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the devil in the volcano


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just look my card, any suggestion are welcome.

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if u cant read...

This card is unaffected by any Spell, Trap, or monster effects that desginates a specific card on the field as a target. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, every time a FIRE monster is send to the graveyard, inflict 500 points of damage to your oponent's Life Points. After this, you can remove from play that card to increase the ATK of this card by 1000 points.

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the idea is good but u have a few things wrong. your OCG errors, for the first line try "This card is uneffected by any Spell, Trap, or monster effects that specificly desginate it." also it have to many stars for having no attack points to start with and a low defense, i'd go 6 or 7 possibly. I'm not tryin to hammer ur card, i don't flame, but with a little looking over, u can have a serious kick ass card there. 7.5/10

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okay im going to give this my BEST rating ever, you better ****** appreciate it :lol:

(from top down)

 

Firstly:

-name, you cannot have words like 'devil', 'satan' or 'hell' it is unrealistic because of laws by 4Kids.

-attribute good, could also be DARK.

-star level too high, lower to about 7-8 stars

-pic could be better, more colourful, stand out more, and more appealing image

-type seems appropiate

-Effect 'This card is unaffected by the effects your opponent's card that desginates a specific card on the field as a target. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, every time a FIRE monster is send to the graveyard, inflict 500 points ofdamage to your oponent's Life Points. *After this*, you can remove from play that card to increase the ATK of this card by 1000 points.'

 

*hard to determin proper OCG, seek further help.

-ATK should be 0, ? means the effect alters it, 0 should be real ATK, as it gains 1000 for the card destruction, so 0-2500 is ok.

-DEF nothing wrong with it.

 

 

thats it, it took me about 14 minutes to do this, however good/ bad it is.

 

i deserve a medal (or a REP ;)) :lol:

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gonna fix it as soon as posible... fix those OCG errors and that detail with the name... also any other detail... im on it now...

and about the ATK, if i remember correctly monsters with ? ATK cannot be special summoned or searched by the effects of monsters like Sangan. If this is true, then i have a reason to leave the ? ATK.

 

CARD FIXING DONE, look it now and suggest me plz about it.

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