Guess what? Another card!

[Spire]

Spire is going to start making cards now, here is my newest card ever:

 

[spoiler=[size=x-small]Combustion Deity Dragon[/size]]

 

 

 

[spoiler=[size=x-small]Card Lore[/size]]

This card cannot be Summoned except by it's own effect. When you draw this card from your Deck, place this card your opponent's hand. During each of your Standby Phases, as long as this card remains in your hand, inflict 200 points of damage to your Life Points for each card in your hand (excluding this card). When this card is the only card in your hand, place this card in your opponent's hand. If this card is sent from your hand to the Graveyard, Special Summon it to your side of the field. When this card is Special Summoned by this effect, you can add 1 Level 4 of lower FIRE monster from your Deck to your hand.

 

 

 

[spoiler=[size=x-small]Image Credit[/size]]

http://media.photobucket.com/image/anime%20dragon/Ludane/anime%20pics/Red_dragon_by_hardcolico.jpg?o=248

Image from here, and I do not claim this image as my own.

 

 

 

 

Feedback? I think I messed up the OCG.

[Guest]

It would just be "2 face-up FIRE monsters", you don't use the word Attribute in a case like that.

 

Also, I see a problem in that, when the card is added to your opponent's hand, it ceases to be your card and thus "your opponent" on the card would now refer to you since the person you're playing against now controls it (the original owner is still the same, but the current owner is now your opponent, as such the persons referred to by terms like "you" and "your opponent" on the card would be switched around, thus the card would never actually be in "their" hand, always "your" hand). So, it wouldn't work like you want it to, with the LP drain and everything, and it would just bounce back and forth between hands anytime it's Summoned, and never actually resolve the effect of being able to be Special Summoned and stay on the field.

 

Very interesting idea, though ^_^

[Spire]

Great, I knew I should have given it a simple effect, but I didn't listen.

 

So your saying I should maybe add, "switch control of this card to your opponent"? Becasue that would make sence.

 

Up to the point when it's sent to your opponent's hand, don't refer it as "your opponent's hand" but "your hand"

 

Yeah, then I could get rid of the last two effects so it would be continuoes, and go to each others hands throughout the duel, I like that idea, i'm not sure how to word it, but great idea. Thanks alot Darth! ^_^ +repped for your help and being a great mod.

 

EDIT: Thanks Darth:

 

Is this ok now, i'm not sure?

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned, Set or Special Summoned. When you draw this card from your Deck, place it in your opponent's hand and switch control of this card to your opponent. During each of your Standby Phases, as long as this card remains in your hand, inflict 200 points of damage to your Life Points for each card in your hand (excluding this card). When this card is the only card in your hand, switch control of this card to your opponent and place it in their hand.

 

Now it keeps inflicting Life Points to you and your opponent throught the duel (unless of corse it's discarded from your hand somehow)

[Guest]

Hm, that does resolve the control aspect very nicely, though I'm not entirely sure you actually need the "switch control of this card" lines, as looking at cards like Exchange it seems to automatically change owners by the very fact of being in their hand instead of yours. I think it could be worded like this and be fine:

 

This card cannot be Summoned. When you draw this card from your Deck, place this card your opponent's hand. During each of your Standby Phases, as long as this card remains in your hand, inflict 200 points of damage to your Life Points for each card in your hand (excluding this card). When this card is the only card in your hand, place this card in your opponent's hand.

 

Though, if it can't be Summoned, there's not really much of a point in it being a Monster :P

 

I actually think this would be a better effect for a Spell Card, and that you should make a better, more monster-esque effect for this sweet-looking monster. Just my 2 cents ;)

[Spire]

OMG, thanks alot Darth, your the best!

 

And, well my aim was too create a monster that you could give to your opponent, like Lava Golem but more original.

 

And yeah, you might be right about there being no point in it being a monster, but a little green card can't blast your opponent's life points away, only a monster can. But thanks alot for your help, even though i'm a six star, i'm not that good at cards.

 

And, your saying make a support card for this with a more, "monster-like" effect?

[Guest]

Well, technically, without being able to be Summoned, a monster with that effect is basically a Spell Card anyway, just with different searchability ;)

 

You can still make an effect that lets you switch the monster to your opponent, but this one just seems to me like more of a Spell effect :P

 

You can do whatever you like, it's your card, that's just my personal opinion ^_^

[Spire]

Unless of corse I add an effect if it gets discarded from the hand and I could build up on that and make a more of a monster that way.

 

Thanks alot for your help!

[Guest]

Unless of corse I add an effect if it gets discarded from the hand and I could build up on that and make a more of a monster that way.

 

Thanks alot for your help!

Yeah, that would work.

 

You are quite welcome. Glad I could help ^_^

[Spire]

There we go! Card updated.

 

Now it can be classed as a Monster Card

[LiAM]

[align=center] I love the Picture, and like how youve done the name ;)

 

(i can only do gold stickers) :lol:

 

i think the OCG is fixed now :D

 

9.7/10[/align]

[Spire]

Well thanks alot for the rate, yujioooh! ^_^

[Professor Cobra]

This card can only be Special Summoned except from your Graveyard by it's own effect. Good pic and effect. 8/10

[ohgodwhy!]

Great pic and a very unique effect. Good work.

[Spire]

@Professor Cobra- Oh, thanks, I didn't see that error. FIXED.

@ohgodwhy!- Thank you, it's the most unique effect I have ever made, and I like it! ^_^

 

Thanks for the great comments, you two!

 

And who keeps rating these threads!?! That's why i'm with Bloodrun that star ratings should be removed. Whatever you do kind members, please don't star rate my threads, thank you ^_^

[fenrir]

Epic Spire Epic. 10/10 Hope one day I'll be as good a cardmaker as you.

[Spire]

@Ancient Gear- ON TOPIC: Thanks alot! ^_^ And I still lack experience. I haven't made much cards, i'm just starting to make cards now because i've become a legend, but thanks alot!

OFF TOPIC: Congrats on the 5 stars.

[fenrir]

Off Topic: Thx. Nobody else noticed.

On Topc: I think you should make a set with types that are least used. Like rock or thunder types.

[Spire]

A good idea! ^_^

 

But then again, i'm too lazy to make a set, lol. I'll just stick to one card at a time, but thanks alot for the suggestion! ^_^

[fenrir]

Aren't there also Dinosaur types? Also fish? Actually there are.

[Spire]

^ Yes, you don't see many of them, just dragons and spellcasters and things all the time. They might be my next card for when i'm done, if I can find a good pic.

 

Thanks for commenting, though!

[fenrir]

Np. Hope you make a Dino or fish card though.

[Spire]

^ May do.

 

Any more comments, regarding the card?

[JG.]

I admit, i do not understand the effect.

[Spire]

It's effect is confusing yet original.

 

Ok, when you draw it from your deck, you can give it to your opponent as a gift! ^_^ It's placed in there hand, and control of this is given to them.

 

Then, each turn, since the contoler of this card is now "YOU" not your opponent, anymore, "YOU" lose 300 LP for each card in your hand. Then when it's the only card in "YOUR" hand give it to "YOUR" opponent (AKA, the original owner of this card) and the effect goes on and on. The card is sent back and forth between players, inflicting LP, untill it is discarded. The rest is pretty straight forward.

 

Understand now?

[JG.]

I think so but that is seriously confusing! BTW the card gets 10/10 as it rocks even though effect makes me feel sick.