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Golden Sun: Magic Unleashed


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One day, Matthew was walking through Harapa. They were having an Eclipse Festival! Everybody was at the festival! Even people like Piers and Himi, who come from far away. It was a whole year after the Grave Eclipse, and there were 8 stars of the festival! The Eclipse festival celebrated the deeds of Matthew and his friends. Although... some people were looking pretty glum. Matthew walked over to Amiti, who looked pretty unhappy. "What's the matter, Amiti?" Matthew asked. "Oh, well now I have to be the king of Ayuthay. And... when I was on my way... I ran into..." He then began a long story about seeing Arcanus again, going to Tret and Laurel, talking to Paithos on his deathbed, and getting Sveta's help to read Veriti's spirit. "And that's my story. Hard, huh?" he said. "Yeah. Who WAS your dad, anyway? Surely Tret, or Paithos, or Veriti told you that?" Matthew asked. "Yeah. And as shocking as it sounds, It's... " He whispered something into Matthew's ear. "That's impossible! HE's your dad? I know you're related to Rief and Mia somehow, but who would have known?" "Hey, guys! What are you talking about?" It was Ryu Kou and Emperor Unan! To be continued...
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Why would they be having an Eclipse Festival? The Eclipse killed like, everyone in Angara. It'd be like New York having a 9/11 festival.

Why does Amiti, who's busy being king of Ayuthay, bother going to Harappa?

Why does Emperor Unan, who's busy as emperor, act so casually to seeing Matthew and Amiti, tossing them a "Hey guys!"?

Why does Amiti need to see Tret, Arcanus, Laurel, Paithos, and Sveta AGAIN!? They had given him just about all the information they could.

Why does Amiti respond with "And that's my story. Hard, huh?" when he presnted no new information to Matthew that he didn't already know?

Why does Matthew, who is a silent protagonist, speak at all?

Why is this story taking place in Harapa when Morgal would be the much more obvious choice?

Why can't you bother to hit enter to space out the story better?
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The Eclipse Festival was to celebrate the end of the Eclipse!

Amiti can't just miss the festival, he's one of the stars! Besides, it's closer to Ayuthay then Belinsk!

That wasn't Unan! It was Ryu Kou!

You mean you don't want to know who Amiti's true dad is?

How else is Amiti supposed to respond? He's lightened up since it all!

It'd be too boring if he didn't speak AT ALL!

Sveta was too busy to have it in Morgal, and again, Harapa's closer than Belinsk! And it's so colorful!

I didn't know I was supposed to do that...

If you're gonna bully a newbie, I won't do any more fan fics. I know you're staff, and please don't ban me, but I figured the staff'd be much easier on a newbie like me!
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