Rehva Posted June 6, 2009 Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 Here's the Set But not Finished YEt.Plz Enjoy Bad OCG :P Card lore:This card can be Special Summoned with only 1 Tribute if you Tribute a monster with "Demon Dragon" in its name.Only during your Attack phase, all of your Opponent's monsters loses 500 Atk Points until the end of the Phase.This card is also treated as a Fiend monster while on the Field. The End.Like Said Not Finished. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
XxDementedSoulxX Posted July 10, 2009 Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 Lol. IDk What To say. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 10, 2009 Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 for Lord of the Demon Dragons, why would you give 3000 def to a lv1 monster? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Card Constructor Posted July 10, 2009 Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 You've got loads of problems with these cards. Lord of the Demon Dragons - First of all, was this intended to be the ace card of your set? If so, why give it 1 star? Since the card has a special requirement to summon it, it can rightfully be a higher star monster. The 3000 defense points don't make any sense either, and the card's effect is too powerful. You could use a card like "Shooting Star Bow - Ceal" to have it attack directly. Demon Dragon, Bloodsurge - Besides the awkward way you've worded it, this card's effect is an interesting oxymoron. You've got a monster that requires you to DISCARD cards to power it up, yet you get to Draw a card when it is destroyed. One of these effects would be fine, but not both. I recommend giving it a set amount of points (increase it's attack points) and keep the drawing effect. Demon Dragon, Crusader Of The Darkness - "This card can be Special Summoned with only 1 Tribute". Are you tribute summoning or special summoning? It shouldn't be both. Demon Dragon, Envy Of The Blade - Oh my god. Your card discription is the worst I've ever read. I particularly like how I CAN discard a card, but it's NOT OPTIONAL. An easier word for that is "MUST" (you must discard a card or this monster is destroyed). Demon Dragon, Hell Berserker - First card that I have no complaints, though the effect is very interesting. Demon Dragon, Hunter Of The Dragons - You don't need to put upper-case on words like "Activate" and "Of". Also, you mention that I can activate the effect of it's attack points increasing. Is this intended to be an optional effect? Demon Dragon, Hydra Serpent - "end of the turn IN which" Demon Dragon, Sea Crusher - Again, is this suppose to be an optional effect? Demon Dragon, Skullface, Bringer Of Darkness - This should be named "Lord of the Demon Dragons". Demon Dragon, Storm Creator - I feel that this should be a Water Attribute monster (you made Sea Crusher one), or at least Thunder-type. Demon Dragon, The Cause Of Disaster - Where did "Disaster Egg" come from? Demon Dragon, The Creator Of The Sun - Make it a Fire Attribute? Demon Dragon, The DoomRaiser - It cannot be Special Summoned, yet you've put a restriction that does not allow it to be summoned normally. Reverse the way you've worded it. "This monster cannot be normal summoned. It can only be special summoned by..." Demon Dragon, The GraveSeeker - "destroys a monster AS a result of battle" Demon Dragon, The Northen Destroyer - Is it suppose to be "Northen" or "Northern"? And "controls more the one monster" needs to be fixed. Demon Dragon, Thunder Maker - Another wordy effect. Thanks for entertaining me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sin456 Posted July 10, 2009 Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 you have a good idea going on but your wording is bad. Spell out "Attack points" don't abbreviate. I suggest you take the suggestions of the guy above me and re-read your cards. The wording is off, some attributes should be changed, they don't even need to all be dragons either. Some could be "Sea-Serpent" "Thunder" "Pyro" be a little creative. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Card Constructor Posted July 10, 2009 Report Share Posted July 10, 2009 you have a good idea going on but your wording is bad. Spell out "Attack points" don't abbreviate. I suggest you take the suggestions of the guy above me and re-read your cards. The wording is off' date=' some attributes should be changed, they don't even need to all be dragons either. Some could be "Sea-Serpent" "Thunder" "Pyro" be a little creative.[/quote'] Thanks for agreeing :) One thing I must address about your post, however. On official cards, "attack" is put down as ATK, so the abbreviation is fine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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