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Tell me what's wrong about it, other than its size - just the template, not particularly the OCG, but comment on that too. Original template credit goes to Touma and BT.

[IMG]http://i803.photobucket.com/albums/yy320/kilimow/Template%20Cards/EXCE-JP001-1.png[/IMG]

Excessive Defender
Rank 6 EARTH
Warrior / Excess / Effect
2 Level 6 Monsters
When this card is sucessfully Exceed Summoned, you may Overlay 1 Warrior-Type monster in your hand on this card as an Exceed Material Monster. When a monster declares an attack, you can remove 1 of this card's Exceed Material Monsters to negate the attack and end the Battle Phase.
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pretty good... you forgot the normal shining stars though... good start

[s]needs some more shooting stars[/s]... and some need to be light-light blue

BTW OCG check soon

2 Level 6 [b]m[/b]onsters
When this card is successfully Exceed Summoned, you may Overlay [b]this card over[/b] 1 Warrior-Type monster in your hand as an Exceed Material Monster. When a monster declares an attack, you can [b]destroy[/b]/[i]remove from play[/i] 1 of this card's Exceed Material Monsters to negate the attack and end the Battle Phase.

Also lore box (not border) is more gray
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[quote name='Zextra' timestamp='1298082480' post='5017659']
My only suggestions are that the Effect box should be light grey-colored, not orange like an effect monster, and that you could make the "galaxy white strands" more bright and noticeable.
Other than that, great work :)
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*said already*
and some need to be blue

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dont know too much bout exceeds or how to play em with a deck yet.. but the effect seems nice


only thing imo could be changed is the pic... cause when i think of excessive defender... i think of a pic like total defense shogun.. which is all bout defense pretty much... with a shield and protective armor (whichs says defender to me).. but then again thats just me... its fine if u like it tho ;)

[IMG]http://i54.tinypic.com/2eyuf0o.png[/IMG]

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@BT: Thanks. Will update in a bit. For the box, though, I don't get what you mean. If I make the inner part less noticable, then you can't see it, and then the bevel looks fugly. As for the effect fix, yeah, the 'monster' wasn't meant to be capped. Blank mind. For the second fix, that's a completely different effect. The third I disagree with; I took that part of the OCG direct from Aspiring Emporer Hope.
@Zextra: Yep, he ninja'd you :P
@.:Gold:.: You can find the info in the TCG section now. And I found the image [url=http://s1204.photobucket.com/albums/bb401/Svedde_Detskriverjagjuinte/TCIAL/]here[/url].
@-Griffin: While this wasn't mainly for OCG/Effect, I see your point. Will fix.
@mysteryman429: Thanks?

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[quote name='AsterikcAde' timestamp='1298199337' post='5020448']
This looks like a legit YGO card. 9/10, I see nothing wrong with it, I don't really care about the OCG, I only rate for the images and the creativity of the name and the effect. Good job!
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not to bring you down... its kinda legit... the shooting stars need to be blue and normal stars need to added and be yellow

[quote name='Phoenix19' timestamp='1298189515' post='5020259']
I've done everything, but I can't find a decent similar starfield.
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but I sent you like 6 Exceed monsters by PM, non were good?
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