ThatGuyWhoJustAteYourCake Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 Hey Guys Heres My First 2 Card,s Any Recommended Ideas Anything Will do (No Trolling Plz) There Is An Error In the First Sentence Here: - Can Be Used The Turn - It Should Be - Cannot Be Used The Turn - [img]http://img16.imageshack.us/img16/6758/377910.jpg[/img] [img]http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/6758/377910.jpg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stan Alda Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 Don't use attacthments to post cards. When in the YCM interface, click on the created card. A bar that says "Uploading to Image Shack" will appear. When the bar is finished, copy/cut the text in the bar and paste it into the post. Until you do this, I can't rate these cards--or even see them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MibeR Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 can't se'em.. will comment after see'em Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Stan Alda Posted March 11, 2011 Report Share Posted March 11, 2011 Now that I can see them...they need work. A [u][b][i]lot[/i][/b][/u] of work. [spoiler=Advice/Criticism]First off, don't Capitalize The First Letter Of Every Word Like A [i]Discworld[/i] Golem. Seriously, that makes the cards' lore a pain in the ass to read. Second, the pics and names aren't that great. Granted, I get most of my pics from Google Images too, but I usually edit them with GIMP, a free image-editing program similar to Photoshop (hint, hint). Don't use the raw photos/screenshots from GI or especially DeviantArt. It's not very original, and illegal in the case of DeviantArt if you do it without asking (and the artist finds out). Third, Yu-Gi-Oh cards have a specific phrasing to their effects called Official Card Grammar, or OCG for short. Your cards don't follow that grammar, and it makes the effects unclear. Examine real YGO cards or ask for advice from other users for advice on how to phrase the effects properly. Finally, even if the OCG was correct, the cards' effects themselves are broken. [list] [*]"Nuke" totally shuts down all monster summons and effects, and wipes both players' fields and hands--FOR NO COST. "Final Destiny", one of the few real YGO cards I know with that sort of power, requires you to discard 5 cards form your hand--a high cost--and only destroys all cards on the field. It doesn't have any of the other effects your card has, and as a result is actually considered playable. The only way "Nuke" could possibly be made balanced is if it had a high Life Point/discard cost, its effect could be negated, and if it had the Summon/effect negating part eliminated. Even then, it'd still be too powerful to be truly balanced. [*]"Zombie Infestation", as far as I can make out, takes all monsters with >3000 ATK/DEF, puts them in your hand, and makes them stay there. If you don't already know, a player can only have up to 6 cards in their hand, and must discard one card in their hand at the end of their turn if they have more than that. So if your opponent has 5 monsters with less than 3000 ATK (which is happens all the time), then you'll only be able to have 1 usable card in your hand because the "stolen" monsters can't leave your hand for any reason. Granted, the field-sweeping effect could be handy, but it basically seizes up your hand for the rest of the duel. [/list][/spoiler] I'm not trying to flame, but this needs a LOT of work to be up to par. Don't give up, though! It is possible for a newbie to become a great YCMer; hell, we're all noobs at one point or another. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheRobloxian Posted March 12, 2011 Report Share Posted March 12, 2011 3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatGuyWhoJustAteYourCake Posted March 13, 2011 Author Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 [quote name='Jaeger' timestamp='1299871667' post='5066901'] Now that I can see them...they need work. A [u][b][i]lot[/i][/b][/u] of work. [spoiler=Advice/Criticism]First off, don't Capitalize The First Letter Of Every Word Like A [i]Discworld[/i] Golem. Seriously, that makes the cards' lore a pain in the ass to read. Second, the pics and names aren't that great. Granted, I get most of my pics from Google Images too, but I usually edit them with GIMP, a free image-editing program similar to Photoshop (hint, hint). Don't use the raw photos/screenshots from GI or especially DeviantArt. It's not very original, and illegal in the case of DeviantArt if you do it without asking (and the artist finds out). Third, Yu-Gi-Oh cards have a specific phrasing to their effects called Official Card Grammar, or OCG for short. Your cards don't follow that grammar, and it makes the effects unclear. Examine real YGO cards or ask for advice from other users for advice on how to phrase the effects properly. Finally, even if the OCG was correct, the cards' effects themselves are broken. [list] [*]"Nuke" totally shuts down all monster summons and effects, and wipes both players' fields and hands--FOR NO COST. "Final Destiny", one of the few real YGO cards I know with that sort of power, requires you to discard 5 cards form your hand--a high cost--and only destroys all cards on the field. It doesn't have any of the other effects your card has, and as a result is actually considered playable. The only way "Nuke" could possibly be made balanced is if it had a high Life Point/discard cost, its effect could be negated, and if it had the Summon/effect negating part eliminated. Even then, it'd still be too powerful to be truly balanced. [*]"Zombie Infestation", as far as I can make out, takes all monsters with >3000 ATK/DEF, puts them in your hand, and makes them stay there. If you don't already know, a player can only have up to 6 cards in their hand, and must discard one card in their hand at the end of their turn if they have more than that. So if your opponent has 5 monsters with less than 3000 ATK (which is happens all the time), then you'll only be able to have 1 usable card in your hand because the "stolen" monsters can't leave your hand for any reason. Granted, the field-sweeping effect could be handy, but it basically seizes up your hand for the rest of the duel. [/list][/spoiler] I'm not trying to flame, but this needs a LOT of work to be up to par. Don't give up, though! It is possible for a newbie to become a great YCMer; hell, we're all noobs at one point or another. [/quote] Thanks for th help these cards are pretty crappy, im not gonna lie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Holly and the Ivy Posted March 13, 2011 Report Share Posted March 13, 2011 For a start, try not to capitalize the first letter of every word. Then make the effects make more sense, especially Nuke and finally make Zombie Infestation less over powered. Do that and you cards will be much better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
beefman Posted March 15, 2011 Report Share Posted March 15, 2011 The pics are bad (don't make them real life), the names are unoriginal, and don't capitalize each word. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sparkyred6 Posted March 17, 2011 Report Share Posted March 17, 2011 [quote name='MechaSanphred' timestamp='1300217188' post='5075460'] The pics are bad (don't make them real life), the names are unoriginal, and don't capitalize each word. [/quote] Like Mecha said it shouldnt have realife stuff and the name is unoriganal ive had mistakes like that and i still do but here's what i would do change the name from "Nuke" to "Worldly Destruction" and the other cards name has nothing to do with its eff Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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