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[spoiler=Lore]This card cannot be Special Summoned. Once per turn, you can activate one of the following effects:

1) Change one monster (excluding this card) on your side of the field's Attribute to DARK, LIGHT, WATER, WIND, FIRE, or EARTH. Put one Attribute Counter on this card (max. 6).

2) Change this cards Attribute to DARK, LIGHT, WATER, WIND, FIRE, or EARTH. Put one Attribute Counter on this card (max. 6).

3) Increase the ATK all monsters on your side of the field by 300 points until the end of the turn this effect was activated. Put one Attribute Counter on this card (max. 6).

Once this card has 6 Attribute counters, send it to the Graveyard.

 

 

Please fix OCG if possible.

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Ok, why is this a 9-star monster? It's pretty underpowered to require three tributes to summon. It's ATK and DEF are terribly low, and it's effect seems pretty useless.

 

Problems with the effect

- You can condense the first two parts of your effect into one. All you had to state was that your card could change ANY monster's attribute on your field once per turn.

 

- The first effect has a major grammatical mistake. You have stated "on your side of the field's Attribute". This makes it seem like the Attribute of the field is being changed, which was obviously not your intention. You may want to word it like so...

 

"Change the Attribute of one monster you control"

 

The above now implies that the monster recieves the Attribute change. Very technical, I know, but if you are making realistic cards, you'll need to learn this stuff.

 

- Remove the attribute counter concept in general. Why would you have a monster that destroys itself? That's just poor planning.

 

 

Take my advice into consideration for future cards.

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