SomethingMaker Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 These are my first card for my first set/pack. Image is from Googleand can you please tell me any mistakes I have made.Fixed to what K.B and everyone else has said so far.Thank you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K.B. strategist Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Turn = turnField = field1, not one...can destroy 1 Set card on the field...you forgot the word "card" in the first sentence Pretty good for your first card, I see you read the ocg & grammar section unlike most noobs and you effect is fairly interesting. The pic has been used a lot though and I know there are better options out there... FCR: 9/10SR: 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 hmmmm.....was wondering about the pic, >> I have another one should I post another one of it next to my other card? and to tell the truth I just read lot of topics before making an account so... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bengal Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Exceptional for your first card. The picture is overused, though you may not know that, the OCG/grammar is suprisingly good, just take the advice from K.B., and the effect is pretty decent. I would say lower its DEF to 2300 or so though. New member rate: 9/10 Normal Rate: 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 ty Bengal ^^ hmmm...Well....should I change pick? I have like 2-3 other pics that I could use for it and made another card (yes 2 cards in an hour, lets just say I have had ideas for like 3-4 years) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Added 2 more cards. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bunter Dwayne Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Really good for a first card. OCG errors, but 8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Can you tell me the errors? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
∮.Ғσяgσттeи.SσℓÐιєя.∮ Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 well,read k.b strategist's post.anyway,7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dendalus Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 i like the pics there really cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Knight121198 Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 ya really good pics and effects i wouldnt want to face your custom deck with these bad boys in em :) 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
knucklesx Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 8/10 also Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 The first pic is overuse but you OCG seems pretty good, 8.1/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Future L Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Switch Normal Summoned or Set, good pics, add a comma after Once per turn, use 1 all the time, don't capitalize effect or hand. 7.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted November 13, 2008 Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 Normal Summoned or Set, nice pics, add a comma after turn, use 1, not one, don't capitalize effect or hand. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2008 thank you guys and edited also, I might add some more cards and to Knight121198 you never want to meet them in a dark ally ^,..,^Added a new card and man does it make a sweet combo with Graveyard of Lost Souls ^^ also changing topic name because now I have more than my first card. ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 3 more cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShaneBeutler Posted November 14, 2008 Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 The Picture's were ok. Some effects good some bad, but the written OCG's were pretty bad.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 Like what? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShaneBeutler Posted November 14, 2008 Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 Minor OCG errors, punctuation erorrs here and there but good job with every card all the pictures and stuff. Are these part of a Booster Pack design, if so I want to see your design for the Booster Pack itself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 >> where can I make the Booster Pack? and I'm thinking of maybe the Graveyard of Lost Souls as pic or Death Tornado maybe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jazza 101 Posted November 14, 2008 Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 a LOT of people like the pic on lost soul envy. i have it. good pics Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 Thanks, should I use Envy for Booster Pack pic? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
iKiller Posted November 14, 2008 Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 Pretty solid OCG for a new member like yourself. Good images, not too overpowered, 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SomethingMaker Posted November 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 14, 2008 Thanks Also, got my next batch of cards almost done, should be any day now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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