Esplin 9466 Primary Posted November 19, 2008 Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 LOCK Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted November 19, 2008 Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 1st :: Not enough of a good flow with her words...and word selection is basic and predicatble. 2nd :: Same flow problem.... and word selection is a problem here too...not many metaphors so far. 3rd :: Better, but the one lined stanzas do not make it good. 4th :: Alot better than the previous ones so far.. the word selection is better, but I would like to see some metaphors. 5th :: Needs stanza seperation, and don't use CAPs locks to emphasize words in a poem. 6th :: So far, alot better than any of the other ones, it gives detail, and alot of it. 7th :: Good, but still no metaphors....still the same problems as the first and second one. 8th :: Very different, but it's getting better. 9th :: Better, but not the best. 10th :: Nicely done, but still not the best. 11th :: Nice metaphors here...but still need more. 12th :: Alot of metaphors, but still not the best...too many.. 13th :: Better...but still not the best.. I say, from what I have read...you have a long distance relationship with some girl who likes writing poetry about the day the two of you will eventually meet eye to eye. She writes you poems to show how much she loves you, though she has never seen you in real life, but maybe just a picture. I say good luck with this relationshi; as there are so many ways this relationship can turn to dust. You have my blessings. Also, if you are wanting to read some good poetry from me, please PM me, and I'll show you some. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted November 19, 2008 Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 Whoa. You should be thankful that your girlfriend cares so much about you. :] -Glasstin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Esplin 9466 Primary Posted November 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 For future referance, im not interested in your opinion about our relationship,Just what you think about the poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted November 19, 2008 Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 I know... I put my views of each individual poem and then gave my opinion about your relationship.. Just so you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raelen Posted November 19, 2008 Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 The poems aren't that good, but it's the thought that counts!You should be thankful!:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RestLess-BoTics Posted November 19, 2008 Report Share Posted November 19, 2008 Whoa. You should be thankful that your girlfriend cares so much about you. :] -Glasstin For future referance' date=' im not interested in your opinion about our relationship,Just what you think about the poem.[/quote'] Oops. I apologize. Please forgive me for stating a positive comment about your relationship. :[ -Glasstin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 20, 2008 Report Share Posted November 20, 2008 how good or bad the poems are is not relevant (in which I thought they're pretty good anyway). The thought is what counts here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
「tea.leaf」 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Too emo and generic; completely terrible as pieces of literature. Something tells me your relationship will evaporate in a few, short months. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 In accordance to poetry writing, I guess the age has to be factored in as well. Because the people who said the poems are bad are assuming your gf is a certain age, but what if she's younger than that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Catman25 Posted November 21, 2008 Report Share Posted November 21, 2008 Those are beautiful man, and I'm not just saying that. I like Unending love. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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