Skarlet Posted November 23, 2008 Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 [spoiler=Story Line] Christa was raised by a poor family, who couldnt afford to by anything, living in an inherited house in the slums, catching thier own food, and living from charity, but once every week Christa was given a pack of cards by the local toy-store owner, they were her prized possesions, and every day, she would sit in the candle light and assemble decks. Every few days, she would stand on the street coners and sing to try to make a little money, but one day, she found that on the corner, was a desk. A regitration desk, for a Dueling tournament. This tournament, had a $1,000,000 prize, and no entry fee, she regestered eagerly, and returned home to prepair herself. [spoiler=characters]Christa McHailRole: Main CharacterDeck: CandleAge: 14Appearence: dirty face, stained, faded red shirt, and tattered jeans, unwashed mid-lengh blonde hair.Bio: storyline [spoiler=Prologue]In the dancing candle light, Christa prepaired herself"Candle Dragon should be enough to worry about for anyone." she thought - and this was true, the formidable candle dragon was her most powerful card and she had just got her third copy. the gritty begger girl was finished her deck, and she sat, in the candle light, unable to sleep, she was nervous, what if she lost, what if she didnt do it, it would be back to living on nothing, but if she won, they would be millionaires, she litteraly couldnt afford to loose. The next morning she woke late, her father was out, his fishing rod missing, this indicated that he was hoping to catch breakfast for them, dressing her self in her usual attire, she was prepairng to leave, when a knock on the delapidated front door indicated the arival of that which she had waited for, pulling on her shirt quickly, she ran to the door, and there it was, the parsel she had been waiting for, enclosed there were two things, a shining silver duel disc, and a note Dear Christa McHail We are pleased to inform you, that your aplication to compete, in the Duel World championships, the rules are as follows: A single loss will deactivate your duel disc for the remainder of the tournament.This tournament will be conducted under advanced rules, if a banned card is detected in your deck, your duel disc will not function until this card is removed. this tournament takes place on a World-Wide scale, and when the final 10 from around the world have been decided, they will meet for the finals in a currently undecided location. the tournament officialy begins at mid day. - Tournament management P.S. your Duel Disc is proof of Identity as a competator, and will allow you to travel on selected flights, cruises, and other forms of transport, free of charge. the tournament began in a matter of minutes, straping on her duel disc and loading up her deck, she left the house, ready for battle. [spoiler=Episode 1]Almost running down the street, Christa ducked and weaved, duelists everywhere were dueling, and she couldnt find an opponent... She ducked into an ally way, and heard he voice of a young boy, no older then 10... "i cant belive im out of the tournament already" sobbed the child. As the scene came into view, a tall athletic, strong looking young man, a few years older then Christa, by the looks of him, was standing over the little boy, a look of melevolence on his face. "Now kid, I'd say as the winner I deserve a little somthing as a prize, lets see that deck."The frightened child handed him his deck, almost in tears. The large and seemingly crule victor of the apparent duel quickly flipped through the deck, occasionaly pocketing a card, then he threw the remainder into the terrified boys face. Christa could take no more."Leave him alone!" she shouted, as the boy ran by, un-noticed by the cruel young man."What's a little girl like you gonna do about it""I'll beat you in a duel, she said confidently, and when I do, you'll be out of this tournament. Karma!""I'll accept your chalange, but when I win, expect the same treatment as I gave that runt!" "LETS DUEL!" both combatants declared Opponent: I'll go first. Summon Dimension RipperA dark shadow of a dog-faced humanoid, with long sickle shaped, shimmering claws appeared (ATK 1600 DEF 1000)Opponent: now I activate Dimension Fissure, that'll do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
«₣lџχ» Posted November 23, 2008 Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 Its pretty good except some spelling mistakes. I hope this has a twist cause many people do poor people becoming huge and tournaments. Yusei Fudo and Forune Cup for example. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted November 23, 2008 Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 And it seems to me you lived your lifeLike a candle in the windNever knowing who to cling toWhen the rain set inAnd I would have liked to have known youBut I was just a kidYour candle burned out long beforeYour legend ever did Generic opening. Needs more plot that poor kid becomes fabulous duelist in tournament. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skarlet Posted November 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 it develops dont worry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sdfsdfa Posted November 23, 2008 Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 Some grammar mistakes but it is amazing story will there be another chapter like when she goes in the tournement Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted November 23, 2008 Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 Lots of spelling errors at the start but it's good. We just need more characters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skarlet Posted November 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 more characters will come, and spelling isnt my strong suite, im correcting this now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sdfsdfa Posted November 23, 2008 Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 Is there going to be any new chapters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skarlet Posted November 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 23, 2008 there will be, infact, by australian time I will have posted Part 1 of a two-parter by the end of the day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted November 24, 2008 Report Share Posted November 24, 2008 I'm not a fan of eps being put in parts but it was nice. Grammar errors. I can't say much as I have seen much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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