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It was a good chapter, but it still gave off a rushed feeling. I approve of slowing down the pace between duels to introduce and emphasize upon the plot, but you seem to get on with it particularly fast, as if you intend to speed through it and get back to the action. You are handling the story well, but I believe you should slow the rate at which you go through with it down a bit. And having more duels isn't neccessary bad - in this scenario, a - seemingly irrelevant to the current events - duel to break the tension between Yudou's search for Rai and the blackcoats' discussion would be very fitting. Space things out a bit.

 

Other than that, well done as usual. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

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After 6 chapters, "seems to be ok 8/10" tells me you either didn't read the whole thing, or couldn't be bothered to make a more in-depth comment. Either option coupled with the shameless advertisement that followed makes me thing your post was a complete waste of time. :/

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Chapter 7

 

"Rai! You're home, thank God! What happened to you?"

 

Rin hugged his brother. She wasn't really worried, since Rai didn't look hurt, and the ill-humoured look wasn't exactly a new acquisition for his range of facial expressions.

 

"Nothing, Rin. I'll go tell mother I'm home."

 

"O-okay, I'll... be upstairs then..."

On second thought, maybe she should be worried. It wasn't like Rai to dismiss her like that, and it certainly wasn't like him to willingly go talk with their mother. Not that he didn't love her... but he always felt guilty near her. She never really understood what he blamed himself for - if for their father's death,or their mother's illness. He wouldn't tell her, but she could tell that mom's praises hurt Rai more than they made him happy.

 

After a while, Rai entered the room. They shared it since they were little, in part because they couldn't afford a bigger house, in part because even if they did have their own rooms, they would spend most of the time in only one of them, talking or dueling together , so it kind of defeated the purpose anyway.

 

On closer inspection, Rai did seem more than just moody.

 

"Did you come across Yudou, by any chance?" she asked.

"Yes. Why did you send him to get me anyway? I'm not your pet, I don't need to be found!"

"Oh, shut it. You're just mad because I asked Yudou. Anyway, what's on your mind this time? And don't tell me it's nothing, we both know better than that."

 

Rai couldn't help but crack a smile. That was just like Rin. She wasn't fond of small talk; she went straight to the point, and arguing with her never did any good.

 

"And why are you carrying that thing in your arm? You do realize you're a bit too old to be playing with duel disks, right?"

 

He had forgotten all about it. It didn't place a lot of weight on his arm, and with all that had been going on in his mind, he had dismissed it. The duel disk that old man gave him before gracing him with the most terrifying minutes of his life, where monsters became real before his eyes, as did pain... The pain had gone away long ago, but the man's words clinged to his mind and echoed again and again.

 

"Rin... I need your help."

 

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"Hey, if it ain't Mr. Sore Loser!"

 

The dozens of people that hurried along the crowded street all seemed to slow down and turn their heads at the excessively loud remark.

On one side of the street, Bolt Nagashi stood smiling and looking straight ahead at another man.

That man was a deranged-looking Gen Kodashi.

 

"What did you say, worm?!"

 

The events of the past day clearly hadn't settled properly in Kodashi's mind yet. The loud, obnoxious Bolt was the last man he wanted to see, and he decided to make that painfully clear as he raced to the other side of the street, intent on hurting the younger duelist.

 

"W-wait, I... Ah, never mind!" yelled Bolt, as he began to run away.

 

After trying to lose Kodashi for a few minutes, he ended up in a n alley. And he didn't succeed at losing Kodashi either.

"Looks like I just lost the game..." thought Bolt. As he turned around, a vicious kick made him fall on his knees and wrap his arms around his stomach.

"I've had enough of you, you annoying brat... Your mouth just got you in way more trouble than you can handle..."

 

As he prepared to throw another kick, a hand grabbed his shoulder.

 

"Gen Kodashi?..."

 

Kodashi turned around to see a large man, casually - if not carelessly - dressed. Dark skin, short beard, a piercing in his left ear, sleeveless black shirt... no distinctive traces whatsoever, just another street thug like so many others that wandered those parts of West Domino. Except for the white ring in a finger of his right hand.

 

"Who's asking?"

"I was sent to find you and deliver this to you, with a word of enlightenment."

He handed Kodashi a duel disk; straight out of Duels R' Us, probably. He didn't have time for this kind of foolishness.

"Are you making fun of me?!" asked an infuriated Kodashi, slapping the toy out of the taller man's hand. He hurt his hand... that wasn't plastic. As he looked in shock to the duel disk on the floor, a painful slap threw him to the ground.

