Hayate the Combat Butler Set (11/??)

[DL]

This is a Hayate the Combat Butler set, which I put more effort and less noobishness in than my last one.

There are 1 or 2 fake types, but I don't see what else they can be.

 

 

This card can be Special Summoned from your hand by paying 1500 Life Points when you control a face-up "Nagi Sanzenin". When this card is Special Summoned, add 2 "Debt Counters" to this card and return all cards your opponent controls back to their hand. During the End Phase, you lose 200 Life Points for each "Debt Counter" on this card.

 

 

When this card battles a WIND monster, decrease this card's ATK by 600 until the End Phase. If you control a face-up "Hayate the Combat Butler", when this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, discard 1 random card from your opponent's hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, you can discard 1 card to destroy 1 Spell or Trap Card your opponent controls.

 

 

If you control a face-up "Hayate the Combat Butler", this card is unaffected by Spell or Trap Card effects. During your End Phase, if this card is face-up on your side of the field and you do not control a face-up "Hayate the Combat Butler", you can draw 1 card or discard a card to destroy 1 card on the field.

 

 

This card cannot be attacked if you control another monster. If you control no other monsters, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. If this card battles a Fiend-Type monster, destroy the monster at the end of the Damage Step. During the End Phase, if you only have 1 card in your hand, you can draw 1 card.

 

 

When you successfully Normal Summon this card, you can add 1 "Nagi Sanzenin" from your Deck to your hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, increase its ATK by 200.

 

 

If a face up "Nagi Sanzenin" on your side of the field would be destroyed, you can destroy this card instead. When this card is destroyed, you can discard 1 card and remove from play 1 "Nagi Sanzenin" from your Graveyard to destroy 1 Monster Card and 2 Spell or Trap Cards on the field.

 

 

If you control a face-up "Nagi Sanzenin", you can Tribute this card to Special Summon 1 "Hayate the Combat Butler" from your hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, increase your Life Points by 200. During your End Phase, if this card is face-up on your side of the field, you lose 300 Life Points.

 

feedback appreciated.

More to come.

[El Make]

Wind-type? Shouldn't it be WIND (cuz it's an attribute)? Everything else is good. Lol Debt Counters! But where's Maria? 9/10

[Guest Neo Fusion]

Wind-Type=WIND

an appanent=your opponent

by Trap Card effects=the effects of Trap Cards (well, not sure if this is an error, but just in case)

uppercase damage step

only errors, these r good otherwise

[DL]

Thanks for the OCG fixes.

 

Added maria and fix'd OCG.

[Shadow Zero]

interesting cards. they seem balanced enough i guess, and the pics are good. just make sure that you remember to crop pictures as needed so that they do not become overly squished.

8.5/10

[DL]

that's what I used GIMP for. It works wonders.

 

thanks for commenting.

[Kailyn Leona Kyosuke]

So far...ill rate purely based on card critique (since idk much about the anime)

 

Images: 9/10 Great! a little more and it'd be perfect, but some do feel...slightly less impressive than the rest.

 

Effects: 7/10

Hayate + Negi = way too R@pe on their own...

Hinagiku = Weak....

Isumi + Maria = ok, but not that great...

 

Card strengths: 8/10

Good atk/def balance, but i still think Hayate = More BS than Judgment Dragon/ Dark Armed Dragon

 

Overall: 8/10

 

Great, but not quite enough to make my eyes pop out in a WOW moment...

[DL]

Really? Well, if you read the series, you'd get Hinagiku's weakness to air, and I think her and nagi + hayate = OP'd, cause hardly any lvl 6's have 2600 ATK.

 

nagi and hayate are only OP'd if you cotrol the other one when you summon one of them.

 

Thanks for the comment, though.

 

 

Update!

[Guest Neo Fusion]

nice new cards, just know one=1, two=2 and so on

[DL]

thanks for the comemnt.

 

Which card did I use one and two on?

 

Also edited nagi.

[Time Psyduck]

Nice cards (apart from the fake types, but I'll overlook them).

 

Regarding Hayate Ayasaki:

 

If you have a face-up "Nagi Sanzenin" on the field and a "Hayate the Combat Butler" in your hand, you can Tribute this card to Special Summon 1 "Hayate the Combat Butler" from your hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, increase your Life Points by 200. During your End Phase, if this card is face-up on your side of the field, you lose 300 Life Points.

 

The bold section is redundant, the text should read as:

 

If you have a face-up "Nagi Sanzenin" on the field you can Tribute this card to Special Summon 1 "Hayate the Combat Butler" from your hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, increase your Life Points by 200. During your End Phase, if this card is face-up on your side of the field, you lose 300 Life Points.

[DL]

yeah, I guess it's unnecessary. Thanks for the comment.

