The Greatness Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 [spoiler=Effect]"1 Tuner + 1 non-Tuner monsters" This card gains 300 ATK for each monster on the field and 300 DEF for each monster in your and your opponents hands. If this card is attacked by a non-DARK monster, your opponent loses 700 Life Points. If that card is a LIGHT monster, your opponent loses 700 Life Points + the Battle Damage you have taken. Doom Dragon set might be created if I get good comments and ratings! Tell me what you think. I'm trying to make a 10/10 card so I have to start from getting feed back and help with OCG and stuff, even if the comments and rating are harsh. Comment and rate! Please! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bengal Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 "1 Tuner Monster + 1 or more Non-Tuner Monster" = "1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monsters" every = each Dark type = DARK life points = Life Points Light = LIGHT battle damage = Battle Damage Not bad card, the image is good (although it is overused), the OCG isn't too bad, just check the OCG thread to get to know what is capitalized and what isn't. The card seems overpowered to me. My suggestion is to lower it to a Level 8 or so, and change the 500 to around 100, and change the 1000 to around 500. Keep trying, make lower level monsters with less powerful effects and you'll be fine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Catman25 Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 Edit: Bengal beat me to it. =/ The quotes are not needed. Opponent's hand, Non-DARK. Type I believe isn't needed when talking about DARK. Life Points. LIGHT. And the wording is off in the last sentence, not sure how to fix it. =/ I think I got most of the ocg errors, of course no ones perfect. ^_^Imo, this card seems a little overpowered. It could get a total of 7000 ATK. And for the DEF, you wouldn't actually know the # of monsters in your opp. hand. Not too bad, ocg could use some work, pic is good. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 500 atk gain is a little too much With a max of 10 monster total, its atk can reach up to 7000, though that's not likely. Still, you should say it only gains 300 atk per monster on the field 7.3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Greatness Posted July 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 i fixed it rate the new version Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LiAM Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 every = each life points = Life Points you never put a + in the effect, 'and' will do. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
the ritual Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 it was a very good card, but some ocg errors.very cool pic.9/10Click here to feed me a Star Fruit!Get your own at Flyffables! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Greatness Posted July 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 i fixed the ocg errors (i think) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 now it looks more balanced out, so I'll raise the boost to 8.4/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WTF Posted July 30, 2009 Report Share Posted July 30, 2009 pic overused OCG is good 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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