「tea.leaf」 Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 [align=center]When God, in his heavenWas creating the man,He wondered and paced,Pondered and thought,“Oh what, oh what,Should a man’s heart be of?” One angel said, “Gold,“So he may be prized!”Another said, “Stone,“So he may be strong!”A third said, “Flesh,“So he may have joy!”But the fourth said, “None,“So he won’t be hurt.” Yeah, I wrote this.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Sorry, too religious, but well written. It's my personal opinion that it is too religious for my taste, as other's have different tastes. -Agnostics are just complicated that way- -.- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Everyone knows I'm Buddhist/Agnostic/someone who doesn't acknowledge God. Although I had no such intentions at the time of writing, this poem attacks God's perfection. However, based on your personal values, you may judge differently. Your choice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Haha love it.And its gonna hit religious freaks hard. But this puts in deeper. Great work Tea ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Agnostic =/= Buddhist... Buddhist is one who praises Buddha. Agnostic is one who either of the following:-Believes in a higher being, but does not worship or praise.or-Does not believe in a higher being or diety or anything spiritual, but does not deny the possibility of an existing power or being or diety. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Buddha is a figurehead Meti. They do not praise him or what have you... (If they do, it probably is just about general respect).Its all about enlightenment which has nothing to do with a god or deity... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 'Tis religious, but still awesome. +rep for j00. PS: 2500 posts. W00t. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 wow, that is brilliant. ^_^ nothing, so he wont be hurt.. great poem. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frlf Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Great work Tea. Me likez.. :D. -Frlf Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarbleZone Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 "This is gonna hit religious freaks hard"?... Can't see how so. This sounds more of a critic towards man than God. Be that as it may, and speaking for somebody who dislikes teenage poetry in general, congratulations on your work; a very interesting text. ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted September 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Agnostic =/= Buddhist... Buddhist is one who praises Buddha. Agnostic is one who either of the following:-Believes in a higher being' date=' but does not worship or praise.or-Does not believe in a higher being or diety or anything spiritual, but does not deny the possibility of an existing power or being or diety.[/quote'] Buddhism denies the power and perfection of God. Therefore, in a sense, it is agnosticism. Buddhism does not require you to believe in its spiritual aspects. I see nothing wrong with being Buddhist and agnostic at the same time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Static Posted September 14, 2008 Report Share Posted September 14, 2008 Agnostic =/= Buddhist... Buddhist is one who praises Buddha. Incorrect. Buddhism is one who follows the teachings of the Buddha. Holding the Buddha in reverence is an incorrect following of Buddhism, commonly made by white people who are new to the religion. It is the practice of compassion, of others, and most of all, for self, for there is none who deserves ones praise more than ones self. It is the practice of meditation, because meditation helps achieve peace of mind and internal serenity. It is living a life to understand the world around you, to understand that it is connected, and to become one with it. (to be enlightened) Once you can get a swan to swim over to you by doing nothing more than meditating silently, then claim that your knowledge of Buddhism is greater than mine. Once you can fully understand that we live in a world where individualism is just an illusion created by society to establish social class and hierarchy, then claim you understand what is key to Buddhistic beliefs. The idea of God being conscious or unconscious in Buddhism is not clearly defined in the broad spectrum of Buddhism. I personally believe that it is not conscious, and I'm pretty sure that Marty is simply stating that she is not sure as to which, but will deny neither without proof. On the Poem: Amazing use of words to describe the way human beings feel. I really like how you used the Christianic interpretation of god to base the poem, it made it more interesting to read, especially coming from you. What inspired you to write this?, because I know that writing those last two lines had to come from some sort of event out of the norm. