NightPhase Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 Alright, I've just joined not to long ago and I've made my first card with the advice from other people in my last forum, I remade my first card and I'd like some feedback. thanks :] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John A. Zoidberg Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 It's not "ADDITION," that's math terms. You mean "1st EDITION." Some grammar mistakes. A lot of OCG (Official Card Grammar) errors. 6/10 for good picture and good ideas. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NightPhase Posted June 30, 2010 Author Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 Ah, yeah wewps. >_< think you could give me some tips on whats wrong with the grammar?. I wanna polish this card until its flawless. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John A. Zoidberg Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 Sure.The effect should be written as:For each Dark-type monster on your side of the Field, this card gains 800 DEF. You can also return 1 monster from your Graveyard to you Deck each time a monster on your opponents side of the field is sent to the Graveyard. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GodDangItPee Posted June 30, 2010 Report Share Posted June 30, 2010 Looks Cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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