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Looks good

I think you should change the life points part to:

"When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can send 1 Spell or Trap card you control to the Graveyard to inflict 400 points of damage to your opponent.

 

The one's that are in bold are the errors that are fixed

the underlined are the one I think is supposed to be.

9/10 good start for a newcomer.

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OCG fix

"Each turn, this card remains face-up on the field, place 1 Portal Counter on it (max 3). You can remove 3 Portal Counters from this card to Special Summon 1 Level3 or lower EARTH monster."

DHDogma already fixed the second half, and I think it's OK.

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"Each turn' date=' this card remains face-up on the field, place 1 Portal Counter on it (max 3). You can remove 3 Portal Counters from this card to Special Summon 1 Level3 or lower EARTH monster."

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"When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard' date=' you can send 1 Spell or Trap [b']C[/b]ard you control to the Graveyard to inflict 400 points of damage to your opponent's Life Points.

 

As you can see the 1st correction was ok...the 2nd correction had some errors..so I correct them. :) Very good job!! for a 1st card specialy!!

 

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As long as this card remains on your field, place 1 Portal Counter on it during each of your Standby Phases (max. 3). You can remove 3 Portal Counters from this card to Special Summon 1 Level 3 or lower EARTH Monster from your hand or Deck. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can send 1 Spell or Trap Card on your field to the Graveyard to inflict 400 points of damage to your opponent.

 

^^The Expert OCG Edition.^^

 

 

Always nice to see another Portal fan.

9/10

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