My first card

[bubtheman]

My first card im posting ive made a few more, never decided to use the forums thos so here it is.

 

 

Just noticed the mistakes heres what i ment for it to say

 

Lore:Activate only while there are less than 11 cards in your deck. Select one card from your graveyard and place it 10 cards bellow the top card of your opponents deck. When they draw that card durring thier Draw Phase they lose. When this card is destoryed you lose.

[RedRaptor10]

Weird but cool effect. There are some minor errors in the text though. 9/10

 

capitalize the g in graveyard. Instead of "When they draw", make it "When your opponent draws" After "they lose" put "the duel" and same for after "you lose". Also i'm not sure if "deck" should be capitalized or not.

[ragnarok1945]

spelling, capitalization, and OCG errors

 

personally I dislike instant win/loss effects, so I'll only give this 5/10

[Kabuchimaru]

This card is decent, but easily counterable. It'd be tough to play it directly on your twelfth draw, and if you don't then you'd lose regardless.

 

"I Activate my Trap card Doom!"

 

"I chain Mystical Space Typhoon! Yes! Thanks for the cheap win! Wanna be buddies?"

[orangketan]

That card is too risky and easy to destroy so there's no reason to activate it if I were you...

some spelling errors and OCG errors but to come up with that kind of Idea.. you're really creative!!!

[6.9/10]

[Shocked]

The pic is.. weird.. Dunno wudz that..

 

The effect seems good. No problem.

 

The OCG is horrible.. Many errors.

 

7/10 for first card