uhh_12345 Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 2 Spellcaster-Type monsters from your Graveyard from play. When this card destroys an opponent's monster in battle, activate 1 of the following effects:*Return 1 monster from your Graveyard to the top of your Deck. Your Deck is then shuffled.*Remove the destroyed monster from play. --Not the greatest- But I think it's a start... Hopefully... *Edited* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set.This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 2 Spellcaster-Type monsters from your Graveyard from play. When this card destroys an opponent's monster as a result of battle, select and activate one of the following effects:Return 1 monster from your Graveyard to your Deck. Then, shuffle your Deck.Remove the destroyed monster from play. Change level to 8, DEF to 2400, ATK to 2900, good pic, though it needs a background. 5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saturn of Elemia Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 Not bad for a first card. Take the Professor's advice and this will be GREAT! 7/10 as is. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sammidysam Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 OGC errors. 6/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uhh_12345 Posted September 29, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 Alright, thanks for the suggestions and criticism. *Edited* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 Very nice. Only thing -> 1 not one. A very good start. Next time remember the art credit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brawler_1337 Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 Yes, indeed, quite a good start. Maybe get a pic with a background. A little OP with ATK. Switch ATK and DEF, maybe. Overall, 7.75/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uhh_12345 Posted September 29, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 Oh right...! Now how did I go and forget that...?! Credit to: http://www.webweaver.nu/clipart/img/web/textures/09.jpg -And- http://i303.photobucket.com/albums/nn130/natural_dreamer/my%20naruto%20squad/naruto%20rp%20album/anime_boy-1.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mister Sir Posted September 29, 2008 Report Share Posted September 29, 2008 7/10 Pretty good for a newbie ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥ ЅϯᵲåώӀӞ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ ♥ Posted September 30, 2008 Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Um... I think it's fine, but you should put spaces after your periods. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uhh_12345 Posted September 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Yeah... I somehow missed that first space... Not sure how though... *Edited* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted September 30, 2008 Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Impressive for a new member. Very nice. ^_^ 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fairy Knight King Posted September 30, 2008 Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Wow that is such a great card for a first my first card was this below\/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
«₣lџχ» Posted September 30, 2008 Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Here's an ocg fix:This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 2 Spellcaster-Type monsters from your Graveyard from play. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, activate 1 of the following effects:*Return 1 monster from your Graveyard to the top of your Deck. Your Deck is then shuffled.*Remove the destroyed monster from play. I reckon you should lower the ATK to 2500-2800, and remember to give pic credit. 1 of the best for a newbie though, Well Done :D 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Card maker snobben Posted September 30, 2008 Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Nice, for the first time Good jobb !________________________________________ Make more cards all card makers ( Even me ) ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
personman Posted September 30, 2008 Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 I say you should change the "from" before "your Graveyard" to "in", but it doesn't really make a difference. Anyway, good card for a newb. And I like how you quickly make changes to the card. Taking advice deserves a +rep. Fairy balanced. A little bit on the OP side with the first effect, but not too much. Not sure how to make that more balanced and not make it UP. And a cool pic to boot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
uhh_12345 Posted September 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted September 30, 2008 Thank you for all of the advice and criticism. *Edited* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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