Choke Posted February 1, 2009 Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 My most recent card. I guess you can call it a "Twist" of Relinquished. Rates/Comments/Fixes Please. Image Credit goes to =liiga on deviantART. Thanks to Sasuke Pitsura for OCG corrections. Effect: This card is also treated as a LIGHT monster. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 LIGHT or 2 WIND monsters from your hand or your field. This card's original ATK is equal to the combined ATK of the Tributed monsters. Once per turn, during your Standby Phase, decrease the ATK of this card by 300 points. When this card's ATK becomes 0 as a result of this effect, remove this card from play. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ookami Moriyama Posted February 1, 2009 Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 This card is also treated as a LIGHT monster. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 2 LIGHT or 2 WIND monsters from your hand or your field. This card's original ATK is equal to the combined ATK points of the Tributed monsters. Once per turn, during your Standby Phase, decrease the ATK of this card by 300 points. When this card's ATK becomes 0, as a result of it's effect, remove this card from play. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Choke Posted February 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 Thanks for the fix, that whole thing made me read it over 10 times before understanding. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ookami Moriyama Posted February 1, 2009 Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 Thanks for the fix' date=' that whole thing made me read it over 10 times before understanding.[/quote'] he he he. well anytime. and yeah, it's a great card 10/10 with the fix PS: I'm updating my Dinosaur thread. check it out if you want :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Choke Posted February 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 Ok I updated it. Gave you credit for the updates. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
N00B Hunter Posted February 1, 2009 Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 Hmmm interesting. I see a few problems... let's go: "Eye of Illumination" -- seriously? Not a good name. It's effect doesn't give it the power to "illuminate" (flip face-down cards up) or look into your opponent's hand, see the order of either players' deck, or in any way predict the outcome of the game. SO the whole idea of "illumnination" is kind of wasted. "Eye of Thunder" would work, if you made it a Thunder-Type. "Eye of the Spirit" is nice... find something better than "Eye of Illumination" though. LVL 1 -- BLEH! If this card has a possible attack range of 0 to over 3000, there's NO WAY it could be Level one. "Hamon" doesn't take ANY Tributes, for example, but still is Level 10. That's a major difference... This card shouldn't be such a low level... at least LVL6-7. ATK/0 DEF/0 -- good 1st Edition -- nice, but on the actual cards, the "st" is superscripted... something you need to do with photoshop. EYE-001 -- no, no, no! NO! NO!!! First of all, the current Set ID's have 4 letters, an EN (if you're in England or America) and THEN the number of your card. You need to have a 4-letter code for this guy, and it shouldn't be something ridiculous like "EYE1" or something.. If you want, you can do something like E]/b]ye of he Spirit (EOTS), and then put the number of the card (seeing as it's a single, that would be "EN001". So your Set ID would look like this: "EOTS-EN001". That's perfect. The effect is nicely phrased (attack=ATK. Remember that.), with few errors. Also, you can't Tribute a monster in your hand. "Tributing" only happens on the field, and usually you will be "discarding" if the card is going from your hand, or "sending cards to the Graveyard" if they're in your deck, or any combination of the three factors.When you write "This card's attack is equal to the sum of the...", you should write "This card's ATK is equal to the sum of the ATK of the..." As for balance, well... this card has some problems. You can pull it out of your hand with ANY two monsters (because they can be on the field OR on your hand). Summoning with discards, and then basing stats of those discards, makes for an easily overpowered card. If you're going to have this guy on the field with a discard-summon, then he needs to die easily. Like, if he's targeted by a Spell or Trap card, he's destroyed.OR you can require him to be Special Summoned only by Tributing monsters ON THE FIELD. Then his effect would be more or less balanced (make the ATK decrease 400-500 though). That culminates the whole thing. I probably won't come back to comment on this again, so PM me with any questions or clarification! :mrgreen: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Choke Posted February 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 Alright thanks alot. Well illumination means to light up in a certain spot. As you can see, the eye is doing so, so I just put that. Well, Relinquished can have an ATK of 3000 and it's level 1? Eh well I guess I could make it higher. Thanks for the advice about tributing. I'll fix it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ookami Moriyama Posted February 1, 2009 Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 Ok I updated it. Gave you credit for the updates. and my thread is now updated so take a look. you commented on the old threadand thankyou for credit and +rep Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyrnen Posted February 1, 2009 Report Share Posted February 1, 2009 This is a pretty good card. You have it so the effect isn't overpowered.Overall rating:9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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