yugiohisawsome5885 Posted July 26, 2009 Report Share Posted July 26, 2009 Create Your Own Dragons And Post Fan Ficts Related To the Topic Yugioh 7dsSyrick was in shock he took a trip to a amusement park and found himself caught in a duel with Rex Goodwin a dark signer a evil immortal. now he was trapped in a jail cell in the underworld faced with a hard decision become a dark signer and save his save his sister but have to fight his best friends leo and luna or have his sister fall into the dark pits of the underworld and escape the cell....... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 It's one sentence? Sorry if I'm being rude here, but did you really try very hard to write this? It's hardly a chapter. It's just "This person wa sin shock he ran around in circles he bumped into this guy whom only 5ds watchers will know but if you don't you're screwed some random crap happens blah blah..." It's not engaging at all. It's just nonsense because of how fast and incredibly non-descriptive it is. Even if it's a prologue it makes no sense...in my eyes. And how'd two more awesome dragons get here? I hope there's a reason...*growls through teeth* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yugiohisawsome5885 Posted July 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 Sorry if you thought this was to short i will make it as long as I could ok1 more thing Im new so you don't have to make fun of me . But I am still sorry it is so short Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 First-Don't Double postSecond-Here, being new/english being your second languae etc. won't help you much. Not from me, anyways.Third-It's short, it sucks, even Weather Report wouldn't do this(Probably). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Weather Report - Stand Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 He's right, I wouldn't. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted July 28, 2009 Report Share Posted July 28, 2009 Not to mention,your capitalization is horrible. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cuckoos Posted July 29, 2009 Report Share Posted July 29, 2009 ... Should someone report this? This fan-fic is the shortest I've ever seen. Try to make it longer, and more descriptive, and fix your grammar... Oh, who am I kidding, this fan-fic will go nowhere. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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