Tuxiidoh Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Hmm. Better?I'm sure this picture gets used around a lot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Smeagle Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Ok, honestly, this card isn't that good, and I'm really tired of seeing that pic. It has been used to death, brought back to life, and then used to death again. "Knight" is not a Type, and unless your "Knight" monsters have some radical new game mechanic you really shouldn't make up new types. I would make him a Warrior or a Sea Serpent, and make his attack boost 500 at least. The OCG's wrong, too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 well, Knight isnt a type... try changing it to Warrior. ;) Graveyard. equip type to what? the monster seems like a union monster... but the way it is written is wrong.. i would fix it, but i dont have the faintest clue on how to write a Union Monster effect. :| sorry about that. i hate talking about what is wrong and not have a way to fix it... anywho, seems pretty good for your first. ;) taking that in mind, a 7/10 for ya. look at other cards on the site, including my new set here if youd like, to see different ways for creativity and writing the cards (OCG). it helps a lot. ;) good luck! ~K Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tuxiidoh Posted December 11, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Omg! Oops.Sorry for boring you with the pic, but thanks for the feedback.Im going to try much more to make myself less noobish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Omg! Oops.Sorry for boring you with the pic' date=' but thanks for the feedback.Im going to try much more to make myself less noobish.[/quote'] experience helps with that. ;) the more you look at the forum and make cards the less n00bish you get. i was exactly like you about 13 months ago... XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xxdemonicfuxoffxx Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 congrats ur 1st 1use a real type (warrior, sea serpent, fish rofl, dragon? idk)ocg errorsincrease the attack boost to 400increase the monster's atk to 1500use an original picgive img credit Overall Improvement: When this monster is sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon it back to your side of the field and treat it as an Equip Spell Card. A monster equipped with this card gains 400 ATK, and cannot be equipped with another Equip Spell Card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tuxiidoh Posted December 11, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Oh thanks!Im going to try my hardest.I made another Xenam card^^ I'm going to post it in a sec >_< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.arx Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Well, No fake types (you used knight) and some OCG errors. (see Kale's post)... Good for a start! 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tuxiidoh Posted December 11, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Lol, Atleast it was better than 50%Hehehe... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shocked Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 Post :- Card Lore- Image credit (if you can) RatingPic : 9/10Effect : 8/10OCG : 6/10Overall : 7.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted December 11, 2008 Report Share Posted December 11, 2008 When this card is selected as an attack target, pic is used, remove this card from play, capitalize deck and special summon, Warrior-Type, 1 star (I think), face-up Attack Position, reword the last effect. 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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