Alex Mercer Adventures - Episode 1 *Must be at least 13 years or older!*

[Mercer]

I know, a pretty corny name, but I couldn't think of anything better. I'm gonna use real cards, until I make some more, although I'm gonna use my Attribute Dragons. Here are th character's pics in the story right now:
Alex: http://www.ps3attitude.com/uploaded_images/prototype_ps3-711287.jpg
Longhorn: http://lavenderblade.deviantart.com/art/Supreme-General-Guyers-63449047
Rest: http://wolf-in-the-helmet.deviantart.com/art/U-P-U-officer-mk-II-69251534
I'm new to this Fan-Fic stuff, so here goes:

[i]Somewhere in New York City[/i]

Alex: Damn! I gotta get outta here! If the Military catches me, I'm gonna-
Man: Hey you!
Alex: Oh no!
Man: Stand still!
Alex: No way!

Alex ran all through the city trying to escape the military. Alex did nothing wrong. It was just his card. That one card...

Other Man: Gotcha!
Alex: Hey! Let go!
*PUNCH!*
Alex: Ugh...

Alex blacked out...

Alex: Huh? Where am I? What's with this Duel Disc? I don't know what happened. I remembered blacking out and then-
Voice: OK, you maggots! This is how a real duel goes!
Alex: What? I'm in a duel!?
Man: Hey kid, Duel well. This is the Military Base, and I don't wanna embarrass you that much. Oh yeah, and if you lose, we're gonna kill you!
Alex: What!? But I-
Man: I'm your opponent, Randy Longhorn, leader, no, commander, of the whole damn military! Now, it's time to duel!

Alex: 8000 Longhorn: 8000

Alex: *Man! This guy looks tough! But I won't lose! Besides, I got my friend with me...* OK, Longhorn! I'll go first! DRAW! Hmm... I'll play Midnight Fiend in ATK mode!
http://images2.wikia.nocookie.net/yugioh/images/8/80/MidnightFiendB01-JP-C.jpg
ATK/800 DEF/600
Longhorn: HAHAHAHAHA!!!!! A puny 800 ATK point monster? This is a real turn! DRAW! Hmm... hehehe. I summon Field Commander Rahz! And Equip it with 2 Legendary Swords! A 600 ATK and DEF point boost!
http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/yugioh/images/9/91/Field-CommanderRahzPTDN-EN-SR.png
http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/yugioh/images/4/42/LegendarySwordLOB-EN-SP-UE.jpg
ATK/2200 DEF/1200
And Rahz's effect allows me to place 1 Level 4 Warrior-Type monster from my Deck to the top! Hmm... Aha! And now... Attack!
Alex: No! Agh!

Alex: 6600 Longhorn: 8000

Longhorn: Aha! Your move pipsqueak!
Crowd: Yay! Woohoo! Kick his ass Commander Longhorn! Woot Woot!
Alex: Aw man! I gotta focus! DRAW! Hmm.. Aw yes! I summon Opticlops in Attack Position! And Equip it with Dark Energy! Giving it a 300 point boost!
http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/yugioh/images/f/f2/OpticlopsLOD-EN-R.jpg
http://images3.wikia.nocookie.net/yugioh/images/a/ad/DarkEnergyLOB-EU-SP-UE.jpg
ATK/2100 DEF/1900
Attack!
Longhorn: What a noob! You do realize that I can still use Quick-Play Spell cards from my hand?
Alex: Wait, wha-?
Longhorn: Mystical Space Typhoon! Destroy Dark Energy!
Alex: Wait! No! Opticlops stop! Agh!

Alex: 6200 Longhorn: 8000

Longhorn: Ahahaha! My turn! DRAW! Hmm... I think I'm just gonna Attack!
Alex: No! Not again! Agh!

Alex: 4700 Longhorn: 8000

Alex: No! It's the beginning of the duel, and I'm almost halfway finished! No! Get it together Mercer! You can't lose, or else...
Longhorn: Ahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!!

[i]To be continued[/i]

I know it's short, but that's how i'm gonna make my Fan-Fic episodes. Please comment.

[Kendo Fish]

For a first story, I suppose it's alright. But do you really expect US, the readers, to know what Randy and Alex look like? DESCRIBE EVERYTHING. Even Opticlops. I don't know too many new Yu-Gi-Oh cards, unfortunately.

 

I'm not fond of script format, but if it's what the kids these days are getting into, then go ahead.

 

"Hmm...it's not bad, but it's not good, either. You, the Trainer, must put more effort into raising your Pokemon." -I think it's a Pokemon game quote

[Mercer]

For a first story' date=' I suppose it's alright. But do you really expect US, the readers, to know what Randy and Alex look like? DESCRIBE EVERYTHING. Even Opticlops. I don't know too many new Yu-Gi-Oh cards, unfortunately.

 

I'm not fond of script format, but if it's what the kids these days are getting into, then go ahead.

 

"Hmm...it's not bad, but it's not good, either. You, the Trainer, must put more effort into raising your Pokemon." -I think it's a Pokemon game quote

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Thanks for the tip. I'll get some pics in there.