The Dark Tomentor & The Fire Tomentor

[DeathSDelano]

ok edited versions (now its 2 different cards)

 

holoing credit to ♥ ЅϯᵲåώӀӞ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ ♥

 

This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 4 DARK monsters from your Graveyard. Once per turn, remove from play up to 3 DARK monsters from play than this card gains 1 of the following effects according to the total number of DARK monsters remove from play.

*1 DARK: decrease the ATK of all non-DARK monsters by 400. During the turn you activate this effect all DARK monsters you control must attack or will be destroyed at the End Phase of this turn.

*2 DARK: Destroy up to 2 non-DARK monsters on the field. During the turn you activate this effect this card and 1 other monster your control cannot attack.

*3 DARK: Destroy all non-DARK monsters on the field. During the turn you activate this effect you cannot activate another effect, Summon, or conduct your Battle Phase.

 

This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 4 FIRE monsters from your Graveyard. Once per turn, remove from play up to 3 FIRE monsters from play than this card gains 1 of the following effects according to the total number of FIRE monsters remove from play.

*1 FIRE monster: Inflict 400 pionts of damage to your opponent each time you destroy a monster they control by battle.

*2 FIRE: Inflict 300 pionts of damage times the total number of FIRE monster in your Graveyard. During the turn you activate this effect you cannot activate any other monster effects or conduct your Battle Phase.

*3 FIRE: Send your hand to the Graveyard than inflict 400 pionts of damage times the total number of cards send to the Graveyard by this effect. During the turn you activate this effect your opponent takes no battle damage until the End Phase of their turn.

[Enrise]

Too long of an effect. Instead, try using, "This card can only be Summoned by.." instead of using this card cannot be Normal Summoned-" and all that jazz. If you want, I'll even shorten the effect my way. How does that sound ;D

Nah, just kidding. But long effects are really bad.

[DeathSDelano]

XD but these are seperate effects that it gains by meeting requirements XD

i'll change the 2nd and 3rd line

[WTF]

very LLLLLLOOOOOONNNNNNGGGGGG effect

 

7/10

[Bengal]

Good card, the image is alright, the OCG is solid, and the effect is creative.

 

Perhaps the effect is too long, but at least it shows effort put into the card.

 

8.5/10

[DeathSDelano]

xD i know its long but thats the piont

 

here is the slightly shorter version(very slightly)

This card is also treated as a FIRE Pyro-Type monster. This card can only be Summoned by removing from play 2 DARK monsters and 2 FIRE monsters from your Graveyard. Once per turn, remove from play up to 3 FIRE or DARK monsters from play than this card gains 1 of the following effect(s) according to the total number of FIRE or DARK monsters remove from play.

*1 FIRE monster: Inflict 400 pionts of damage to your opponent each time you destroy a monster they control by battle.

*1 DARK: decrease the ATK of all non-DARK monsters by 400. During the turn you activate this effect all DARK monsters you control must attack or will be destroyed at the End Phase of this turn.

*2 FIRE: Inflict 300 pionts of damage times the total number of FIRE monster in your Graveyard. During the turn you activate this effect you cannot activate any other monster effects or conduct your Battle Phase.

*2 DARK: Destroy up to 2 non-DARK monsters on the field. During the turn you activate this effect this card and 1 other monster your control cannot attack.

*3 FIRE: Send your hand to the Graveyard than inflict 400 pionts of damage times the total number of cards send to the Graveyard by this effect. During the turn you activate this effect your opponent takes no battle damage until the End Phase of their turn.

*3 DARK: Destroy all non-DARK monsters on the field. During the turn you activate this effect you cannot activate another effect, Summon, or conduct your Battle Phase.

 

lol i just got an idea to make this shorter xD

 

take the FIRE Pyro-type part and make it into another card

[Enrise]

EDIT button. It exists for a reason.

But yeah, much shorter, because you don't have half the effect box empty and a really tiny effect that is long.

Either way, OCG, Pic, Name, Effect (Oh yeah), are all good.

[AbbatonStrikes]

This card is also treated as a FIRE Pyro-Type monster. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 2 DARK and 2 FIRE monsters from your Graveyard. Once per turn, remove from play up to 3 FIRE or DARK monsters from play, this card gains 1 of the following effect(s) according to the total number of FIRE or DARK monsters remove from play.

*1 FIRE monster: Inflict 400 points of damage to your opponent each time you destroy a monster they control by battle.

*1 DARK: Decrease the ATK of all non-DARK monsters by 400. During the turn you activate this effect all DARK monsters you control must attack or will be destroyed at the End Phase of the turn.

*2 FIRE: Inflict 300 points of damage for each FIRE monster in your Graveyard. During the turn you activate this effect you cannot activate any other monster effects or conduct your Battle Phase.

*2 DARK: Destroy up to 2 non-DARK monsters on the field. During the turn you activate this effect this card and 1 other monster your control cannot attack.

*3 FIRE: Send your hand to the Graveyard than inflict 400 points of damage for each card. Your opponent takes no battle damage on the turn this effect is activated.

*3 DARK: Destroy all non-DARK monsters on the field. During the turn you activate this effect you cannot activate another effect, Summon, or conduct your Battle Phase.

 

Right I tried to make it alittle shorter for you matey make it seem abit more real as you'd never had this long an effect on a card... nice pic and name maybe lower the ATK points a little but other then that cool card 9/10

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yeah but with the amount of efect damage and cards you can remove I thought it was abit high. Yeah that maybe a good idea matey still like the idea alot alot

[DeathSDelano]

ok know its 2 cards

instead of 1

[AbbatonStrikes]

yep yep yep that makes it a much easier pair of cards to work with matey. 9.5/0 for DARK Tormentor and 8.5/10 for FIRE Tormentor...just dont like the pic very much maybe something more detailed...still cool cards

[DarthSuhail]

when its summoned they will have the third effect , and prob always will

[DeathSDelano]

XD no they don't its seperate from the summoning

 

yes i know but thats a temp pic until i find something better (working on it now)

[Rideouter]

9.5/10 because of the burn burn and nuliffying (or what ever) effects!

[DeathSDelano]

yep yep yep that makes it a much easier pair of cards to work with matey. 9.5/0 for DARK Tormentor and 8.5/10 for FIRE Tormentor...just dont like the pic very much maybe something more detailed...still cool cards

 

is this image any better for the FIRE Tormentor

[ragnarok1945]

the effects are just fine the way they are, long, but it takes much to get them out anyway

 

9/10

[DeathSDelano]

and if you put Gran maji da eza(or however you spell his name) with the Fire Tomentor it can give you a pretty good Beatstick if you can get it set up correctly

[ragnarok1945]

yeah I figured as much, so I see no reason to change the effects

[DeathSDelano]

i wasn't going to any way xD i like the effects you got the fire burner and the dark support/attacker