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Duel Academy: Destiny's End - Arc 2 - The Approaching Darkness [Started/Accepting Here/OOC]


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Meh. S'all I could think of to foreshadow.


Oh and at least I'm doing something to continue the story. I haven't seen anyone else do anything since yesterday. It used to be going so smoothly. In just a few days we already had 10 pages of posts.

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With all due respect, and I'm not trying to ruin your fun, but since writing's my hobby, I really have to question your method of storytelling.

 

Your character inexplicably falls unconscious, has a vision regarding...something, I've kind of been dozing through the "plot" you've been working out, and then wakes up with the vision not only being taken completely seriously, but being incredibly revealing (as in answers, not hints). And this is defined as foreshadowing?

 

Couldn't there have been a more...appropriate time for that vision? Like...when he's actually asleep? Or some time that doesn't make the scene look completely random, out of place, and blatantly important by its irrelevence to ANYTHING GOING ON at present?

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With all due respect' date=' and I'm not trying to ruin your fun, but since writing's my hobby, I really have to question your method of storytelling.

 

Your character inexplicably falls unconscious, has a vision regarding...something, I've kind of been dozing through the "plot" you've been working out, and then wakes up with the vision not only being taken completely seriously, but being incredibly revealing (as in answers, not hints). And this is defined as foreshadowing?

 

Couldn't there have been a more...appropriate time for that vision? Like...when he's actually asleep? Or some time that doesn't make the scene look completely random, out of place, and blatantly important by its irrelevence to ANYTHING GOING ON at present?

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I'm just trying to continue the story, OK?

 

If you don't like it, then at least try to be a little nicer, K?

 

If you can think of a better way to do it, then PM it to me, and I'll take a look.

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My visions are sort of a combination of premonitions, and memories. They haven't happened in the current Timeline, but they have happened in Zero's Timeline. And I would say that you're better at foreshadowing than I am, but I suck at writing, so...

 

I like the whole "Megaman Zero" References. That was an awesome game series. Especially loved the 3rd one. You should search "Hard Revenge" on Youtube.

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