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~: / Yu-Gi-Oh! Song of Domino \:~ Chapter 7 Up! "Wrong again, maggot."

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Kodashi will be having his share of the spotlight, don't worry; about what kind of role he will play though, I'll be keeping that a secret. ;)

 

Also, thanks both of you! And TotalObelisk, incidentally I just started reading your own work today, and I'm loving it! I'm hoping you see it to the end, I hate it when good stories go unfinished! :)

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Damn, I was hoping that for once, against all odds, the "bad guy" would win, but I was let down again. Oh well, it's not the first time, won't be the last either =S

 

That aside, it was well-done, although I generally hate the existence of "men with black robes". Come on, not every fodder villain everywhere has to wear them all the time. And can't they be women for a change?

 

You're doing well, but you've kinda cliche'ing things a bit there. I'd look out for that if I were you.

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Damn' date=' I was hoping that for once, against all odds, the "bad guy" would win, but I was let down again. Oh well, it's not the first time, won't be the last either =S

 

That aside, it was well-done, although I generally hate the existence of "men with black robes". Come on, not every fodder villain everywhere has to wear them all the time. And can't they be women for a change?

 

You're doing well, but you've kinda cliche'ing things a bit there. I'd look out for that if I were you.

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But I never said they were bad guys - neither Kodashi nor the man in robes. :D

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Damn' date=' I was hoping that for once, against all odds, the "bad guy" would win, but I was let down again. Oh well, it's not the first time, won't be the last either =S

 

That aside, it was well-done, although I generally hate the existence of "men with black robes". Come on, not every fodder villain everywhere has to wear them all the time. And can't they be women for a change?

 

You're doing well, but you've kinda cliche'ing things a bit there. I'd look out for that if I were you.

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But I never said they were bad guys - neither Kodashi nor the man in robes. :D

 

Considering the way he acted, Yudou is seeming more like a bad guy than either of them...

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Yeah, Yudou got all Orichalchos Yami back there, and it was fun as heck writing it! :)

 

But I'm not going to reveal any "alignments" so far. For all you know, Yudou could be the villain and Kodashi the (anti)hero... I'll leave you to wonder as I work on a plot-developing chapter that might not feature any duels - yeah, it's boring, but necessary sometimes. ;)

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Chapter 6

 

Kuro: 4000 LP

Rai: 150 LP

 

"On your feet, boy... we're not done."

 

"Wha... What's going on here?... Duel disks, real monsters, real pain... this can't be happening... My body hurts all over... But I can't... I will not lose!"

"Draw! I activate Swing of Memories to Special Summon Great Dragon Zagorian from the Graveyard! Now I summon Metalborn Virus!"

 

"Again the same mistake..."

 

"Fusion Summon! Rise, Perfect Hybrid Metalgorian!"

 

The metallic dragon rose indeed, in a spectacular sight of flames, sparks and glowing steel. The gigantic creature took flight and roared menacingly at his opponent, who didn't even flinch.

 

"Now, my trap card, Xing Zhen Hu!"

 

"Chain... Mystical Space Typhoon..."

 

"What?! Damn... No difference. Limiter Malfunction, activate! Metalgorian, crush his monster!"

 

"Trap... Mirror Force..."

 

Metalgorian unleashed a beam of light that crashed into a rainbow dome, and multiple smaller beams reflected back towards the dragon, which was destroyed.

 

"It... can't be!" said Rai in shock, as his body grew weaker and weaker. "T.. turn end..."

 

 

Kuro: 4000 LP

Rai: 150 LP

 

Kuro dropped the hood of his robe, revealing a very old man with short, white beard. His eyes couldn't possible belong to the man who had been inflicting slow, torturing pain on Rai for the last twenty minutes. Those eyes were full of sorrow and disappointment.

He turned off his duel disk, and Rai's automatically did so as well a second later. The holograms disappeared, but the young man's pain did not.

