First Card

[NobleShadow]

This my first card:
[IMG]http://i56.tinypic.com/so6es1.png[/IMG]
Image Credit---HP Doom
[spoiler=lore]When this card is Summoned successfully, place 1 Talisman Counter on this card (max.5). During your Main Phase, you can place 1 Talisman Counter on this card. Once per turn, you can remove 1 Talisman Counter from this card to add 1 Spell card from your Deck to your hand. When this card is destroyed by battle, inflict 200 points of Direct Damage for every Talisman Counter on this card.[/spoiler]
Please post any comments, tips, and no negative stuff. Just state the problems instead.
(I know it is a bit O'Ped.)

[HoneycombTroy]

The card is cool but it was hard to read the effect. Just a tip, post the lore of your cards with a long effect. 8/10

[NobleShadow]

OOPs! sorry, I will do that.

[A.Prime]

When this card is [b]successfully Summoned[/b], place 1[b] "[/b]Talisman Counter[b]"[/b] on this card (max.5). During your Main Phase, you can place 1 [b]"[/b]Talisman Counter[b]"[/b] on this card. Once per turn, you can remove 1 [b]"[/b]Talisman Counter[b]"[/b] from this card to add 1 Spell [b]C[/b]ard from your Deck to your hand. When this card is destroyed by battle, inflict 200 points of Direct Damage for every [b]"[/b]Talisman Counter[b]"[/b] on this card.

Very good! for your 1st card. 8/10

[Legokun]

Counter isn't under quotation marks.
Just some capitalization errors.
Not bad for a first card.
8/10

[TheComposer]

Good for a first card.l To make it less op'ed, make it so you don't put a counter on it EVERY turn. Make it something like, "Every time this card destroys a monster, put 1 Talisman Counter on this card" or something like that. 7.5/10

[Face McShooty]

[quote name='TheComposer' timestamp='1286139110' post='4677024']
Good for a first card.l To make it less op'ed, make it so you don't put a counter on it EVERY turn. Make it something like, "Every time this card destroys a monster, put 1 Talisman Counter on this card" or something like that. 7.5/10
[/quote]
like they said, make it to where its not every turn, and since he deals 200 damage for every Counter, make it again like they said, every time this card destroys a monster, add 1 Talisman Counter to this card

[Embittered Moon]

ocg fix: inflict 200 points of Direct Damage TO YOUR OPPONENT for EACH talisman counter on this card.

[Dante Dimercurio]

[b]Picture: (10/10.) Love it.

OCG: (8/10.) -- (Errors as stated above.)

Total: (9/10.) Very good for your first card.[/b]

[Agaming]

i like it but all that needs to be said has,well been said

[NobleShadow]

Thanks! And i will remember to do that. Thanks for that tip TheComposer and jad2342!

[Venom]

You could do a set based on Talisman monsters (maybe add Arabic Geniuses to the mix, as those beings are very related to talismans).