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[Deathwave18790]

Hey guys. this is an updated version of the card. The first card is the old one, and the second is the updated one. Thanks for the help and the advice. How else can it be improved?? Is the Pic still over used? Is it still too op'ed?

 

 

Alal can only be used for 4 turns. You must offer 3 level 6 or higher monsters to summon Alal. The attack and defense are the total of the monsters offered. Alal can be Special Summoned from the graveyard by offering half your life points. The attack and defense remain the same. Negates all spell, trap cards; including monster effects. Destroys any Spell or Trap card on the field instantly when summoned.

 

 

 

During the 3rd End Phase after this card has been Summoned, send this card to the Graveyard. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by it's own effect or by Tributing 2 Level 5 or lower monsters, and 1 Level 6 monster. The original ATK and DEF of this card is the combined total ATK and DEF of the Tributed monsters. You can pay half your Life Points to Special Summon this card from the Graveyard. This card is unaffected by Spell or Trap cards, and Monster effects, except its own. When this card is Summoned, destroy all Spell and Trap cards on the field.

[Brimtosis]

Okay, I don't know much about OCG, but I could help so it can get fixed better.

 

This card can only be Summoned when 3 level 6 or higher monsters sacraficed. When this card is summoned, all Spell and Trap cards on the feild are destroyed. This cards ATK and DEF is equal to the combined ATK and DEF of the monsters that were sacraficed. If this card is sent to the graveyard, you can special summon it if you sacrafice half of you total Life Points. If you do this, it's ATK and DEF remain the same. While this card is on the feild, Spell, Trap and Monster effects are negated against it. At the end of the fourth turn after this card was summoned, it is removed from play.

 

Look for members that are a higher level to me to fix the above effect.

[Arctic_Circle34]

Tad OP'd, don't say offer, say Tribute. Also, you want to make sure you show which summon, is it Special Summon or Normal Summon. According to it's effect, it negates all monster effects, so it would negate itself infinitely. Not that bad for a new guy. I'd use this:

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by Tributing 3 level 6 or higher monsters. The original ATK and DEF are equal to the combined original ATK and DEF of the Tributed monsters. During your 4th Standby Phase, destroy this card. By paying half of your Lifepoints, you can Special Summon this card from your Graveyard. Negate the effects of all face-up Spell, Trap and Monster Cards, except this card.

[Mahboi99]

Hey guys! This is my first card' date=' and I want it too be like a 4th God card. And I made it in a way to be kind of (well basically) over-powering, but as you can see its only for 4 rounds (or turns whatever). I would appreciate advice on how to make it better and realistic. Thank you

 

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Alal can only be used for 4 turns. You must offer 3 level 6 or higher monsters to summon Alal. The attack and defense are the total of the monsters offered. Alal can be Special Summoned from the graveyard by offering half your life points. The attack and defense remain the same. Negates all spell, trap cards; including monster effects. Destroys any Spell or Trap card on the field instantly when summoned.

 

What is with the XXXX for the ATK and DEF? if you mean X000 like slifer the sky dragon (1000 ATK for every card in hand).

nothing else

[FriendlyHost]

cool card but ocg is horrible, pic is over used, 5/10

[Dries965]

type DIVINE is DIVINE-BEAST