Zextra Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 [center]Well, here's my sorry excuse for an Excess monster. I don't know how I did, so please feel free to leave harsh comments. Thanks [img]http://img109.imageshack.us/img109/8036/99600j.jpg[/img] [i][b]Lore: When this card is successfully Exceed Summoned, you can remove from play a number of cards in your Graveyard equal to the number of Overlaid monsters on this card to destroy a number of Set Spell or Trap cards your opponent controls equal to or less than the number of cards removed this way. Once per turn, when this card would be destroyed by a card effect when it has no Overlaid monsters on it, it is not, and it gains one additional attack during your next Battle Phase.[/b][/i][/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shelds9 Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Great card! OCG seems fine from what I know. Balanced, though slightly to the OP'ed side. All you need is 2 level 4's to bring out this double attacking monster, plus it cannot be destroyed by a card effect. Good though! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daigusto Sphreez Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 By God, I thought the 1st effect would never end! In seriousness, nice card, I would use it...all of the time..which is why, as shelds points out, its quite OP, very OP in my opinion. The concept, presentation and general awesomeness is all there, but it needs balancing. 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 10, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 First of all, I would like to thank you both for actually clicking on this! (This is the most comments I've gotten within 5 minutes ^^) Anyways, I do realize it can be OP'ed, but I think what throws the effect off a bit is that you need to use up the Overlaid monsters first, before it can get its once per turn immunity. Either way, thanks for your comments, and I will edit this accordingly when I get more suggestions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daigusto Sphreez Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Well, that effect does balance it somewhat, but not enough, given that a 2600 ATK excess monster would be a pain, without the additional effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 10, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Yup, I know it's OP'ed. I'll try nerfing it, but I'm still going to try to keep the "Hydra" theme (See below). Now, Mythology Lesson! *Yay...* The Hydra was a mythological creature which had 9 heads to begin with. Every time one of its heads would be cut off, it would instantly regrow 2 more heads... uh...that's all... Therefore, I'm still trying to keep the idea that it can "regenerate" and put its "extra heads" to use Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shelds9 Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Oh, missed the "when this card has no Overlaid monsters on it" part... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 10, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Any ideas on how to make it less OP'ed? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kuroda Kaito Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 I see that you're try to make an Excess Monster, well i think that it's good, cool pic and good effect. Well about making the effect less OP'ed, well let me try : [quote]When this card is successfully Exceed Summoned, you can remove from play a number of cards in your Graveyard equal to the number of Overlaid monsters on this card to destroy a number of Set Spell or Trap cards your opponent controls equal to or less than the number of cards removed this way. Once per turn, when this card would be destroyed by a card effect when it has no Overlaid monsters on it, it is not,[b]after that this card's ATK will lose by 800 points[/b] and it gains one additional attack during your next Battle Phase.[b]When this card destroy your opponent's Monster, you can tribute this card to Special Summon back 2 removed Monster which has been removed by this card's effect until the end of that turn, and in your next turn, this card will be Special Summon back to the field and its ATK and DEF will be 2000[/b] Well that's my opinion ^^. Hope that can help you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xzero015 Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Make it level 9. There you go, fixed. Only 1 possible combination which requires 3 monsters. Makes the second effect even harder to use and makes the first effect viable and fits with the fluff even more having a star for every head. Honestly, a really awesome card and effect. It needs balancing but otherwise it's great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wero-vasto Posted January 10, 2011 Report Share Posted January 10, 2011 Wait ... what? this card isn't OPed D: come on guys... really? for the first effect Mobius makes it better so this card isn't OPed... it's just plain good an balanced... don't listen to them, it's a good Excess Monster Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 Thanks, all of you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 My response to the 2nd effect being overpowered is this (Smesh taught me this): If something bad is going to happen when you try to destroy it, your opponent probably won't be idiotic enough to try to destroy it with card effects. Therefore, its 2nd effect won't activate much as long as you aim to destroy it by battle. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shelds9 Posted January 11, 2011 Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 [quote name='wero-vasto' timestamp='1294700390' post='4925999'] Wait ... what? this card isn't OPed D: come on guys... really? for the first effect Mobius makes it better so this card isn't OPed... it's just plain good an balanced... don't listen to them, it's a good Excess Monster [/quote] This. I just missed the "when this card has no cards Overlaying it..." part. Smart thing that Smesh taught you... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yang Xiao-Long Posted January 11, 2011 Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 Only OCG error I saw: "One" to "1" That first effect is LONG XD Pic suits the card. ATK seems a bit low for a Level 8...maybe 2800? Just a thought. Everything seems good to me. 9.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heavens Guardian Posted January 11, 2011 Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 Great Pic Balanced great effect 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 Thanks a lot, all of you I appreciate your comments! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flaring Rose Posted January 11, 2011 Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 [quote name='xzero015' timestamp='1294692661' post='4925686'] Make it level 9. There you go, fixed. Only 1 possible combination which requires 3 monsters. Makes the second effect even harder to use and makes the first effect viable and fits with the fluff even more having a star for every head. Honestly, a really awesome card and effect. It needs balancing but otherwise it's great. [/quote] Excess monsters can only have a even number as its level. Ok, the first part of the effect is long, but I guess that is alright. I have done longer on one of my old sets. Iam think either increasing it's attack or defence. Perhaps for the attack to 2700? Anyway. I like the picture. But that doesn't always need to be the case. The effect is unique and can really piss some people off if you have some cards that send monsters to the graveyard. *Smells a set idea* I am also thinking its type should be Sea Serpent not Dragon... Just an idea. Anyway. Others have corrected the OCG, so no point of me repeating what everyone else have said. Picture: 10/10 Effect: 10/10 OCG: 9.5/10 (Might be another error.) Total: 29.5/30 Keep them comming. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 11, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 11, 2011 Thank you for the great review Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flaring Rose Posted January 12, 2011 Report Share Posted January 12, 2011 No worries. If that was directed at me.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 12, 2011 [quote name='Sky Fire' timestamp='1294792797' post='4928463'] No worries. If that was directed at me.... [/quote] Yup, it was directed towards you Thanks again (to everyone else who commented as well) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 12, 2011 Any more comments? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted January 13, 2011 Author Report Share Posted January 13, 2011 Sigh...just like my other threads... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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