Careless Whisper Posted July 16, 2009 Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 Lol, just kidding!! Anyway, check out my new poem. [align=center]I am but a... I am but a simple poetRhyming line after lineEither just to past the timeor simply to make a dimeA poets words to forget. I am but a white wolfSearching for that moonLate in the afternoonHowling for what's newYet unapparent at the time. I am but a single flowerBlooming for the dayuntil night when I decayAsleep until I sayWhen the sun can rise again. I am but an ordinary manPromised a great dealWith a gun to concealLooking for what is realBut never finding what I need. I am but an abstract poetWho's words make no senseTo those of unintelligenceTo those of dirt and unclenseMisunderstood and forgotton.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akira Posted July 16, 2009 Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 Damn. I was expecting another "BAWW WE NEEDS MORE/BETTER MODS" thread and this left me disappointed. OT: Now that you've dragged me in here, I'm afraid reviewing poems isn't my thing. -moves along- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Felix Culpa Posted July 16, 2009 Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 It's okay... I just don't have patience for such long poems, though I can stand Poe... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted July 16, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 @Akira: If you uninterested in my poetry, then prevent yourself from posting in this thread, then. @One Word: Thank you. Edgar Allen Poe always has an influence in my poetry. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Akira Posted July 16, 2009 Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 @Akira: If you uninterested in my poetry' date=' then prevent yourself from posting in this thread, then.[/quote'] I was merely commenting on your misleading title. Thread title=relevant to discussion, no? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shradow Posted July 16, 2009 Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 I don't really read poems except for Frost. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted July 16, 2009 Report Share Posted July 16, 2009 Eh. I don't like your rhyming scheme.Or the content really...it looks like you just grabbed the first word you could think of that rhymed with the last word you used, then wrangled it into a sentence. I think your last stanza sums up the poem pretty well though. But then...I don't do the whole poetry thing, so my review is just my personal opinion without any real knowledge on the subject matter. [/review] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kirsten889 Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 It's an ok poem. I've seen better, but it's still a good poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
40kendgame Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 It's good, not to the point of publishing, but pretty good.Rhyme is not needed to make a good poem, and it kind of makes this one a bit confusing. Btw, I would think an on-topic title for this thread would actually attract more people. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 It's good' date=' not to the point of publishing, but pretty good.Rhyme is not needed to make a good poem, and it kind of makes this one a bit confusing. Btw, I would think an on-topic title for this thread would actually attract more people.[/quote'] No it wouldn't, but it might attract more people who care. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted July 17, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 @Akira: If you uninterested in my poetry' date=' then prevent yourself from posting in this thread, then.[/quote'] I was merely commenting on your misleading title. Thread title=relevant to discussion, no? The sole purpose the title is to attract members, not to actually be relevant to the actual topic of the thread. @Everyone else: You'd be surprised that this poem actually does have a deep meaning in it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 Edgar Allen Poe? reminds me of the Beatles... infact he was in one of their songs, 'I am the walrus'. I got to "simple poet" and gave up. Sure it's good though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WTF Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 god you remind me of edgar allen poe from english class i cant take lon poems Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pikachu Posted July 17, 2009 Report Share Posted July 17, 2009 Seriously, screw these titles. Anyways, a great poem. I sense that you will have a good future in poetry. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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