Doctor Who deck!

[dan.r]

my first lot, sorry if they're no good

 

 

[SSJ3Goku]

Why did you post two threads? Anyway, OCG errors and there are some cards you need that you didnt even make.

[dan.r]

i tried to delete the first one, said i can't

[WooperSlim]

Apology accepted. ;)

 

You should be able to delete your other thread. The delete button should be next to the edit button at the bottom of the post.

 

Cyberman: Warrior type is fine, you don't need Alien. In fact, the Cyberman you show isn't an alien, but from Earth. If it has to be a normal monster, at least give it better flavor text. It's good that it's short, but it needs improvement.

 

Dalek Leader: That effect should be on the equip card, not on both. Make it 8 stars.

 

Dalek Defense: Put quotation marks around "Dalek Leader." Capitalize and put quotes around "Dalek Token," and follow it with (in parenthesis) the token's type, attribute, level, ATK, and DEF, separated with slashes.

 

Dalek Token: You don't make cards for tokens. Tokens are just coins, or something similar.

 

For the Doctor's companions, Donna is the only one with the sub-type Assistant. Are they all supposed to be? It would be much more interesting if they didn't all have the same effect. But, in any case, to give your cards the proper card grammar, it would be: "When "The Doctor" is face-up on the field, you can add 1000 ATK and DEF to every Assistant monster on the field." If you really do want this to be an optional effect, leave "you can" there, but if not, take it out.

 

Sonic Screwdriver: needs correct card grammar, and needs to be more specific. How about "You can activate this effect each of your Standby Phases. Your opponent discards 1 random card from his/her hand." If you don't really want it to be an optional effect, change the first part to "Each of your Standby Phases, your opponent..."

 

The Doctor: To have more correct grammar: "This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card "T.A.R.D.I.S.". If this card attacks successfully, you can Special Summon 1 Assistant monster from your hand or Deck." You may want to change "attack successfully," to either "destroys a monster your opponent controls" or "inflicts Battle Damage"