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[align=center]Sonic Heal

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[spoiler=Lore]Activate only during your opponent's Main Phase. After activation, Special Summon this card; it is treated as an Effect Monster Card (Beast-Type/EARTH/Level 4/ATK 100/DEF 1500). This card cannot be attacked if there is another Earth monster on the Field.Every turn this card is on the field put 1 Counter on this card during each of your Standby Phases. When this card is destroyed, Increase your Life Points by the amount of counters by X 200 points.

 

 

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Can you point you the Grammatical and OCG errors.

 

Hah, that's not my job. I'll give you a few examples though.

 

- Don't use a semicolon.

 

- Correct "feild" (I see you've already done so)

 

- Put a comma after "feild", as you are starting a new clause

 

- "Every turn this card is on the field put 1 Counter on this card during each of your Standby Phases" <---- This should be condensed to "During each of your Standby Phases, put 1 Counter on this card."

 

- Specify what type of counter if possible

 

- Do not capitalize "increase" in your last sentence

 

- "Increase your Life Points by the amount of counters by X 200 points" is an ugly sentence. Change it to reduce the use of "by" to one.

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