"Insolent fool. You will calm down and listen to what I have to say." In that moment, the dark-skinned thug looked more menacing than before. "You will take that duel disk, for you have been chosen to partake in the Battle. I have been sent to introduce you to your destiny as one of the Asgard" His eyes turned from Kodashi to Bolt. "You. On your feet, boy. Since there is unfinished business between the two of you, we will take this opportunity and settle it by the old arts. Take my duel disk; you will face Kodashi-san in a duel immediately."

 

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Two kids were dueling one another. One of them was dominating... since I trained him, thought Yudou with a smile. He was in the park again, where most children would go when they wanted to play cards. He himself used to go there every day when he was younger. Even now, he would spend most of his days there, especially lately when he had a lot in his mind. But he allowed himself a break from introspection to see Levin pummel a friend in a duel.

 

Levin: 3200 LP

Goki: 1800 LP

 

"My turn!" said Levin. "Draw!"

 

He enjoyed dueling as much as Yudou. Each time he won a duel, Yudou would either buy him a pack of cards or give im a hand-picked card that fit Levin's theme to further strengthen his deck - but only if he deserved it. That included not bragging after winning or getting cocky and going easy on his opponent during a duel.

 

"I summon S.C.A.R.A.B. Standard Model in Attack Mode! Now, I'll Attack your Spiral Serpent with my S.C.A.R.A.B. Hunter Model! I take 1500 damage, but since I control another S.C.A.R.A.B. monster, my Hunter Model's effect activates, allowing me to destroy your monster after this battle even though it's stronger!"

 

"What? But... That's my best card!" whined Levin's friend.

 

"Having a lot of attack points doesn't make a card good, Goki! Yudou-senpai taught me that! Now, you're wide open, so my S.C.A.R.A.B. Standard Model can attack you directly for game! And that's it!"

 

Levin: 1700 LP

Goki: 0 LP

 

"Ooooh yeah! I did it! Oh, oh yeah. Good game Goki!"

 

"And good game Levin." said a familiar voice behind him. The boy quickly turned around.

"Yudou-senpai!"

"Seems like you've mastered the strategy, Levin. And not only that... You behaved properly even though you didn't know I was around. Congratulations." said Yudou, smiling. He was visibly tired, but that wouldn't stop him from keeping his promise. "Come with me, Levin."

"Alright! See ya later, Goki!"

 

After a while of walking, with Levin telling Yudou every single detail of his last matches, they arrived at Yudou's home.

"Wait here, I'll go upstairs and get something."

 

After a while of searching through his drawers, he finally found what he was looking for. Living all by himself, it was hard to keep everything tidy. His father, just like Rai's, had died when he was young, and his mother lived halfway across the world. Well actually, he was the one that moved out two years ago. His mother didn't earn enough to keep enough food on the table for two people, and didn't do a very good job at hiding the fact that she thought Yudou was the source of her problems. As such, when he reached 16, he packed his things and left home with a quick goodbye. It hadn't been half as emotionally challenging as he had expected.

 

"Here you go, Lev... Levin?!"

 

Levin was exactly where Yudou had left him. But he left him alone. Now, he was talking to an old-looking, albeit physically imposing man, who wore an unpretentious gray suit and white shirt underneath.

 

"So he said he was gonna go ups... Oh, there you are, senpai! This man was looking for you!"

"May I... help you?"

The man smiled. He looked friendly enough, thought Yudou.

"Why yes, you may. Your friend told me you are Yudou Shinji, the dueling prodigy of Domino City. I trust he is correct?"

"You got the name right. The rest is arguable." Yudou didn't like idle chit-chat with strangers. Especially when they were specifically looking for him for God knows what reason.

"Marvellous. Is that... your house?"

"Yes."

"Oh, then I'll gladly come in, naturally. Thank you." said the old man, walking past Yudou as if he'd been invited.

"What on earth?!... Anyway. Levin, this is for you. You've earned it, and I trust you'll learn how to make the most of it in no time. It'll be the core of your Deck when you do, but for the time being, don't be too eager to use it... That's a novice mistake. I have to go now, that man is obviously out of his mind. See you later, kid."

"Wow! S.C.A.R.A.B. War Model?! I'd never head of it! Cool! Thank you Yudou-senpai, see you later! Good luck in.. hm, dealing with that mister!" said Levin as he ran off.

 

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"A... real duel disk?!" Bolt had forgotten all about the pain in his stomach. "You mean it?! Coool!"

Getting up in an instant, he approached the large man and took the duel disk from his arm. "Wow, it's much heavier than I thought! This thing actually works?"

His question was answered immediately as the duel disk turned on and showed "4000" on the small screen.

 

Kodashi got back on his feet as well. "You gotta be kidding me...".

