Bengal Posted September 18, 2008 Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 Ancient Dragon Jabaron Effect: For 3 of your opponent's turns, this card gains 200 ATK and DEF during each of his/her Stanby Phases. If this effect is negated by a Spell or Trap Card, destroy this card immeadiatly, you must then discard 1 card from your hand to the Graveyard. If this card's effect is negated by another Monster Card effect, you can randomly discard 1 card from your opponent's hand to the Graveyard. At the end of your opponent's 3rd turn after this card was Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 level 4 or lower Dragon-Type monster from your Deck in face-up Attack Position. Artist credit on the card, please comment and rate. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skyson Posted September 18, 2008 Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 "This card gains 200 ATK and DEF during each of your opponent's Standby Phases, for your opponent's next 3 Standby Phases." is how I think you want to word the first effect. "...this card is immediately destroyed and you must discard 1 card from your hand" is how I believe the immediate-destruction effect would be worded. I don't know about it perfectly, but that's my guess. The E in Monster Card Effect isn't capitalized. "After 3 of your opponent's turns after this card is Summoned" is redundant. Try "At the end of your opponent's 3rd turn after this card was Summoned, you can..." instead. OCG done, which I normally don't look at. The effect itself is odd. It gains ATK during your opponent's turns, and after 3 turns of being face-up, should it last that long (as few things without built-in support will do) you get a free Level 3 or lower Dragon-Type summon to accompany him. The biggest thing I would pull [almost any time with these Dragon supports] is Masked Dragon. I'd also be inclined to pull out Decoy Dragon, since he could pull up another copy of this card to re-use its turn effect. The negation part is oddly worded, but I can't say I know of any cards that "have an effect when they're negated." Negated by Skill Drain, you have to discard 1 card. Negated by Destiny Hero - Plasma, your opponent has to discard 1 card. Those aren't the only cards, obviously, but those came to my mind first. I like the unique idea of forcing a discard upon negation, and the Special Summon effect is decent, though having this out for 3 turns (in which it would have 3100 ATK, which is always respectable) would normally constitute something bigger. 3 turns is a lot, which a lot of people don't believe. 3 turns can mean the beginning and end of a duel in a lot of metagame Decks' cases. I like the idea of the card, but for some reason it feels kind of underpowered. Not very, and it really doesn't affect the rating, but I think it could get away with summoning a Level 4 or lower Dragon-Type. :/ 8/10, good card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bengal Posted September 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 Thank you very much for the comments and fixes, I appreciate your input. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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XENOCIDEX Posted September 18, 2008 Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 hmm, if you increased the level limit of a dragon it summons, it wouldn't be so overpowered as to put it at 6, because, Traditional format: its dead in 2 turns at mostAdvanced: you will be tempted to attack with it and it will die from sakerestu or lightning vortex etc and there aren't TOO many powerful lvl 6 dragons :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted September 18, 2008 Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 The pic is OK, OCG is OK, but I think you worded it wrong. Balanced, I would assume. 7/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bengal Posted September 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 Thanks for comments, and XENOCIDEX, are you saying I should increase the card level to 6? or increase the limit of the level the monster it can special summon to be 6? If so, I think that would make it a little overpowered. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TGTwtfDXD Posted September 18, 2008 Report Share Posted September 18, 2008 you spelled immediatly wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted September 19, 2008 Report Share Posted September 19, 2008 Pic suits the name. I like it. ^_^Good card overall.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BulletMan Posted September 19, 2008 Report Share Posted September 19, 2008 its cool.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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