Kaisu Posted June 17, 2010 Report Share Posted June 17, 2010 Tut tut... There's a lotta mistakes in here. Honestly. And it doesn't make much sense. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted June 17, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 17, 2010 PM me what the mistakes are. Also, Episode 4 has started. I know the bad guy's unoriginal, but what else could I do? Anyway, since -Pichu- used Torchic and Kirby as guests in his review, it only seemed fair to use Ann 10 in my episode! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted June 18, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 18, 2010 Episode 2 is up. Ann 10 continues to annoy, and Kenny gets his soul handed to him again. Speaking of which, in the extended characters section, I will give a "Kenny Killer award" to whoever kills Kenny the most. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted June 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 21, 2010 Sorry about the wait! Anyway, I will take a break to do the new character section. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted July 4, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 4, 2010 Sorry 'bout the delay! Anyway, only a few major characters will be mentioned in the Characters section. Please critique my other episodes! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted July 7, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2010 Bump! And critique please! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted July 13, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 13, 2010 Bump Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted July 21, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 21, 2010 Bump. Anyway, I would like to announce that this fanfic may be going on haitus due to my other fanfic, The Legend of Zelda: Blade of Dimensions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pokemaniac92711 Posted July 22, 2010 Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 PUT THE ANNOYING ORANGE IN IT!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted July 22, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 Who? Are you talking about Tails? Man, I really need to stop sleeping under a rock. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pokemaniac92711 Posted July 24, 2010 Report Share Posted July 24, 2010 It's Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted July 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 25, 2010 Oh wait, the one on your avi? I think I know just the one to put him in... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pokemaniac92711 Posted July 25, 2010 Report Share Posted July 25, 2010 Okay, just make sure he annoys everyone he meets with his puns and never dies, because nobody could before, not even jigsaw could beat him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted August 8, 2010 Author Report Share Posted August 8, 2010 I previously cancelled this fanfic, but I decided to uncancel it. Part 2 of episode 6 should be out soon. And can someone please tell me how to change the title?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordoftehNubz Posted August 9, 2010 Report Share Posted August 9, 2010 Mmm. Kudos for an interesting idea, not just in the crossover but with laser tag. More interesting than XXX goes to YYY Academy, is late, and wins entrance duel by skin of teeth against vastly superior opponent(s). Problem I have is with your execution: and not just spelling and grammar, which is for the most part okay. Personally, I don't like self-referential writing. I don't like you calling attention to oversights or plot holes or alledgedly bad ideas like poor names. And that's not just you: you do it much better (more sparingly) than a lot of other writers, and admittedly it fits better in this concept than it does in a lot of other settings. But then again who knows: I don't know how you write with a fourth wall intact and so I can't really say if it's an improvement or not. Everything else is fine. The humour is cheesy (and in the case of lasagne also comprised of layers of pastry and meat filling), what with the slapstick and deafness jokes, but that at least is consistent with the setting and tone you're aiming for. Am I right? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PikMan Posted August 9, 2010 Author Report Share Posted August 9, 2010 Thanks for the input! I was thinking of changing the main character to be more generic, but then I realized that I'd have to do a lot of rewriting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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