 

And thanks for overlookin the fake types. (I hate having fake types rated lower...)

[Guest Neo Fusion]

LP=Life Points

an opponent=your opponent

good new card

[DL]

thanks for the fix.

 

Although I think 'an opponent's' is okay.

[DL]

update.

 

Yeah, a small one, but...

[-SupernovA-]

Good cards, I'm going to look over the effects closer shortly and post OCG fixes if I see any.

 

Hayate the Combat Butler OCG Fix

This card can be Special Summoned from your hand by paying 1500 Life Points when you control a face-up "Nagi Sanzenin". When this card is Special Summoned, add 2 "Debt Counters" to this card and return all cards your opponent controls back to their hand. During the End Phase, you lose 200 Life Points for each "Debt Counter" on this card.

(I believe this is the correct way to say it, it's surely a easier way.)

 

Isumi Saginomiya OCG Fix

This card cannot be attacked if you control another monster. If you control no other monsters, this card can attack your opponent's Life Points directly. If this card battles a Fiend-Type monster, destroy the monster at the end of the Damage Step. During the End Phase, if you only have 1 card in your hand, you can draw 1 card.

(Not sure if uncapitalizing deck is necessary.)

 

Maria - Sanzenin Maid OCG Fix

When you successfully Normal Summon this card, you can add 1 "Nagi Sanzenin" from your deck to your hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, increase its ATK by 200.

(Not sure about uncapitalizing deck, most of the cards I've seen have it uncapitalized so I'm just going with that assumption.)

 

Punching Out Santa Claus OCG Fix

This card can only be activated when your opponent activates a Effect Monster's effect, and you control a face-up "Hayate the Combat Butler". Negate the effect and destroy the monster. If this card is in your Graveyard, you can remove it from play to Special Summon 1 Monster Card from your Graveyard. The monster's effect is negated, and it is destroyed during the End Phase.

 

Hayate's Hostage Rescue OCG Fix

This card can only be equipped to "Hayate the Combat Butler". If a "Nagi Sanzenin" under your control is destroyed, increase the equipped monster's ATK by 600. The equipped monster cannot be destroyed as a result of battle, and is unaffected by Effect Monster's effects. Destroy the equipped monster during the End Phase.

 

Hayata Ayasaki OCG Fix

If you have a face-up "Nagi Sanzenin" on the field and a "Hayate the Combat Butler" in your hand, you can Tribute this card to Special Summon 1 "Hayate the Combat Butler" from your hand. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle, increase your Life Points by 200. During your End Phase, if this card is face-up on your side of the field, you lose 300 Life Points.

(No changes in the text, just specify where the card can be tributed from.)

 

Hayate's Crushing Destiny OCG Fix

This card can only be activated if you control a face-up "Hayate Ayasaki". Pay 1000 Life Points and Tribute 1 "Hayate Ayasaki" you control and Special Summon 1 "Hayate the Combat Butler" from your hand or deck. Equip it with this card. A monster equipped with this card has its effect negated. If this card is destroyed, destroy the equipped monster. If this equipped monster is destroyed, remove this card from play.

(again, one of the changes I made was uncapitalizing deck, if that's wrong you can change it back.)

 

A Butler's Job OCG Fix

This card can only be activated if a "Nagi Sanzenin" is under your control is selected as an attack target and you control a face-up "Hayate the Combat Butler". Switch the attack target to "Hayate the Combat Butler".

 

 

Hope this helped.

[DL]

thanks, I appreciate it, since the rought drafts of these cards were kinda old.

 

I did go through them, but I might have missed a few msitakes.

[lilmantoot]

I don't know this show

but the cards look okay.

8.5/10

[DL]

It's a great show, I reccomend it to anyone.

 

Thanks for the comment.

[-SupernovA-]

I'll go back and bold the changes I made if it'll help. Just give the word.

[DL]

that'd be great. ^_^

[-SupernovA-]

All done.

 

Edit: I did a quick fix to Hayate's Rescue just now, so you might want to look at that one again. I made the change in my MSW but forgot to do it in the actual post. >_<

 

I just reworded how the monster's ATK is increased.

[DL]

these help alot, although I found some faults.

 

as a result of battle is old, was changed to by battle to make it shorter. (I like as a result of battle better, though)

 

Deck is capitalized, but most people forget to do it.

 

The equip/activate only in a certain condition effects are how they should be, according to official yugioh cards that I looked up on google.

 

Thanks for everything else though. ^_^

[Jolta]

Never really watched this Anime.

 

Quite good of Pics.

 

Loli-Type? IDK if I should make my own.

 

9/10

[DL]

XD

 

Loli-type...

 

DMG already made a loli-type set, I think.