hell_sword2280 Posted March 31, 2010 Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 Lifeforce Strike Fairy LORE: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand during your Main Phase by paying 2000 Life Points. During each of your Standby Phases, you must pay 500 Life Points and increase this card's ATK and DEF by 500 or destroy this card. This card cannot gain or lose ATK, except by its own effect. If this card is destroyed, its controller gains Life Points equal to this card's total ATK. I think I have everything just the way I want it, but something tells me one of y'all will be able to fix it 'cuz I can't quite figure out just what's wrong with it, if anything. Pointing out OCG is appreciated, but please state WHAT they are, and provide a fix. Peace,hell_sword2280 UPDATE: I changed the effect so it is "Life Point neutral", meaning BEFORE: if it was destroyed, you would only gain back half the LP you paid to summon/power it up; NOW: you gain it all back. I'm planning to make an accompanying Spell Card which enhances this effect (adds 1/4 additional LP or something like that). Thanks for the suggestions for improvements! You guys have really helped improve my card-making. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Marluxia~ Posted March 31, 2010 Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 There are plenty of OCG errors, and i'm not too crazy about the picture. 4/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hell_sword2280 Posted March 31, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 There are plenty of OCG errors' date=' and i'm not too crazy about the picture. 4/10[/quote'] Ok, so what ARE the OCG errors? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Marluxia~ Posted March 31, 2010 Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 I'm to lazy to put them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darj Posted March 31, 2010 Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 OCG fix (or shortening) I could find: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned from your hand during your Main Phase by paying 2000 Life Points. During each of Standby Phases, you must pay 500 Life Points and increase this card's ATK and DEF by 500 or destroy this card and gain Life Points equal to half this card's ATK. This card cannot gain or lose ATK, except by its own effect. I see you wanted to make her immune to ATK reduction, but this card is still vulnerable to cards that halve or double ATK. You might want to change that. As for the effect, I don't think is good. The card comes quickly at a high cost, but you have to wait while it gains ATK, and with only 2000 ATK at the start, it is vulnerable to many monsters with higher ATK (Cyber Dragon and Wulf among them, which have 100 more ATK). Personally, I would only use her as a quick Tribute fodder or as Synchro Material, but still there are other cards that can be summoned at an smaller cost. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jorobi89 Posted March 31, 2010 Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 This cards effect is too pricey, i mean you pay alot of life points to use her even if the feild is open you still have traps like sakuretsu armor that can destroy it and then ur 2000 lp short, plus no monster... try to mod the effect a bit more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hell_sword2280 Posted March 31, 2010 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2010 Alright, I will do some modifying, keep tuned in if you are interested, thank you for the suggestions! :) Peace,hell_sword2280 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted April 2, 2010 Report Share Posted April 2, 2010 OCG errors aside, the effect is ok, not great LP gain was never THAT critical in duels anyway, so I'd welcome it, but that's about it 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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