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted September 15, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 Agnostic =/= Buddhist... Buddhist is one who praises Buddha. Incorrect. Buddhism is one who follows the teachings of the Buddha. Holding the Buddha in reverence is an incorrect following of Buddhism' date=' commonly made by white people who are new to the religion. It is the practice of compassion, of others, and most of all, for self, for there is none who deserves ones praise more than ones self. It is the practice of meditation, because meditation helps achieve peace of mind and internal serenity. It is living a life to understand the world around you, to understand that it is connected, and to become one with it. (to be enlightened) Once you can get a swan to swim over to you by doing nothing more than meditating silently, then claim that your knowledge of Buddhism is greater than mine. Once you can fully understand that we live in a world where individualism is just an illusion created by society to establish social class and hierarchy, then claim you understand what is key to Buddhistic beliefs. The idea of God being conscious or unconscious in Buddhism is not clearly defined in the broad spectrum of Buddhism. I personally believe that it is not conscious, and I'm pretty sure that Marty is simply stating that she is not sure as to which, but will deny neither without proof. On the Poem: Amazing use of words to describe the way human beings feel. I really like how you used the Christianic interpretation of god to base the poem, it made it more interesting to read, especially coming from you. What inspired you to write this?, because I know that writing those last two lines had to come from some sort of event out of the norm.[/quote'] Beautiful comment. I don't quite remember the context... I was probably feeling mopey, even though I knew there was no point. Like, moping is a waste of time, but I have to do it anyway, just because... The heart wants what the heart wants. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 :/ Doesn't really seem religious to me. Just because it uses a religious analogy doesn't mean that it is religious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Abstract [Atrocity] Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 I'm religious and this doesn't offend me at all...It's just saying, put nothing in a man's heart so he won't be hurt. (wish that was me)I like it, and anyone who's offended by this is some anal little religious nutcase xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sixty Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 O_O +rep for choo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pikachu Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 no rhymes, but good rhythmlove it, second verse is the best... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted September 15, 2008 Report Share Posted September 15, 2008 really nice, great choice of words and rhythm and it's made of win =D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Static Posted September 16, 2008 Report Share Posted September 16, 2008 really nice' date=' great choice of words and rhythm and it's made of win =D[/quote'] Time to take this thread to the next level. We don't want them, we want everythingWe’ve stolen in this sufferingAnd we told them to want everythingBut use caution in what you believeAnd the haunted, deny everythingControlling in this sufferingWhen they’re broken, and lost everythingThey're so much easier to lead Take their hope awayTake their life awayLeave them nothing left inside When you’re own have diedWhen there's no more prideWhen your soul is frozenIs that enoughWhen your heart is brokenA thousand timesWith every momentIs that enough? Without warning, we take everythingUndaunted in this sufferingThe dark forces surround everythingMake it impossible to see Take their hope awayTake their life awayLeave them nothing left inside When you’re own have diedWhen there's no more prideWhen your soul is frozenIs that enoughWhen your heart is brokenA thousand timesWith every momentIs that enough? Haven't they suffered enough, Haven't we suffered enoughHaven't they suffered enough, The Damage more than they can bareHaven't they suffered enough, Haven't we suffered enoughHaven't they suffered enough, The Damage more than they can bare Did they even have the reason whyCountless sons and daughters had to dieCan you even comprehend the painTell me when your Own have diedWhen there's no more prideWhen your soul is frozenIs that enoughWhen your heart is brokenA thousand timesWith every momentIs that enough? When you’re own have died (have died)When there's no more pride (no more pride)When your soul is frozenIs that enough (Is that enough)When your heart is brokenA thousand timesWith every momentIs that enough? Discuss. If you don't see the comparison, then you're not reading hard enough Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Quicksilver Posted September 16, 2008 Report Share Posted September 16, 2008 so that's why I'm an empty shell. Because there's nothing in my heart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yasu Posted September 16, 2008 Report Share Posted September 16, 2008 Awesome... Questioning god perfection lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted September 16, 2008 Report Share Posted September 16, 2008 Static, which song is that =\ it's nice and i think i understood the comparison =\ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Death Metal Posted September 17, 2008 Report Share Posted September 17, 2008 Nice peom but where are all the demons? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MasterOfMagicians Posted September 18, 2008 Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 Couple of great poems on here.I'm not a religious man myself, and I know even less about poetry, but it all sounds like it flows and works together. Great job, keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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