

 

I rewrote it, just so you can see a different perspective on what you said, and have a basis to make changes.

 

Hope you liked :D

 

o.0"

im so using that!

 

and

damn! ebay doesnt sell static >_>

 

Fine by me, you have my permission to use that, technically, I stole your paragraph in the first place, but I don't think you mind ;)

 

And now you can use the "letting go" thing as a body paragraph, which should make this IMMENSELY easier.

 

letting go?

i used letting go?

ohh, riight, gotchya ;) thanks lol