Regardless, he picked up the duel disk he had tossed aside earlier and placed it on his arm; it immediately turned on as well.

 

Both duelists placed their decks in the appropriate slot.

"This is insane... Who the hell are you anyway? I don't have to do any of this, I can just walk away when I feel like it!"

The man looked at Kodashi. "Yet... you won't. If you wanted out, you would have gone away already. The fact that you activated the duel disk in the first place is a sign that you want this duel to take place. A part of you is eager to know if all of this is real."

"You're out of your mi.."

"MY TURN!!" yelled Bolt out of nowhere, as he drew a card.

 

Bolt: 4000 LP

Kodashi: 4000 LP

 

"Let's try this baby out! I... set a card and end my turn!"

A face-down card hologram appeared in front of him. Kodashi gasped, while Bolt simply couldn't hold the excitement. "Oooh my GOD! It actually works! Now all I need to do is get out some monsters soon! I can't wait to see them!"

 

Bolt: 4000 LP

Kodashi: 4000 LP

 

"This can't be happening... No way, does this mean all those stories about Pharaohs are real?! This has to be some kind of trick... no technology in the world could produce holograms with this quality, and hell, even if such technology existed, it wouldn't be used in a card game!"

 

"Hey Mr. Sore Loser, you gonna play or what?!"

 

Nagashi was too loud, no doubt about that. He'd have to hurry this and make the thug go so he could finish the beating he owed him...

 

"So, he didn't play a single monster in his first turn? Heh... Easier than expected!"

"I summon Red Destroyer Myrmidon in Attack Mode!"

And it actually happened. A majestic red dragon materialized before his eyes. It was real... and it felt amazing. Crushing opponents with his trusted cards was always satisfying, but having them appear in front of his eyes made Kodashi feel a kind of rush he had never felt before.

"Incredible... Heh, and now we begin! Since you have no monsters to protect yourself, Myrmidon can attack you directly! And when it declares an attack, one of my empty Monster Card Zones gets a Doom Counter!"

A large, round boulder in flames, resembling a meteor, appeared next to the red dragon.

"Myrmidon, direct attack!"

 

As the dragon took flight and unleashed a massive stream of flames, a large, metallic monster appeared on Bolt's side of the field.

 

"What?!"

"Meet my Counter monster, Gozanthor Wall!"

"Counter... monster?!"

"Damn right Kodashi! Counter monsters are what my deck is all about! I can't summon them like I would normally summon a monster; instead, they come out when you perform certain moves! Gozanthor Wall, for example, can only be summoned when you declare a direct attack, and it comes with a sexy 3000 defense points!"

"A deck as annoying as its owner... Keh, I should've seen it coming."

"Fine, I stop my attack then I set 2 cards, and..."

Suddenly, a bird seemingly made of ice materialized nexto to Bolt's Gozanthor Wall.

"Yup, you got it! This is ShinTori, and it comes out whenever you set a Spell or Trap Card. Man, this is so coool, they're just like in the cards! Real monsters!"

"... I end my turn." concluded Kodashi in a dry tone.

 

Bolt: 4000 LP

Kodashi: 4000 LP

 

"All of a sudden it's his turn, and he already has more monsters than I do... How the hell did I let this happen?!"

"Okay, my move! Draw!"

 

The large, dark-skinned man hadn't moved an inch from his spot, carefully watching the two duelists.

"Impressive... both are able to utilize the duel disk without any trouble. As expected of Kodashi... and despite only being able to use the disk because it's mine, this Bolt kid is not bad at all either... Too bad destiny has no plans for him in the Battle."

 

"Now... I activate the Spell Card Limitations Broken! It allows me to summon a Counter monster from my hand without having to wait for you to do anything! So come out, Deduro Gahka in Defense Mode!"

A monkey armed with a long pole appeared.

"Next, I change my ShinTori to Defense, place a card face-down, and I think that'll do it for now!"

 

Bolt: 4000 LP

Kodashi: 4000 LP

 

"Again, no attack? What are you biding your time for, Nagashi?"

"My turn, draw! Now I activate my face-down card, Embodiment of Doom, which allows me to turn one Doom Counter into a monster! So I special Summon a Doom Token in Attack Mode!"

The round flaming stone exploded, revealing the Doom Token, a small monster covered in flames.

 

Suddenly, a metallic dragon rose from the ground and placed itself next to Bolt's other monsters.

 

"Again?!"

"Oh yeah, this one is Saibaryu! It can be Special Summon when you Special Summon a monster, and it has 2100 attack points!"

"Enough of this already... I tribute Myrmidon and my Doom Token to bring out... Red Ravager Dragnarok!"

