TableCloth358 Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or cannot be set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by removing from play up to 8 monsters in your Graveyard or field. This cards ATK is equal to the number of cards removed by this effect for each card 500. When a card effect is activated you con decrease this cards ATK to 0 to negate the activation of that cards effect and destroy it and deal damage to your opponent equal to half the ATK reduced. This card ATK goes back to what it was. I have no clue if what i said was said right in its effect... as i am new and don't know that much i've played yugioh for a long time so yeah if it needs correcting please help correct... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest miura II Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Alot of OCG errors I can't correct right now. 5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Offical Card Game? what errors of that do i hav? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nitro Death Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Ok, i'm trying to be gentle. (I know you're new, i was too.) "This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set." not "This card cannot be normal summoned. this card cannot be set." Whenever you type something that has "Summon" in it (EX Normal Summon) the letters of both are capitalized like i put. graveyard needs to be Graveyard. I'm not sure how to correct "and/or" but i would say from your side of the Field and your Graveyard. Get rid of the italic text "this cards own effect" it already applies =) Con = Can (Typo I know.) attack points = ATK points. Get rid of "and destroy it and deal damage to your opponent equal to half the attack reduced. this cards attack goes back to that number at the end of the trun." it makes it too OP'ed. Still, because you are new here, I will go easy on you. I advise you change these as soon as possible so other people don't do this. =) and because you're new, i will give you 8/10 for the idea. P.S. OCG = Official Card Grammar Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Okay thank you i will change ASAP and is there like a list of the OCG stuff so i can Study it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nitro Death Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 OCG is how people want it to be ABSOLUTELY PERFECT GRAMMAR. I judge based on the Idea, Creativity, and Originality. If you have trouble look at a card and copy the effect if it's the same (Example: Fusion Monster.) It's ok, no one will yell for it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Canadian Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Ima, couldn't you just have copied the effect and bolded what was needed to be fixed as well? I like the card's idea and I understand its effect, very creative for a new member. Also, welcome to YCM (: Great first card. I hope to see alot more from you in the future ^^! 8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Thank you both of you i will make more very soon ;) but still i need like a List of the Offical Card Grammer if there is one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno I20 Posted April 12, 2010 Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Thank you both of you i will make more very soon ;) but still i need like a List of the Offical Card Grammer if there is one just go to YuGiOh wiki and look up a card with a similar effect like Ima said and use that effect. thats what i do. i sound like an advertisement guy but im not... This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be special summoned except by removing from play up to 8 monsters in your graveyard or field. The original ATK and DEF of this card are each 800 x the number of monsters removed by this effect. When a card effect is activated' date=' you can [b']reduce the ATK of this card to 0 until the End Phase[/b] to negate the activation of that card's effect and destroy it and deal damage to your opponent equal to half the ATK reduced. i think thats how the OCG should be like Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted April 12, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 12, 2010 Thanks inferno i dont want to copy your work but i'll use it asa Giudline so i can learn thank you :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno I20 Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 copy my work?you mean the Blazing Infernos? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Canadian Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 He means your OCG corrections..... Also, Table, if people post the entirely fix'd version of your Lore, take it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inferno I20 Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 oh the way he worded it confused me...if he said something like"copy the method of acquiring effects...bla, bla" or something like that then i can understandthanks? i guess... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted April 13, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 Oh sorry fi i confused you lol and okay if someone dose i will take it thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
coleio12 Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 I'd say it's OK 6/10 (being gentle) just i'd think reduce the card cost alittle to destroy an effect monster. OH yeah and good pic for that first card of yours Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TableCloth358 Posted April 13, 2010 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 Well also it inflicts damage too so i thought it was okay Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
έκλειψη Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 Ima' date=' couldn't you just have copied the effect and bolded what was needed to be fixed as well? I like the card's idea and I understand its effect, very creative for a new member. Also, welcome to YCM (: Great first card. I hope to see alot more from you in the future ^^! 8/10.[/url'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adogadog8 Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 Ok, now for the card, its good for a first, but i think you have it OP'ed because if you decide to not negate an effect it could have 4000+ ATK because you can remove a lot of cards from play in your graveyard.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darman05 Posted April 13, 2010 Report Share Posted April 13, 2010 When you fix the OCG 8/10 (being Nice) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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