DiGGDaGG Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Don't be harsh on me cuz it's my first YGO invention ever. Lore: A monster equipped with this card increases its ATK by 800 and decreases its DEF by 300. The equipped monster is returned to the owner's hand during the second End Phase after this card's activation. Edit: Seto Kaiba666 suggestion about OCG. Image credit: http://www.filmreference.com/images/sjff_01_img0459.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TwistedFlameApe Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Lore: Monster equipped with this card increases its ATK by 800 and decreases its DEF by 300. Monster equipped with this card is returned to owners hand after 2nd turn this card is activated. edited:Lore: A monster equipped with this card increases its ATK by 800 and decreases its DEF by 300. The equipped monster is returned to the owner's hand during the second End Phase after this card's activation. its a good card for the first one ever made. just a few ocg errors. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cyber Altair Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Also the first part can be written this way "Increase the ATK of the monster equipped with this card by 800 and decrease it's DEF by 300." It's not bad for a first try, keep practicing ;D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Increase the equipped monster's ATK by 800 points and decrease it's DEF by 300 points. During your second End Phase after activation, return the equipped monster to your hand. Oh, and it's "dwarves". Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 whats a counter spell? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kotaro Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 the picture could have some colour added to it there is a few ocg errors which have been pointed out. normally i would give 7/10 but with this being your 1st try, i give 8/10 1 more thing, you need image credit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Windowlicker Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Picture: 6/10 (1 tenth of it is a personal opinion :S)OCG: 5/10General Idea: 7/10 Total: 6/10 No image credit.You spelt Dwarves wrong.Dude... You made a Counter Spell card. But don't worry; good cards come with experience. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DiGGDaGG Posted December 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 According to THIS, it's allowed to spell dwarf in plural dwarfs.1 more thing' date=' you need image credit[/quote']What do you mean by that? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Picture: 6/10 (1 tenth of it is a personal opinion :S)OCG: 5/10General Idea: 7/10 Total: 6/10 No image credit.You spelt Dwarves wrong.Dude... You made a Counter Spell card. But don't worry; good cards come with experience. no they dont' date=' good cards come form actually playing the game ¬¬ not just from hearing about it. i hate noobs that cant make cards properly >:@. its easy, all you have to do is think... does this sound righteg.NOOB: This card isnt killed by monsters. REAL: This card cannot be destroyed as a result of battle. no critisising ur card, the only problem is tiny OCG and counter spell. thats it,.[hr']According to THIS' date=' it's allowed to spell dwarf in plural dwarfs.1 more thing, you need image creditWhat do you mean by that? BTW dwarf's as plural is like s Dwarf's : the DWARF'S have a glass of milkDWARVES: there are several DWARVES. if something ends in an S, it means something belongs to it or is for tha, a group of somehing has a different spelling , eg, Cactus= cacti. (octopus=opctopus's .) [ in english, if a word nds in S already, its just Likes' not Likes's.] (im taking english literature.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
greg_biffle Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Im really a new member but i think its good 8/10...For a new card of course. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kotaro Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 image credit is when you practically just say where you got the images from, its a rule Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DiGGDaGG Posted December 21, 2008 Author Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 So is the word "dwarfs" completely wrong?I personally think it's not! According to THIS again, you should be arguing with people who are writing these kinds of words into dictionaries. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Change symbol from Counter (Which it can't be) to Quick-Play, lower case of in the card name, pic needs color, change to 2nd. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted December 21, 2008 Report Share Posted December 21, 2008 Picture: 6/10 (1 tenth of it is a personal opinion :S)OCG: 5/10General Idea: 7/10 Total: 6/10 No image credit.You spelt Dwarves wrong.Dude... You made a Counter Spell card. But don't worry; good cards come with experience. no they dont' date=' good cards come form actually playing the game ¬¬ not just from hearing about it. i hate noobs that cant make cards properly >:@. its easy, all you have to do is think... does this sound righteg.NOOB: This card isnt killed by monsters. REAL: This card cannot be destroyed as a result of battle. no critisising ur card, the only problem is tiny OCG and counter spell. thats it,.[hr']According to THIS' date=' it's allowed to spell dwarf in plural dwarfs.1 more thing, you need image creditWhat do you mean by that? BTW dwarf's as plural is like s Dwarf's : the DWARF'S have a glass of milkDWARVES: there are several DWARVES. if something ends in an S, it means something belongs to it or is for tha, a group of somehing has a different spelling , eg, Cactus= cacti. (octopus=opctopus's .) [ in english, if a word nds in S already, its just Likes' not Likes's.] (im taking english literature.) I haven't played the game in years, but I still know how to use proper OCG. Playing the game won't help you much with OCG. Referencing real cards does though. As for the dwarfs/dwarves thing: Wow. failgrammar much?the dwarf's glass of milkIs how you would use it as a possessive. The way you wrote it is still plural. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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