Dancing flames consumed both monsters, then converged and took the shape of a large dragon. when the flames dissipated, Kodashi's ace monster stood before the two duelists, a magnificent sight.

 

"Finally, you're bringing your A game, Kodashi-san. thought the large man.

 

Suddenly, another monkey, different from Deduro Gahka, appeared on Bolt's field.

"Your big lizard helped me bring out this fella, Ioku Ape! It can be Special Summoned when you Normal Summon a monster... so now I got 5 monsters and you have just one! Not looking too good, is it? I wonder how you'll take a second straight loss..."

Kodashi's dark-red eyes narrowed.

"You worthless insect... I'll crush you! Dragnarok, destroy Saibaryu!"

As the mighty dragon fired a meteor-like fireball towards Bolt's monster, a cannon appeared on Ioku Ape's arm and fire instantly, hitting Dragnarok, which braced itself after being hit - it changed to Defense Position, and the fireball vanished.

"What?!"

"The cake was a lie! You were so busy sounding badass that you forgot I had a face-down card! You could have payed 1000 Life Points to return it to my hand before attacking, but since you didn't, I activated it! It was Counter Blaster, that allows me to cancel your attack and change your monster to Defense Mode!"

"Th-that means..."

"Yup, it's ripe for picking! On my next turn, it's going down! What can I say... you're doing it wrong again!"

Kodashi's hands clenched in anger, but for once, he said nothing. He set two cards and looked at Dragnarok.

"Well... since you ain't talking anymore, I'm gonna assume you ended your turn!" yelled an ecstatic Bolt.

 

Bolt: 4000 LP

Kodashi: 4000 LP

 

"Alright, then it's my move again, and I'll end it this very turn!"

 

"A beginner mistake, Kodashi-san. You're once again looking defeat in the eye... Only this time, it's not even against somebody of Rai Satake's calibre. Will you somehow prove to me that destiny isn't wrong?..."

 

"Okay, time to end this!"

"Actually, I don't have much of a choice, my field is crowded and he has three face-down cards I have no means of removing yet.. but if I let the chance of destroying Dragnarok slip away now, I'm gonna regret it when his turn comes..."

"I change all my monsters except Gozanthor to Attack Mode! Now, Deduro Gahka, attack Dragnarok!"

The monkey jumped up and was about to strike Dragnarok when a pillar of flames surrounded Kodashi's dragon.

"What's up with that?!"

Kodashi was looking straight at Bolt.

"My trap card, Ravager's Legacy. By sending Dragnarok to the Graveyard..."

The pillar of flames exploded violently, and generated five Doom Counters, spreaded through all of Kodashi's Monster Card Zones.

"... all empty Zones get a Doom Counter."

"That ain't gonna help you much, Grouch! The rulebook says I get a replay if the number of monsters on your side of the field changes, so it's not like you negated my attack... Now ALL my monsters can have a free swing at ya! So go, Saibaryu, direct attack!"

The Cyber Dragon look-alike roared and fired a light-blue stream of energy.

 

"Wrong again, maggot."

 

A pair of wings enveloped Kodashi; the energy beam collided against the red wings, which exploded into small particles, resembling burning ashes; as these covered Kodashi, his Life Points rose to 6800.

"Ah geez, cut out the fancy pyro, what happened this time?!"

"I activated my other Trap, Ravager's Roar. When my Dragnarok is in the Graveyard and you declare an attack, I can cancel your entire Battle Phase and gain Life Points equal to my dragon's Attack."

"No... freakin'.. way." Even in the most frustrating of situations, it seemed to be a trait of Bolt's to always come up with an awkward reaction.

"Well, in that case... I'll set a card and end my turn."

 

Bolt: 4000 LP

Kodashi: 6800 LP

 

"My turn! Draw!"

"I'm up against five monsters while controlling none... My kind of odds! I have to admit, Nagashi, you're not as worthless as I thought. But you made me send my precious Dragnarok to the Graveyard, so now you're gonna pay...."

 

"First off, I Special Summon from my hand Red Kaiser Dragon by removing 1 Doom Counter from a Zone!"

Another dragon, smaller than Dragnarok, emerged from the meteor that occupied one of the Monster Card Zones as it crumbled.

"Next I activate a Spell Card from my hand, Postponed End! It allows me to remove all Doom Counters from my side of the field and if I remove four or more..."

The remaining 4 counters clustered together and were consumed by a tower of flames. From it rose...

"... Red Ravager Dragnarok returns."

"What?! Again?!"

"Now, for my Normal Summon... Red Wyvern! By Tributing it, I gain a Doom Counter in its place!"

