First Card

[FireGirl87]

ok i know im a "noob" and im a girl so im not really good at making cards but here is my 1st card so let me kno wat you think ok...please don't be too harsh :/

 

 

Each time this card destroys 1 monster on your opponent's side of the field remove it from play instead of sending it to the Graveyard. Increase the ATK of this card by the number of your opponent's cards removed from play x 200 points.

 

Image Credit goes to: Ravinwing

[Bengal]

Not bad, it is a little overpowered though, I would say make it a lvl 7 or 8. The OCG isn't bad, and although the effect isn't very original, it atleast works.

 

Also decrease the amount of ATK this card gains for every monster removed from play down to 100 instead of 200.

[aaronpoe1988]

Not bad, not bad at all.

 

It is a little overpowered though, but I don't believe because of low level; I believe because of lack of theme. Then again, I am one of the few people to truly still want themes to be held to as such.

 

I would suggest EITHER raising the Level 1 star, or Lowering the starting attack value by 200, in terms of making the card fair-er.

 

And feel slightly more thematic. :-)

 

Funny how "firegirl" started off making a Water monster.

 

~Poe the Carpathian

[vang911]

make it lvl 7. and maybe lower its atk by 100.. the pic. is overused..

not bad for being your first card!

7.5/10

[FireGirl87]

thanks for the comments Bengal, Aaron, and Vang. I also took wat aaron said and reduced the ATK to 2200 and the DEF to 2100 to make it more fair and even with the effect. ^_^

[Paddyman]

Good card, not bad at all. 7/10

[Dark]

For a newbie? Awesomeness. The effect is boring, but barely any OCG errors. Pic is overused, but, still, the pic works. Definatley playable. 8/10.

[Lord Ursus]

ok i know im a "noob" and im a girl so im not really good at making cards but here is my 1st card so let me kno wat you think ok...please don't be too harsh :/

 

Just because you are a girl doesn't mean you are a bad card maker. The card is actually very nice, considering it is your first. A bright new talent shines here in YCM. It's YOU. ^_^

 

O.

[StevenBray]

First off, it is ironic that FireGirl's first card is a WATER monster but none the less:

 

Pic isn't bad at all, OCG is good, except for 1 thing: "your opponent's side of the field" is no longer used, it's just "your opponent's field" now. Plus I think you need a comma after the word "field", since it's a mouthful otherwise.

 

Effect is good and balanced, but not truly original. This card gains power from crippling the opponent's strategy by removing cards from play, and since there are many ways to support this card it could be very dangerous to use. So due to that I would make it a Level 7 instead of a 6.

 

Card Rating: 7.5/10 - for a n00b, this is very nice. And just because your a girl, that doesn't make you a bad card maker - only time will tell how good a of card maker you'll be.

[Basherbelding]

Wow, my account is over a year old and i can't do that good, wow its great. I mean for you'r first card its fantastic. :) :D :P ;) :lol:

 

First Card 10/10

Real Rating 9.5/10

[Sigma]

This is actually pretty good for your first card,balanced and not overpowered,9/10

[Silas Angel]

great begining to a possibly great legacy here at YCM ^_^ congratulations +rep for you

[Atlasindle]

9/10 for your first. I'm not one to talk though, I haven't yet shown what I've created. 8) And what difference would of it been if you were male? Don't be so hard on yourself.

[Matteron]

not bad little overpowered either raise it to level 7 or drop down the Atk and Def to 1900-1500.

7.5/10

[thunderfang12]

OP'ed

Couple Of OCG Errors

Otherwise Good Card From A New Member

8/10

[Doctor]

use opponent's field instead of opponent's side of the field

not bad ocg at all

good pic

8/10 well done

[PrimalFear]

needs work on ocg overused pic but good for a noob 6/10

[╬「Selatcia」╬]

Take out "points" at the end of the effect.

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Impressive for a new member.

9/10 - NR

8/10 - OR

[FireGirl87]

thank you everyone for the comments hopefully my next cards i make will be good like this one ^_^ but lol you kno me i didn't really think it was that good

[Delta Guardian]

hey you should have told me that you made ur 1st card...im supposed to look at for you after all...well the pic is overused...but its hard to find decent pics that haven't been used these days...i think im going to have 2 go with wat Steven said "This card gains power from crippling the opponent's strategy by removing cards from play, and since there are many ways to support this card it could be very dangerous to use. So due to that I would make it a Level 7 instead of a 6." OCG is excellent for your 1st card

 

8/10

[Apocolypse]

Well, you've heard enough constructive critisism, I hope it was all helpful. You did very good for your first, keep creating. 8.5/10 for this one.

[jabura86]

wow, my great friend has post her first card! :)

I had already seen it, and I repeat my comment: very good card, don't repeat that you aren't good to make cards! :)

But i prefered it with the originl atk, 2400 :)

you're my great friend! :)

[FireGirl87]

aww im sorry Danny i thought i told you that i posted my 1st card but i guess not but thanks for rating it ^_^ and thanks for the comment Apocolypse and thank you for your comment Nico ^_^

[fitz0889]

If they think you are a noob their wrong, awesome first card keep it up so 8/10

[FireGirl87]

thank you for commenting fitz...many of you are soo kind i guess i thought since not many girls like or play yu-gi-oh that i would suck at making cards