My Custom Japanese Card

[So Legit You Quit]

[spoiler=Lore]1 Warrior-Type Tuner + 1 LIGHT Non-Tuner Monster

Once Per Turn you can Discard 1 Monster from your Hand to have this card gain the Attribute of the discarded card. This card can not be Destroyed by Battle when in Defense Position. When this card is Removed from the Field, destroy all monsters on the Field with the same Attribute as this Monster.

ATK: 3200, DEF: 2800

 

 

This is my first custom Japanese card. So comment on the card but id also like you to comment on the overall look too, Thanks.

[Ghoulish]

cant see the atk and def and severly Upd, all it basically does is gain a different attribute and cant be destroyed in defence and itll destroy monster you control with the same attribute. Ill give u one thing theough it is a bit original, but yea try adding a new effect, ocg isnt to great either, i think it should be more like this:

1 Warrior-Type Tuner + 1 LIGHT Non-Tuner Monster

Once Per Turn you can Discard 1 Monster from your hand to have this card gain the Attribute of the discarded card. This card cannot be destroyed by battle while in Defense Position. When this card is removed from the field, destroy all monsters you control with the same attribute that this card had when it was removed.

[賢狼ホロ]

Rather;

1 Warrior-Type Tuner + 1 or more LIGHT non-Tuner monster

Once per turn, you can discard 1 monster card to have this card gain the same Attribute as the discarded card. This card cannot be destroyed in Defense Position. When this card is removed from the field, destroy all monsters you control with the same Attribute as this monster.

 

Your Japanese OCG is not good (sorry : P)

戦士族／シンクロ／効果

戦士族チューナー＋光属性チューナー以外のモンスター１体以上

手札からモンスターカードを１枚捨て、このカードが捨てたモンスターと同じ属性になる。この守備表示モンスターは戦闘では破壊されない。このカードは、フィールドから離れた場合は自分フィールド上に存在する同じ属性モンスターを破壊する。

 

I do not like this very much, the cannot be destroyed by battle effect is not so interesting and the changing Attribute is only a drawback as you need to destroy all your monsters when this card is destroyed. If it included your opponent, then it would be a better card.

[So Legit You Quit]

Added the ATK and DEF to the Spoiler. Card effect changed to INclude monsters on both yours and your opponents field.

And what do you mean Japanese OCG?

[ProSora]

meh its not good, but for your first try its good

your missing atk and def, name text needs to be moved down, card text needs to be moved up, attribute needs to be in japanese =D use photoshop to edit the cards not MSE

the effect is ehhhhhh, a little op

the pic is great though =D

7/10

[So Legit You Quit]

Yeah, Well it went from being Up'd to Op'd. I tryed

[賢狼ホロ]

And what do you mean Japanese OCG?

 

The Japanese you are using in the cards effect is wrong, e.g. -Type is not -Type (-Taipu タイプ) in Japanese, but -zoku (-族).

[So Legit You Quit]

Oh, well, Were do you get your Japanese From?

[賢狼ホロ]

I read the Japanese on Japanese cards.:3

[FriendlyHost]

bad card, i rate it 3/10 sorry

[.Impact]

the japanese txt is terrible but good attempt i guess

outside of the box

 

card itslef sucks

4/10

[wero-vasto]

bad card' date=' i rate it 3/10 sorry

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Bad rate...

 

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I would say mmm a little UPed...

thought, if you want comment from the Japanese edition go to Showcase :/ thought...

 

card is meh... but good.