 

"You felt it... the pain, the unbearable pain. And in your mind you know, that if I had attacked you now, your body would not have endured it..." The man looked sad, and for some reason Rai, who was standing on one knee, couldn't bear to look the elder in the eyes.

"Rai Satake... your closest friend, whom you are yet to acknowledge as so, was faced with this same adversity not long ago. You saved his life, but chose to close your eyes, ears and heart to what really happened... Yudou Shinji faced a man in the exact same conditions you just did, and would have won if not by circumstances beyond his control. He has matured and is ready to be introduced to his destiny... I hoped you were as well, before they found you first... The balance is tipped in favour of some, and it should not be so by the time of the Battle. Improve, Rai... and acknowledge the heart of your Deck. Your devotion lies in the wrong ally... Go and improve, before it's too late. Or you will be eliminated before the Battle even begins."

 

"Wh.. what are you talking about? You're not making any sense... Who are you?!"

 

The old man looked at the sky; the sun had set, and it had started to rain. "Kuro is not my name, but that of somebody you will eventually cross your path. I am the Neutral... the Judge." he said, as he turned around and walked away.

 

"W..wait!" Rai got back up on his feet, but a stabbing pain in his heart grounded him again when he began to run after the mysterious elder. "What... what the hell is going on here?! You know, don't you... Yudou?... You know..."

 

He passed out.

 

---

 

"Yudou-kun, there you are! Where is he?!"

She was one year younger than Yudou - eighteen. Like her brother Rai, her hair was white. Unlike Rai though, she had blue eyes , so somewhere down the line Mendel had screwed up in his theory.

 

"Rin-san? Where is who?..."

 

He was sitting in one of the park's benches. It was Autumn, the weather was chilly, but he liked it there. He always went for a walk in West Domino's park when he wanted to sort out his ideas, and God knew how scrambled they were right now. But it was always pleasant to see Rin, even when she was visibly upset.

 

"Rai, who else?! He didn't come home last night, after that tournament you two went to... You better tell me where he is or I'll make you go look for him!"

 

"What? Rai is missing?"

He hadn't seen him since he left the tourney site the day before, angry at Yudou. Him going missing had too many implications, he had to show up fast.

 

Rai and Rin lived with their mother. Their father had died shortly after Rin was born, and their mother contracted a debilitating disease some years ago. It had been up to the two siblings to take care of her, each other and the house since then. And as hard-working and dependable as Rin was, it had always been Rai's task to bring home the money. Indeed, even while they were in school, Rai was already working part-time to earn whatever little he could, since their mother was in no condition to work herself.

 

But surely, he couldn't have gone far - even if it was completely unlike Rai not to head straight home by nightfall.

 

"Yes, mom is sick worried, and so am I! It's not like my brother at all... You sure you don't know where he could be, Yudou?"

 

"I... I really don't, Rin-san. I'm sorry. But I'll go look for him, don't worry. I'll find your brother."

He tried to sound calm, and he always did a good job at it, but deep inside his heart was racing - he prayed that Rai didn't do anything stupid after their argument the day before.

 

"Thank you... I'm just concerned, you know how it is..."

 

"Certainly. Next time we see each other, I'll have your brother, I promise."

He headed back to the place where the tourney had taken place, leaving Rin behind. He wasn't going to wait for her to tag along, it'd be too awkward... and uncomfortable.

 

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"You failed miserably. Hino. As we knew you would."

"Predictable indeed, Hino. Ergai-sama will probably be upset..."

"I always said he'd be a hindrance. Why hasn't Ergai disposed of him yet?"

 

Four man were in the room. All were wearing black suits with black shirts underneath, and each had a tie with a different color. Three of them sat at one side of a large conference table; the last one, wearing the red tie, stood across it.

 

Hino was still visibly shook from the events at the old warehouse, where he nearly lost his life in the fire that consumed it. His faced was partially burned, but fortunately it'd heal overtime, like it always did. He hoped.

