my first Demise King of Armageddon fusion

[.:|Fallen|:.]

here it is

 

EFFECT:

"Demise, King of Armageddon + 1 or more Six Samuari Monsters.

This card can only be summoned by the effect of ''Super Polymerization''. If there is a "RITUAL''Type monster on the Field Speical Summon 1 "Six Samuari''monster in DEF.This card gains 500 atk for every "DARK" - Monster in your hand.This card can only be Destroyed by a "FUSION" - type monster

[N00B Hunter]

It's hard to Summon and overpowered. "Magno", I expect more than this. You're a Level 5, at least know how the OCG basics work.

 

Your name hasn't been used, but it doesn't sound so original. When you think about it, you're combining 2 monsters who are both given special names ("Demise" and "Yaichi", or "Zanji"; something like that), and you're making a monster that doesn't have a special name. Name him "Demiji" or something... at least try there, please. Also, your picture looks squashed. Either that samurai is a dwarf, or he's been munching on a few too many easy-bake brownies. Aesthecity: D-

 

The balance of this card isn't top-notch either. It's incredibly hard to Summon, and then implements four completely different strategies (relying of Ritual Monsters, "Six Samurai" support, relying on DARK Monsters for aggro support, and indestructability against everything but Fusion Monsters). The first 2 don't work together, and are so useless already. The second really helps the aggro of this card, though, and the whole invincible-except-for-fusions idea completely overpowers your monster. It's hard to Summon, a bunch of it is frivolities, and it'd ovrerpowered too. At least you did alright with the DARK-reliant aggro boost. Balance: F

 

Your OCG isn't good either. Here, I'll completely rewrite the effects and bold all the parts you messed up on:

"This card can only be Fusion Summoned by the effect of ''Super Polymerization''. As long as there is a Ritual Monster on the field, once per turn, you may Special Summon 1 "Six Samurai''monster in Defense Position from your hand. Increase the ATK of this card by 500 for every DARK Monster in your hand. This card can only be destroyed by battle by a Fusion Monster."

In case that passed you by too quickly, there's a lot of stuff to bold -- meaning a lot of stuff to fix. So I wouldn't hesitate to recommend you learn your OCG soon... after all, you are a level 5 member. OCG: D-

Average Grade: F+

 

Alright, here's something that shouldn't have to be told twice. Stay away from high-level monsters. Stay far away. When people start making high-level monsters, they make those monsters do a lot. When the monsters do a lot, then people start trying to balance them with hear-impossible summoning conditions. So it's really easy to mess with balance in making high-level cards. Along with that, a lot of names for high-level cards are frivolous, most of the work is in the card picture. OCG varies.

[Atomix]

It really good.

[.:|Fallen|:.]

ill edit it

 

and thanks

[Rogue]

Me think i like it??

otherwise it is quite the EXPADENTIAL piece of artistry!?

i dont know wat me said so i think it good!!!

8/10