Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Liquified, is my emotion.Solidified, is my fear.Grounded, is my compassion,but crystalized are my tears. Evaporated, is my happiness.Ironized are my sheers.In all expense, through true time,still Crystalized, are my tears. Broken, is my life.My life, smited by the gold.In all expense through true time,I am only yours to hold. However, I may be,In love with you, my dear,But still Liquified, is my emotion,and still Crystalized, are my daimond tears. ARTIST NOTE: My ex GF wrote the first stanza, I added on. Also, I am back and this is my version of saying that I am back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Great poem Sario but I thought you had to change your name? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Y u gota be emo I think that is a little uncalled for, as he could just be blue. Its alright to feel sad.... Very nice poem! I very much enjoyed it! Welcome back, though I dont think we have met. ^_^ I'm Kale. *extends hand* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Kale...I am Meti....lol And thank you BTW...lol Also, I wrote this poem because of my inspiration...and it's supposed to mean how lonely I used to be......until I found out, that love is just waiting for me to find it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Kale...I am Meti....lol And thank you BTW...lol Also' date=' I wrote this poem because of my inspiration...and it's supposed to mean how lonely I used to be......until I found out, that love is just waiting for me to find it...[/quote'] *takes hand back* Oh, hello, Meti. ^_^ didnt recognize ya.... Welcome back. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 -.- You is strange... BUT I HUG YOU ALL ANYWAY!! *hugs everyone* XD ~Meti ^.^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 -.- You is strange... BUT I HUG YOU ALL ANYWAY!! *hugs everyone* XD ~Meti ^.^ How am I strange, exactly? Sorry if I didnt recognize "Meti" but your name clearly starts with an "S" XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sario Crystal shall be dead by sometime during November...then I'm going to change it back to Meti...lol And nevermind about the strangeness... I'm alittle loopy so I can't really say anything about strangeness..... ().() Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sario Crystal shall be dead by sometime during November...then I'm going to change it back to Meti...lol And nevermind about the strangeness... I'm alittle loopy so I can't really say anything about strangeness..... ().() Alright... I didnt know you changed your name... Or maybe I did and I forgot. I can barely recall seeing your name changed a while ago... Anywho, again, welcome. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 [quote=Meti] Liquified, is my emotion. Solidified, is my fear. Grounded, is my compassion, but crystalized are my tears. [/quote] Whether or not this is yours, this stanza is sheer magic. And could calm a beast.... Same for the final stanza, and call me crazy but it hit me well and do for as I was reading this I was listening to this song > http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ziy0UHEM0_I&feature=user o.O Darn random AMV's Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 ().o' That is sort of random...lol Thanks BTW! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frlf Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Well, it was a great poem, i can tell ^_^.. Welcome back Meti, i am a n00b with a mudkipz avatar *shakes hands* -Frlf Yep, i stole Glasstin's fish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 ...lol I know who you are Frlf...lol And I suggest you give back Glasstin's fishy...he misses it...lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 This emo crap makes me want to kill people. I do not approve of this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exiro Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Ah, don't listen to Tea Leaf, she doesn't understand how poems work. This poem is great, I love it. Welcome back, I guess, and now that I saw your post count, good luck becoming Legendary too ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Ah' date=' don't listen to Tea Leaf, she doesn't understand how poems work. This poem is great, I love it. Welcome back, I guess, and now that I saw your post count, good luck becoming Legendary too ;)[/quote'] Don't talk sheet about me when you don't know. I know poetry, and this is crap. Grade-A, 100% crap. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 ... Apparently you don't know how to critisize.. What do you find wrong about my poem? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Static Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 ^^ This is what's wrong with it: The word Diamond is not necessary, it just makes reading it less fluent and adds no important emphasis or impact to the reader when they finish. Your life is only as broken as you imagine it to be, writing about how you feel without showing any intention becoming better, writing about dwelling in sorrow just shows a weak human being, not an amazing work of art. Gives off whiny Emo feeling. Come on "I am only yours to hold," it sounds like you actually are implying belief in true love. Also, smited is not a word, the word is "Smote." Enough of your drama QQing, if this poem reflects you, then you need an immediate reality check. I'd like it, if I didn't think it was reflective of wasting life by feeling sorry for yourself. Good Day. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 You know Static...I WOULD facepalm you right now..but I'm not gonna because that's not what I SHOULD do... You have the idiocy to believe that I'm reflecting my life off of this? If I was, I would still be away from YCM trying to fix it. I made this poem as a way to tell people that I still write poems... And becasue I was insanely bored anyway... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Static Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 You know Static...I WOULD facepalm you right now..but I'm not gonna because that's not what I SHOULD do... You have the idiocy to believe that I'm reflecting my life off of this? If I was' date=' I would still be away from YCM trying to fix it. I made this poem as a way to tell people that I still write poems... And becasue I was insanely bored anyway...[/quote'] People don't write sappy junk like this if its not at least a little self reflective. Plus, your posting history tends to make me believe otherwise, and I hear you're always whining about something rather another from second hand sources. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodrun Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 Your return poem? >_> When did you leave? -.- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arekku_Koro Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 -.- You is strange... BUT I HUG YOU ALL ANYWAY!! *hugs everyone' date=' especially Arekku cuz he is smexy* XD ~Meti ^.^[/quote'] Lol, nice poem. It's very good.. I think you could be an other. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 ..yes..Arekku is nice a sexxy...lol Static..rest assure that I have changed that I promise I will not do that again..just post for entertainment now... And Bloodrun...nice to see you again too I guess.... Anyway, I left awhile ago because I wanted to fix some things in my life. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultimate Ryan Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 METI!!! thanks for calling me Ultimate Ryan in the tribute siggy ^^ I hate Ultra Rare >.> i want my old name back!! lol, welcome back METI not Sario Crystal but METI. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 heh heh. Hey Ryan..lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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