Tormented Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 yea you bassicly read the title, Neon: Neon, As they are called can be bring back by tributing a certain amount of tribute, As Well As Special Summouning Back Another Neon Card. Effect: If this card inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent, your opponent randomly discards 1 card from their hand. If this card is destroyed, you can Special Summon 1 "Neon Hero - Ons" from your hand or Deck.If this card attacks, it is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard during the End Phase. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard from the field, you can Special Summon this card by Tributing 2 monsters. If you think i should persue the idea, just give me a high rating. P.S. The Reason For Recoluer Is Because Of Neon Archtype. Image Credit: http://th00.deviantart.com/fs29/300W/f/2008/154/a/2/Qio___The_Kungfu_Armor_by_Watarimono17.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Choke Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Like the idea. OCG errors though. FIX: If this card inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent, your opponent randomly discards 1 card from their hand. If this card is destroyed, you can Special Summon 1 "Neon Hero - Ons" from your hand or Deck. During the End Phase of a turn that this card attacked it is destroyed. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon this card by Tributing 2 monsters. The underlined part sounds weird, I know there's a wrong spot in there but I just don't know how to reword it. Eh consider getting extra help on the bolded one too. Anyways, I like it. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kira_Fuma Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 9/10. Keep up the good work! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deloge Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Nice Archtype! By the way, you should make the effect how to summon it, to make it more special! Me rate 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Domi the Mystery Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Nice OCG, nice effect, nice pic and a nice 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Heh thanks guys.....i hoped it was lil like a synchro, but yeash i understand 9's Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Cool!Good Idea for an archtype however I dislike the card coloring (probably just me)Rating: 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 What would you think i should do for recoulor then? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Make the stars and attribute normal colour!Maybe make the colour slightly dimmer (less in your face)That would make it a lot better in my point of view! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 i suppouse, i can do it later maybe.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted February 11, 2009 Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 except for the card coloring looks bad, everything else is great 9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2009 Heh thanks raganork Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted February 12, 2009 Report Share Posted February 12, 2009 Warrior should come before Neon. Choke has your OCG pretty much fixed up. Meh-ish card recolor. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yoshiman™ Posted February 12, 2009 Report Share Posted February 12, 2009 :shock:i made neons once Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Night Posted February 12, 2009 Report Share Posted February 12, 2009 AMAZING i love the idea my fave color is neon green so yea but u should make alot more,o yea the rating here it is, 9.5/10 :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 14, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 14, 2009 I might make Neon green, but then it ruins the slight effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wuu. Posted February 16, 2009 Report Share Posted February 16, 2009 It should be [Neon / Effect] Forget the warrior. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 16, 2009 Kk thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted February 16, 2009 Report Share Posted February 16, 2009 Sorry, I don't like the idea at all.If you have "Neon" in the name. You don't need it as the type at all. It just frustrates it more when you do happen to play it. As well as the color... No... Just... No. The effect has nothing to call it's own on a significant enough level to warrant a new color.And you didn't add "Neon Hero - Ons" to this. So proper rating is not possible. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Radiant F.U.R.Y.™ Posted February 16, 2009 Report Share Posted February 16, 2009 dont know if this has been mentioned or not...attribute should not be recolored and, if this is an archetype, you dont have to put neon/warrior/effect...warrior/effect is all you need. just keep neon in the card's name. other than that, i like the idea...8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tormented Posted February 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted February 16, 2009 Kk thanks anyway Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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