Alordzynix Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 [align=center]Yet again two random Winged Beast-Type monsters. The Ala CleptaEffect:When this monster is special summon you can pay 500 life points to ad one "The Ala Bellator" from your deck or graveyard to your hand, your deck is then shuffled. Once per Duel, while this card is removed from pay you can draw 1 card from your Deck. Both players check the card drawn by this effect, and according to what type that card is the following effect activateds: ● Spell or Trap: Gain 1000 lifepoints ● Monster: Lose 500 lifepoints The Ala BellatorEffect:When this card is Tribute Summoned the monster used as a tribute is removed from play and then you can activated one of the following effects depending on what kind of monster was used as a tribute: ● WIND monster. Your opponents sends one card from his hand to the graveyard. ● Winged Beast-Type monster. Draw one card and your opponent sends one card from his field to the graveyard. When this card is destroyed and send to the graveyard special summon one "The Ala Clepta" from your removed from play card zone Images From Wolfberserk[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 [align=center]Yet again two random Winged Beast-Type monsters. The Ala CleptaEffect:When this monster is special summon you can pay 500 life points to ad one "The Ala Bellator" from your deck or graveyard to your hand' date=' your deck is then shuffled. Once per Duel, while this card is removed from pay you can draw 1 card from your Deck. Both players check the card drawn by this effect, and according to what type that card is the following effect activateds: ● Spell or Trap: Gain 1000 lifepoints ● Monster: Lose 500 lifepoints[/i'] The Ala BellatorEffect:When this card is Tribute Summoned the monster used as a tribute is removed from play and then you can activated one of the following effects depending on what kind of monster was used as a tribute: ● WIND monster. Your opponents sends one card from his hand to the graveyard. ● Winged Beast-Type monster. Draw one card and your opponent sends one card from his field to the graveyard. When this card is destroyed and send to the graveyard special summon one "The Ala Clepta" from your removed from play card zone Images From Wolfberserk[/align] Special Summoned add not ad Life Points Deck Graveyard Deck play activates Life Points Life Points Card 1 has a stupid amount of errors ^^^ Card 2 has a picture that has been used recently Graveyard Graveyard Please take more time and effort into your card making, i feel these were made quickly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yankee Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 What DJ said, but I think that you just didn't really take the time to look them over again, i'm not the best at that, but still =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alordzynix Posted January 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 Special Summoned add not ad Life Points Deck Graveyard Deck play activates Life Points Life Points Card 1 has a stupid amount of errors ^^^ Card 2 has a picture that has been used recently Graveyard Graveyard Please take more time and effort into your card making' date=' i feel these were made quickly.[/quote'] First of all I never payed the game in real only on games so I know nothing about caps and stuff as for the real grammar I'm discletyes and dutch so that means spelling things right is difficult for me and then I need to translated every thing to english.Second te fact that the image on Card 2 was used recently isn't my fault. I didn't saw it on a card only in Wolfberserks custom image thread and I added a secret rare effect (if you can see it) plus that I tryed my best on getting most things right means it took me a while. And could you type out the effect with out errors so I can just change it easely? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 No, you can work it out and change it yourself, its called effort lol And dont go moaning on because i found mistakes, quietly correct them lol And i already know your dutch, you say it all the time lol What you should do is do what other members do Send your cards to ppl over PM first to get them checked out, then when you post there wont be any errors and everyone can go WOW ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 Great names, OCG errors (nobody's perfect), Nice pictures that fit in with each other...I don't really see what else...GREAT! 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted January 13, 2008 Report Share Posted January 13, 2008 They're pretty good! The pictures work neatly together I think. Sure there are some errors, but DJ has charitably pointed those out already. I like the names, they're interesting, and the stats are fairly balanced out. So, from me (with the OCG fixed) you get a 8.5/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Dinosaur Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 I think the first image has been used recently in a set... