Luna Diviner Posted October 24, 2008 Report Share Posted October 24, 2008 I was given some homework to finish of the Landlady by Roal Dahl and I thought, I should share my work with the members of YCM. A small grin crept up the side of Billy’s face, “This lady is loony.” He thought to himself. The elderly woman took a sip from the cup, the brown liquid, slipped gently down her throat, the action taking no less than a couple of seconds. She lowered her cup to rest on the tray and turned to face Billy and a weak smile grew on her face. “I think you best be getting some sleep young lad. I don’t want you to be late for that business meeting” she said politely “See, I treat you much better than they will at the run down Bell and Dragon” she added on. Billy jolted up in shock, staring at the pale grey and ancient woman that starred at him innocently, “But h-ow..” Then Billy noticed that he really was tired. He gestured goodnight to the Landlady by waving his head and left his seat, to go up the stairs to his sleeping quarters. Dreams of stuffed creatures becoming animate and wicked Landladies cursed Billy’s mind for most of the night, Billy began to sweat and shake. He jolted awake, taking a few seconds to get used to the darkness. He heard something above him, the sound of hysterical laughter to be exact. Billy thought, maybe he should investigate the source of the mysterious noise. But, he didn’t want to intrude on anything or the woman could just speak in her sleep, Billy decided. “No, I’ll just go back to sleep.” Billy told himself and pulled his blanket over the rim of his nose and he closed his eyes. During the first minute of his attempt to go back to his slumber, Billy’s eyes would flicker open to inquisitively trying to pry around the room to see if he would notice anything he hadn’t seen previously but it pointless to do so in this light so Billy just went back to sleep. Billy ferociously grabbed hold of his pillow and used it to cover his ears, he was trying to get some sleep and somebody was laughing their head of upstairs. He couldn’t take it anymore; the sound of the laughing was driving him insane. Billy pulled the long piece of string near his head, turning on the gas lamp and it brought light and a small amount of heat to his room. Billy Weaver wasn’t a coward. And to prove this, Billy Weaver needed to do some investigating. Billy climbed up the staircase until he reached the third floor. Only three rooms were in his range of vision and he could hear that the laughter was coming from the room nearest to him. Billy had to be brave, Billy wasn’t a coward, Billy was strong, Billy wasn’t weak, Billy had courage, Billy didn’t run at the sign of danger, Billy could face anything! Billy turned the knob on the door and entered the room; the floor of the room was lined with pieces of paper. He picked one up that contained an image of the Landlady and it said on it, ‘Mrs Laura J. Lewis’ and he scrolled down ‘Died on the 7th February 1937. 1899 – 1937. Reason: Suicide.’ The woman couldn’t have been dead and she couldn’t have been a spirit or anything of that sort, it broke scientific law. Billy heard a soft explosion and a streamline bullet whizzed past his head, missing him by a couple of inches. Another bullet ricochets of the door chipping it and slammed into Billy’s left index finger. Billy yelped in pain and turned to see whom it was that was firing. He saw the woman, Laura J. Lewis, holding a small handgun, pointed squarely at his face. Billy ducked slightly and ran forward but he was trapped, captured, the Landlady lured him into her trap and now he had to pay the price. Billy thought of an idea, the Landlady was just a scrawny old woman and he was a brawny, young man. He charged towards the woman but he soon felt weak and he fell to the floor. “Don’t try, the tea contained potassium cyanide, though you didn’t take enough to be killed, even one sip will eventually weaken you. Leaving your imminent death closer and closer.” She cackled. Billy felt scared, what was source of the laughter he asked himself. He scanned the room and he located a tape player. It was quite advance for a woman of such an age. The Landlady loaded her gun and put her weak bony finger on the trigger. She pushed back, pulling the trigger, releasing the bullet from the barrel of the gun, a Colt M1911A1 to be exact. Travelling towards Billy at 253 metres per second. Billy tried to dodge but no man could dodge bullets and the he learned that the painful way. The steel rimmed bullet penetrated the skin of his neck. In a matter of miliseconds, Billy’s life was over. “I’ll patch that up real quick, love.” Spoke the Landlady calmly and she moved his body aside next to the wall. As Billy’s body lay lifelessly, leaning against the wall. The Landlady pulled out a sheet of paper, that had a few names written on it and two of them had been crossed of. She crossed of where it said, Billy Weaver. “Well I’ve ended Billy.” She said quitley “Now the only one left” she chuckled slightly. “Is” and she paused. “You!” ---------------------------------------------------------------------Rate properly but remember, I am only 11 so I am not extremely skilled. And the ending is to make it sound more dramatic, when reading infront of an audience. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted October 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 BUMP! NOW LISTEN YOU IDIOTS! POST! NOW! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pikachu Posted October 25, 2008 Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 U copyz me? O.OOh yea, a few errors (I could go on but I read te first paragraph only):"This lady is loony," (yes, commas is a must) The elderly woman took a sip from her cup as it slipped gently down her throat, the action taking no less than a couple of seconds. (this sentence was jibberish, this should be better) She lowered her cup to rest on the tray and turned to face Billy as a weak smile grew on her face (should be as) Your first review ~Pikachu p.s Care to look at mine? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Black Rose Phoenix® Posted October 25, 2008 Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 Great job Rahim, other than the above error's... You should get an A, but if you have a really evil teacher, then atleast a B... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spiff! Posted October 25, 2008 Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 wow.you is awesome.you gets A. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arekku_Koro Posted October 25, 2008 Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 But... the guy was killed in part one... It was poison in his drink... hence the bitter almond taste... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted October 25, 2008 Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 Wall of text. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted October 25, 2008 Author Report Share Posted October 25, 2008 U copyz me? O.OOh yea' date=' a few errors (I could go on but I read te first paragraph only):"This lady is loony," (yes, commas is a must) [b']The elderly woman took a sip from her cup as it slipped gently down her throat,[/b] the action taking no less than a couple of seconds. (this sentence was jibberish, this should be better) She lowered her cup to rest on the tray and turned to face Billy as a weak smile grew on her face (should be as) Your first review ~Pikachu p.s Care to look at mine?I posted this before yours. I think Sorry Crabby. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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