The small crimson dragon disappeared as fast as it appeared, leaving behind another large blazing rock.

"I activate Dragnarok's effect this time. By paying 1000 Life Points, that face-down card you have goes back to your hand! Thanks for the reminder, maggot."

Dragnarok flapped its large wings and the hologram of Bolt's face-down card vanished.

"Battle Phase! Dragnarok, attack..."

"Damn it, ShinTori's in Attack Mode and it only has 800 Attack points!"

"... Gozanthor Wall!"

"What? It has 3000 Defense!"

Dragnarok's fireball crashed into Gozanthor and exploded. Some sparks flew in Kodashi's direction and burned him, as he lost 200 Life Points of recoil damage.

 

Actual damage.

 

"Urgh... what.. what the hell is going on?! How can an illusion hurt?" he turned to the dark-skinned man. "Answer me!"

The man look back, unfazed. "You wanted to hurt the kid, right? You were kicking him when I found you.. So for now, just finish the duel, then I'll answer your questions. See this as a.. different way of punishing your opponent."

"This is insane..." "But interesting... Brace yourself, worm!"

 

"What are you two talkin' about? And why did you attack my Gozanthor, of all the choices?!"

"Calm down Nagashi, it'll be explained in a minute! First, since Dragnarok attacked, all my other monsters are destroyed and I gain another Doom Counter!"

Red Kaiser Dragon was consumed by flames and a Doom Counter took its place.

"That makes it two counters. Now I reveal my last face-down, the Trap Card, Destruction Blaze! When Dragnarok battles a Defense Position monster, I gain1 Doom Counter at the end of the damage Step, and Dragnarok gets to attack again! So now, attack ShinTori! And by my dragon's effect when it attacks, I get a Doom Counter... Making it four!"

Dragnarok attacked as a fourth meteor appeared in Kodashi's last empty Zone. This time, the large fireball found its target, destroying the ice bird and inflicting 2000 points of battle damage to Bolt... who fell on his knees in pain.

"OUCH! That... actually hurt... damn it..." he mumbled, as he fought to get back on his feet.

As the blast subsided, a green worm with wings appeared where ShinTori was.

"Th-this is... Arcus B-Belua... It comes out when you d-destroy a Counter Monster... by battle..."

"It doesn't matter, maggot! Red Ravager Dragnarok's effect activates! By removing four Doom Counters from the field, I can destroy all cards you control!"

"Say what?!" Bolt had gotten back up, grabbing his chest in pain, but like always, he was quick to forget about it if something more impressive came up.

The four meteors rose to the sky, and as Dragnarok roared, they came crashing down on Bolt's side of the field, destroying all his monsters in the explosion that followed.

And again, as the dust cleared, another monster rose to take their place. This time, a two-headed dog.

"Again?!"

"Showin' off just cost you again, Grumpy! When a monster on my side of the field is destroyed by an effect, Dog of War can be Summoned! And it comes with an effect that's gonna piss you off for sure! When Summoned, I can destroy an Attack Position monster you control! So goodbye Dragnarok.. again! And that means your field is completely empty!"

A black hole appeared under Kodashi's dragon as Dog of War howled, and Dragnarok was pulled into it, vanishing from the field.

"N..Not again! You worm!"

 

"Bolt Nagashi... You'll pay for this humiliation... I will not be defeated twice! Satake was one thing, but I refuse to lose against somebody like you!"

 

Bolt: 2000 LP

Kodashi: 5800 LP

 

"Heh! And now the fun starts, Kodashi! Draw!"

 

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Cards used in this chapter:

- By Levin:

 

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Received: war.jpg

 

- By Goki:

 

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- By Bolt:

 

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- By Kodashi:

 

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Notes:

I didn't have the time to read this through a second time, so there may be more than one mistake. Apologies if so, but it was about time this got an update, so I was kinda rushed. The duel between Kodashi and Bolt was initially supposed to end this chapter, but I ultimately decided against it. Enjoy! ;)

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WARNING:

 

From here on out, all new chapters will be added to the first post, provided I can fully figure out the spoiler mechanics.

 

This way it'll be easier for readers to pick up where they left off rather than searching though multiple posts to find the chapter they want. I'll get to work on this as soon as I can.

 

EDIT: Done, check the first post for Chapters 1-6, and my next post for chapters 7 and onwards! Thanks! :)

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Not really. I just want readers to comment. Advertising is more often than not very annoying for people who aren't interested, and I don't post a lot anyway, so there's not much to do. Still, people could drop a comment after reading... it'd be nice, even if all they have to say is "God this sucks so much". :P

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