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alordzynix Posted January 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 No' date=' you can work it out and change it yourself, its called effort lol And dont go moaning on because i found mistakes, quietly correct them lol And i already know your dutch, you say it all the time lol What you should do is do what other members do Send your cards to ppl over PM first to get them checked out, then when you post there wont be any errors and everyone can go WOW ^_^[/quote']I don't go "moanig" on you because you founf mistakes because I know they are in it anyway.As for the fact that you think this card is quickly made well it is quickly typed out because I was in a hurry but the first effects where longer and gave the cards a to small text. And you seem to be the only one who rates card on their grammar Thanks for all the other coments their names mean. The Wing Thief and the Winged Figter in Latin Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 alord, your maoning now lol Chill ^_^ i even offered you help and all you do is bite my head off lol And would you rather you cards contain grammar errors would you rather keep on producing the same msitakes again and again? I think not What i do is actually helping you, it shows you where you go wrong so next time you will think about current mistakes and not repeat them Its all help lol ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alordzynix Posted January 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 alord' date=' your maoning now lol Chill ^_^ i even offered you help and all you do is bite my head off lol And would you rather you cards contain grammar errors would you rather keep on producing the same msitakes again and again? I think not What i do is actually helping you, it shows you where you go wrong so next time you will think about current mistakes and not repeat them Its all help lol ^_^[/quote']What the hell is Maoning? Can't find the translation any where. And if it means something like Angry then I'm not that because you removed the mistakes. I'm that because I don't like the fact that you think that you helped me with it and that I should be pleased with it. In my opinion is OCG not something you should realy worry about if it goes with Caps and stuff. Having words Capsed or not capsed isn't that much of a problem and I don't mind making them again. But to make me clear I do not make them on purpuse and I try to get people pleased to look it over and try to fix it but I don't think someone should complain about it if words are not capsed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 No No lol Moaning is basically going on about something, unable to let something go, and keep saying the same thing over and over again, which is technically what your doing ^_^ You also seem quite, i dunno, aggitated? I still cannot believe you are still going on about it all I mean it was, literally, so yestaday lol ^_^ I have even offered to help you out, which ive said god knows how many times lol I myself help loads of members out with Grammar and OCG Cyber_ComYankeefanDa_ClownGBTSoul ImmortalElsandero (i think lol) ^_^ Im here to lend a helping hand lol ^_^ Also i dont udnerstand why your been like this No-one else really complains about it, they quitely correct the Grammar errors. And you say you get ppl to check over your cards? They dont do a good job lol Send em to me ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
God Kaiba™ Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 6.9/10 ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alordzynix Posted January 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 6.9/10 ^_^ Why that rating? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas Maximus Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 Card one has many errors and card two also has a fair few, still a really good attempt as they are hard effects to word, 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 Ignoring the errors Card 1 - Very nice picture and secret rare effect, very nice effort, sort of unique actually. Card 2 - Same as above but better picture ^_^ Ignoring the errors these are very good cards ^_^ Actually they are good regardless ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 I myself help loads of members out with Grammar and OCG Cyber_ComYankeefanDa_ClownGBTSoul ImmortalElsandero (i think lol) ^_^ ...? When have I ever asked you to help with OCG...? Maybe once, tops, lol. And I usually do well on my grammar, don't I? >_> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Junk Raver Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 I myself help loads of members out with Grammar and OCG Cyber_ComYankeefanDa_ClownGBTSoul ImmortalElsandero (i think lol) ^_^ ...? When have I ever asked you to help with OCG...? Maybe once' date=' tops, lol. And I usually do well on my grammar, don't I? >_>[/quote'] Even if just the once, i was right to name you. And personally i dont know, as i never see cards from you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azuh Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 i like them personally... i dont get to excited over grammar problems like DJ XD 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Saiba Aisu Posted January 14, 2008 Report Share Posted January 14, 2008 Even if just the once' date=' i was right to name you. And personally i dont know, as i never see cards from you.[/quote'] Hehee. But that's your fault for not looking at my cards, isn't it? :3And yes, I guess the one time does count... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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