My first card(Don't be harsh mates)

[Megaduck]

[White Hollow]

needs ocg fix. and good pic. 7/10

[Megaduck]

What's OCG? And what do you mean, it needs fix? That's teh same spelling as on my official Yugioh cards.

[White Hollow]

the way you say its effect is wrong

[Megaduck]

Well you might want to say what is wrong with it...

[J-Max]

Exactly Megaduck. I Hate it when members say OCG Errors but don't mention them....

[Megaduck]

Wow, a mod.

Yer a Pokefan?

 

But really, I used my real cards to make this effect....

[J-Max]

lol, Yep a huge Pokemon Fan :P So come on then 1227, I dare you to name these "OCG Errors" Bet you can't

[White Hollow]

you shouldn't say "this card is then" for example and if its so, your cards are trash

[Dougidog]

I love the creative special effect.

Keep it up :P

[Guest Zeonark]

you shouldn't say "this card is then" for example and if its so' date=' your cards are trash

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*Facepalm*

 

The name is little bland but I like it. Nice looking picture too. It's kinda like a Mini Stardust Dragon with it's effect. It's a bit underpowered though, I mean, it's already level 3 with a low ATK. Doesn't need to come back with 600 ATK less right?

 

7/10 - Good.

[Megaduck]

Wow, you guys are not as harsh as dmz said lolz

Good fer me I guess.

 

"This card is then...." is the effect on many Union stuff and older monster cards.....I do my homework.

My cards are trash, and it's you saying? Man, you don't know me...this is my firsts self-made card here, but I know the game for years... Was 3rd in the World Finals 2 years ago, with my "Trash cards".... I know the spelling on official cards, so don't say that I do this and that wrong if you can't back it up. Ok honey?

 

Everybody else, thank you and excuse my argument :D

[White Hollow]

my apologies.i thought you were using the new card system but if you want me to rate it as an old card 9/10 :D

[DMZ]

There is actually New Ocg there XD. Your Field, your opponent's field etc :)

 

The card is a mix of OCG, pic is good and "This card is then .." is not really wrong...

 

 

8/10

[:^)]

"During your End Phase" not "At the End Phase"

 

Nice for a New Member

[Near Rivers]

Correct ocg really doesn't seem all that much of importance if you understand what the card's saying. That's just my opinion anyways.

[ragnarok1945]

OCG errors are to be expected since you're new, though there's not that many anyway

 

and the first sentence I'd add when it's NORMAL Summoned

 

that way when its special summoned you can't use the effect again so easily

 

8/10

[Aero~]

Really good for a first card. 8/10

[~Wright~]

Awesome first card! :D

Effect

OCG (official card grammar) corrections

When a card effect activates during the End Phase, you can send this card to the Graveyard to negate that effect. (not quite sure what the effect means) If you do this, Special Summon this card from your Graveyard with an ATK and DEF of 500.

 

The effect is good, but it's a little simple. Even so, I like it. That, and it is WAAAYYY better than most people's (that I've seen at least) first card! Mine was terrible, lol. Maybe add this to the effect?

While this card is in your Graveyard, you can remove it from play to negate the effect of a card that activates during the End Phase, and destroy it.

 

That goes with the theme of the card, and would be easy to use. :)

 

Picture

The picture is ok, but it isn't very good. If you want better pictures, you can use the links in J-Max'es more my sig. (in my sig, preferably use the ones that go to YCM archives.) There are plenty of good images in the showcase section on this site.

 

Name

The name is a little bland. Usually, longer names are best. When I make card names, they usually have something, an colon, then something else. ie Guard of Flame: Defender.

 

Overall, I think this card could use a little work, but is excellent, especially for a first card. Happy cardmaking!