Fire had always been his friend. Now in his fifties, he had played with fire countless times before, got burned every single time, and always recovered. This, however, had been the first time he felt scared.

 

"The boy... Ergai-sama was right! He really is..."

 

"Silence." a deep voice echoed through the room. A man with the same suit and black tie stood at the door, directly behind Hino. He had short black hair, and white beard. His eyes were light-blue, and his visage was that of a man in his late forties.

"Hino-san. It has come to my ears that you lost against Yudou Shinji."

 

"Er... Ergai-sama!" Hino lowered his head and looked straight at the ground. Being one who enjoyed flames, the cold shiver that crawled down his spine felt particularly unpleasant.

"I did not lose, the match..."

"Battle."

"Y..yes, my apologies, the battle did not reach a conclusion... as I'm sure you are aware, the collision of our monsters resulted in a..."

"As you said, I am aware. I am also aware that, had it been an... ordinary duel, Yudou would still have had one monster to attack you with, and you would not have been able to stop it..."

"You know?! I-I mean, you are correct, Ergai-sama, pl-please don't..."

"Excellent job, Hino-san."

"Wha... I mean... thank you, sir..."

One of the men sitting at the table, the one wearing a green tie, suddenly got up.

"Excellent?! He got his ass handed to him! What do you mean by "excellent"?!"

Ergai's light blue eyes stared straight at the man, an untamed ferocity glowing for a brief moment. The man sat back down.

"You will speak properly in this room, Kaito-san. May this be your last reminder. Thanks to Hino's complete failure, it is now evident that our time is coming to an end, and that the new generation is nearly ready to take over. So..."

The man with blue tie smiled.

"...So it's time we tell our future all about our past."

Ergai smiled back.

"Precisely. Hopefully they will succeed in completing what we started. Oh, and Hino?..."

The man still hadn't raised his head. He clenched his fists when he heard his name. "Yes, sir?"

"You can have him. But make sure you do a proper job this time, unlike what happened when you went for Yudou."

"Th... Thank you, Ergai-sama! I will make him see the reason, I promise. I'm sure he'll go past the weak legacy of his mother... I will not fail you."

 

The man at the table all got up and started leaving the room, lowering their heads when they passed Ergai, in a sign of respect. Kaito, the man in green tie, tilted his head instead, rather than lowering it. Ergai noticed it, but Kaito had never been one to take authority seriously. No matter, as long as he was useful.

As Ergai himself turned around to leave, Hino looked up again.

"Ergai-sama?"

He did not turn around to face Hino, but stopped, waiting for the rest of the question.

"You... told me my mission was to kill Yudou Shinji. Why?"

"Because I knew you would fail in doing so. If I had told you my real intentions, you might have gone easier on the boy, and in doing so, you might have been beaten without any kind of manifestation from the youngster. By convincing you that his death would be your triumph, I got both of you to play with everything you had."

 

He walked out of the room, leaving behind a puzzled Hino.

 

---

 

"Rai?"

Yudou had searched for his friend all day. It was getting dark already, and he was back where he had started: the park. Somebody sitting in one of the benches looked just like... no, it was him.

"Rai!"

The white-haired man looked up with an empty expression.

"... Yudou."

"Rai, where were you? You got your sister and your mother very worried, it's not like..."

"Shut it. I know." He got up and started walking away.

"Rai. Wait. What happened to you? Are you... alright?"

"... I'm fine. Go home, Yudou. You're obviosuly not recovered yet. Next time, think twice before running off to do whatever my sister asks you to... You'll look like a fool again."

With that, he walked away. He had never been very friendly, but he was still obviously upset about what happened the day before. However, Yudou could sense that wasn't all that was going through Rai's mind.

 

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There, a new chapter. This has nearly no action, but chapters such as this are necessary. I promise the next one will be much more exciting. Well, it'll have duels. I don't know if I can make them exciting or not. :P

 

Again, apologies for the lack of action, but well, there should be some kind of story somewhere between the incessant gaming. :P

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