Setion Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 [spoiler=Effect]In order to special summon this monster you have to tribute 3 cards with "lava" in there name.When you summon this card all Warrior-type cards on the field gain 700 ATK and DEF.This card can not be effected by spell cards or trap.You can negate the the effect of spell,trap and monster cards that designate this card.This card can attack your opponent life points directly.Every time this card attacks your opponent life points directly it gains 400 ATK and DEF points.This card is treated as "Dovan".When this card is sent to the Graveyard your opponent loses 400 lifepoints. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 Your OCG is bad, moderate/ intermediate errors Holoing is bad, it covers the focal. Effects is okay-ish, I will fix OCG, just VERY stressed ATM, if you look at the Marvel Legends Gallery you will see why. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Windowlicker Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 Considerably good for first cards.The picture is decent, as well as holoed.The effect is good, but the grammar needs help. Unfortunatly I cannot give that help due to inexperience. 8/10 Good stuff. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Setion Posted May 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 wats ATM???and OCG? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 "Lava" monsters you control. When this card is Summoned, all Warrior-Type monsters on the field have their ATK and DEF increase by 700. This card is unaffected by the effects of Spell and Trap Cards. You can negate the the effect of Spell, Trap or monster effect cards that targets this card. This card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Each time this card attacks your opponent Life Points directly, increase its ATK and DEF by 400 until the End Phase. This card is treated as a "Dovan" monster.When this card is sent to the Graveyard, decrease your opponents' Life Points by 400.wats ATM???and OCG? ATM = At The Moment OCG = Official Card Grammar If you want to reply directly to this post' date=' do so over PM, I wont check back here.[/color'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Machovict Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 wats ATM???and OCG? OCG is pretty much the term for how you word effects on a card. Try this:"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by sacrificing 3 monsters on your side of the field with "Lava" in their card name. When you successfully Special Summon this card' date=' increase the ATK and DEF of all Warrior-type monsters on the field by 700. This card is not affected by Spell or Trap cards. You can negate the effect of an ability that designates this card as its target. This card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Every time this card attacks your opponent directly, it gains 400 ATK and DEF. This card's name is treated as "Dovan" while it is face-up on the field. When this card is sent from the field to the Graveyard, inflict 400 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points."[/color'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 @Machovist: He never said it cant be Normal Summoned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Machovict Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 But that would make it absolutely overpowered. Why would you sac 3 things to Special Summon it, when you can whack 2 to Normal Summon it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 Let's just face it. I fixed his effect. No matter how OP it was. It was his mistake to make it OP. He will learn from this and learn to do effects properly. Tell him how to balance, not include the balancing in a fix. It's harder to understand if you do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maliki Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 "Lava" monsters you control. When this card is Summoned' date=' all Warrior-[b']Type[/b] monsters on the field have their ATK and DEF increase by 700. This card is unaffected by the effects of Spell and Trap Cards. You can negate the the effect of Spell, Trap or monster effect cards that targets this card. This card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Each time this card attacks your opponent Life Points directly, increase its ATK and DEF by 400 until the End Phase. This card is treated as a "Dovan" monster.When this card is sent to the Graveyard, decrease your opponents' Life Points by 400.wats ATM???and OCG? ATM = At The Moment OCG = Official Card Grammar If you want to reply directly to this post' date=' do so over PM, I wont check back here.[/color'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Machovict Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 Tell him how to balance' date=' not include the balancing in a fix. It's harder to understand if you do.[/quote'] Actually, I truly thought that's what he meant...(about the Normal Summoning thing) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 Well he cant have as he didn't mention Normal Summon in the effect. Oh and I broke my promise, boredom forced me back here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Machovict Posted May 15, 2009 Report Share Posted May 15, 2009 "This card cannot be Special Summoned except by sacrificing 3 monsters on your side of the field with "Lava" in their card name. When you successfully Special Summon this card, increase the ATK and DEF of all Warrior-type monsters on the field by 700. This card is not affected by Spell or Trap cards. You can negate the effect of an ability that designates this card as its target. This card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Every time this card attacks your opponent directly, it gains 400 ATK and DEF. This card's name is treated as "Dovan" while it is face-up on the field. When this card is sent from the field to the Graveyard, inflict 400 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points." Better now? (no more first sentence) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Setion Posted May 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 < remade with marvel OCG This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 "Lava" monsters you control. When this card is Summoned, all Warrior-Type monsters on the field have their ATK and DEF increase by 700. This card is unaffected by the effects of Spell and Trap Cards. You can negate the the effect of Spell, Trap or monster effect cards that targets this card. This card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Each time this card attacks your opponent Life Points directly, increase its ATK and DEF by 400 until the End Phase. This card is treated as a "Dovan" monster.When this card is sent to the Graveyard, decrease your opponents' Life Points by 400. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 16, 2009 Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 If you fix/ remake a card, edit your first post and post it with or replaced with the former card. More people will see it's changed then. Meh, same rate as last time =/ Using my OCG fix is always a bonus Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Setion Posted May 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 >another remake plz marvel see This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 "Lava" monsters you control. When this card is Summoned, all Warrior-Type monsters on the field have their ATK and DEF increase by 700. This card is unaffected by the effects of Spell and Trap Cards. You can negate the the effect of Spell, Trap or monster effect cards that targets this card. This card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. Each time this card attacks your opponent Life Points directly, increase its ATK and DEF by 400 until the End Phase. This card is treated as a "Dovan" monster.When this card is sent to the Graveyard, decrease your opponents' Life Points by 400. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted May 16, 2009 Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 wow pretty good lol love it XD off topic:WAT KADEN IS CARD SECTION!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 16, 2009 Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 wow pretty good lol love it XD off topic:WAT KADEN IS CARD SECTION!?! What? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Setion Posted May 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 lol i remade with 0 ATK and DEF so its not OP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted May 16, 2009 Report Share Posted May 16, 2009 Tell you what. Scrap this card and make another, infact, make a Synchro and an accompanying Tuner. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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