gobo55 Posted July 22, 2010 Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 CONSTRUCTIVE COMMENTS ONLY NO H8RS --------------------------------------------------------------------- name:apophis the chaos beast This card can only be Ritual Summmoned by the Ritual Spell Card "Chaos Arrives". Once per turn, you can destroy 1 card your opponent controls. name chaos arrives This card is used to Ritual Summon "Apophis the Chaos Beast". You must also offer monsters from the field or your hand whose total Level Stars equal to or more than 10. name:discords oracle During each of your opponents Standby Phases, pick up the top card of your opponents Deck. Return the picked up card to either the top or bottom of their Deck.his/her deck name:chaos knight this card gains 200 attack points for every card in your hand. name:chaos caster Once per turn, you can discard 1 card to place 1 Chaos Counter on a face-up "World in Chaos", if possible. name world in chaos All "Chaos" monsters gain 500 ATK and lose 300 DEF for each Chaos Counter on this card. (max.4) This card cannot be destroyed by the effects of Spell or Trap Cards.--------------------------------------------------------------------- i treid my best to remove any errors if you find them plz point them out please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
UltimateBreloom Posted July 22, 2010 Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 inthe title:make the first letter of every word CAPS unless it's the of things like thattype :Reptile Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cold Assassin Posted July 22, 2010 Report Share Posted July 22, 2010 8/10no comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gobo55 Posted July 23, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 is it a nice card i might make more like it if it is Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cold Assassin Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 keep making Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dearg Doom Posted July 23, 2010 Report Share Posted July 23, 2010 7/10 a few grammar errors. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gobo55 Posted July 24, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 24, 2010 got it ill keep trying yes :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Magma Warrior Posted July 24, 2010 Report Share Posted July 24, 2010 9/10You are awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Where are my COOKIES Posted July 24, 2010 Report Share Posted July 24, 2010 A few OCG errors but I think they're pretty good. 8.5-10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gobo55 Posted July 25, 2010 Author Report Share Posted July 25, 2010 made some new might not be as good as the first but ill continue to update Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~{Rochster}~ Posted July 25, 2010 Report Share Posted July 25, 2010 there is only 1 error in your cards. the ocg (official card grammer) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
godospace123 Posted July 30, 2010 Report Share Posted July 30, 2010 np thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DX DX USER Posted July 30, 2010 Report Share Posted July 30, 2010 Here, I'll fix them up for you. Apophis the Chaos Beast: This card can only be Ritual Summmoned by the Ritual Spell Card "Chaos Arrives". Once per turn, you can destroy 1 card your opponent controls. (Make it a Level 10.) Chaos Arrives: This card is used to Ritual Summon "Apophis the Chaos Beast". You must also offer monsters from the field or your hand whose total Level Stars equal 7 or more as a Tribute. Discords Oracle: During each of your opponents Standby Phases, pick up the top card of your opponents Deck. Return the picked up card to either the top or bottom of their Deck. (Add a Type.) Chaos Knight: This card gains 500 ATK for each card in your hand. (Change it to, 200 or something. Also, add aType.) Chaos Caster: Once per turn, you can discard 1 card to place 1 Chaos Counter on a face-up "World in Chaos", if possible. (Add a Type.) World in Chaos: All "Chaos" monsters gain 500 ATK and DEF for each Chaos Counter on this card. (max.4) This card cannot be destroyed by the effects of Spell or Trap Cards. (Change it to, they gain 500 ATK and lose 300 DEF, maybe.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gobo55 Posted August 4, 2010 Author Report Share Posted August 4, 2010 got it ill see what i can do :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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