Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 [img]http://img594.imageshack.us/img594/8316/darkbeautywarchariot.jpg[/img] 2 Level 4 "Dark Beauty" monsters Once per turn, you can remove 1 Exceed Material Monster from this card and select 1 monster your opponent controls with Level equal to or lower than the removed Exceed Material Monster's Level. This turn, the selected monster cannot be destroyed by battle but all Battle Damage dealt to that monster's controller is increased by 400 for every Beauty Counter the attacking monster has. If this card has no Exceed Material Monsters on it, send it to the Graveyard, then Special Summon 1 of the Exceed Material Monsters used to Exceed Summon this card. [img]http://img29.imageshack.us/img29/1998/darkbeautywarterror.jpg[/img] 2 Level 3 "Dark Beauty" monsters When you Exceed Summon this card, place 1 Beauty Counter on it (max. 3). All monsters your opponent controls that have different Attributes than this card lose 100 ATK for each Beauty Counter on your field (they cannot lose more than 1000 ATK with this card's own effect). Once per turn, you can remove 1 Exceed Material Monster from this card and designate an Attribute. If you do, place 1 Beauty Counter on this card. If this card has no Exceed Material Monsters on it, it is changed to Defense Position. Once per turn, you can remove 3 Beauty Counters from cards you control and select 1 "Dark Beauty" monster you control. This turn, it cannot be destroyed by battle or by card effects. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anbu-of-Sand Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 The card is a decent 2500 wall to start off with. It's main effect I can trust is good. Why? Well 400 increase to battle damage per Beauty Counter can hurt, but with this being an Exceed, I can tell it will normally do a +800 or so when battle damage is given. The last effect is simply for getting out one of it's Exceed Material Monsters. The card seems balanced, but with me not knowing about the Archetype, could be broken, depending on how well they manipulate Beauty Counters. So maybe to be safe, make it 300? The card is also really unique, with a lack of cards that involve increasing / decreasing battle damage. Overall, not that bad. Pretty good actually. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 They spam Counters with consistent frequency, so a reduction to 300 was a well thought change. Anyways, thank you for the C&C! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anbu-of-Sand Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 Your welcome. But if they spam Counters really well (as much as my Signature Archetype does), then I suggest lowering it by another 100, or maybe a mere 50. (so 200 or 250). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 Ill consider it ^^More Exceeds! Man, I feel creative today! XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anbu-of-Sand Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 To start off, Designate should be Declare. But what happens after it is declared? It seems as that's it, and nothing happens. The protection of destruction as a whole for a "Dark Beauty" you control at the cost of three of this monster's Beauty Counters seem well worth it. It's main effect of ATK depletion seems somewhat harsh, especially considering this monster's own stats, and how you said they can manipulate / spam the Counters pretty damn good. I'd lower this card's ATK to 2000, or maybe even 1800 with it only being a Level 3 and all, and / or make it so your "Dark Beauty" monsters themselves lose 50 ATK and / or DEF per Beauty Counter on your field as well, but maybe with a maximum of 500 to the stat(s) loss. Or make it 100 depletion for every Beauty Counter on your opponent's field, but still with the same amount of only 500 being able to be loss. A bit overpowering from my look, but is still pretty damn original. From these two cards, I can tell this Archetype depends on Battle Damage / "Battle Control", and most likely a few other things, which are used with the Beauty Counters, the two things I just listed being one of them. This makes them quite the threat, and also remind me of my "Mysterious Magicians". My Archetype although can be used for different kinds of Decks (Hand Control, Field Control, Mill even, etc. etc.), I would use them mainly for Beatdown / "Battle Control" as well. Seeing both Archetypes in a duel would be quite the sight to see. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 Fix'd. What do ya think? ^^ Dark Beauty War Terror 2 Level 3 "Dark Beauty" monsters When you Exceed Summon this card, place 1 Beauty Counter on it (max. 3). All monsters your opponent controls that have different Attributes than this card lose 100 ATK for each Beauty Counter on your field (they cannot lose more than 500 ATK with this card's own effect). Once per turn, you can remove 1 Exceed Material Monster from this card and declare an Attribute. This card's Attribute becomes the declared one. If you do, place 1 Beauty Counter on this card. If this card has no Exceed Material Monsters on it, it is changed to Defense Position. Once per turn, you can remove 3 Beauty Counters from cards you control and select 1 "Dark Beauty" monster you control. This turn, it cannot be destroyed by battle or by card effects. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anbu-of-Sand Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 [quote name='Venom' timestamp='1303710497' post='5166164'] Fix'd. What do ya think? ^^ Dark Beauty War Terror 2 Level 3 "Dark Beauty" monsters When you Exceed Summon this card, place 1 Beauty Counter on it (max. 3). All monsters your opponent controls that have different Attributes than this card lose 100 ATK for each Beauty Counter on your field (they cannot lose more than 500 ATK with this card's own effect). Once per turn, you can remove 1 Exceed Material Monster from this card and declare an Attribute. This card's Attribute becomes the declared one. [b]If you do, place 1 Beauty Counter on this card.[/b] If this card has no Exceed Material Monsters on it, it is changed to Defense Position. Once per turn, you can remove 3 Beauty Counters from cards you control and select 1 "Dark Beauty" monster you control. This turn, it cannot be destroyed by battle or by card effects. [/quote] It's slightly better now. The wording is confusing at times though. For example, the bold sounds a lot like a cost the way it is worded out in my opinion, when it is indeed not. I'd try to find a way to word it so it doesn't sound like a cost. The last sentence should also be worded as something along the lines of "It cannot be destroyed by battle or by card effects until the End Phase of this turn". Otherwise, it looks more balanced then before. But maybe for safety precautions, put a Level cap on the second effect? Y'know, with the simple regeneration of Counters this card can do, it won't be that hard to get then remove 3 for a free monster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 Ill fix them as soon as I have some time =P. Also, the first, one and only Vanilla of the Set! [img]http://img30.imageshack.us/img30/4146/darkbeautylissanya.jpg[/img] The most common mythical creature among the gigantic tribe known as the Dark Beauties. They fight mercilessly but with compassion. The unfortunate being facing them might perceive these women as fragile as crystal, but soon discovering they are furious as a storm. Will YOU survive the encounter?... Here, War Terror fix'd: 2 Level 3 "Dark Beauty" monsters When you Exceed Summon this card, place 1 Beauty Counter on it (max. 3). All monsters your opponent controls that have different Attributes than this card lose 100 ATK for each Beauty Counter on your field (they cannot lose more than 500 ATK with this card's own effect). Once per turn, you can remove 1 Exceed Material Monster from this card and declare an Attribute. This card's Attribute becomes the declared one. If this card's Attribute is changed, you can place 1 Beauty Counter on this card. If this card has no Exceed Material Monsters on it, it is changed to Defense Position. Once per turn, you can remove 3 Beauty Counters from cards you control and select 1 Level 5 or lower "Dark Beauty" monster you control. It cannot be destroyed by battle or by card effects until the End Phase of this turn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anbu-of-Sand Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 To start off, I like the Flavor Text for the Vanilla. "As furious as a storm" however isn't the best metaphor, just choice of words for it that is isn't. Mainly because people don't usually / normally refer to storms as being 'furious'. Well, nobody I knows refer to them like that. Maybe find a more suitable word to describe a storm? (Wow, look at me, giving CnC on a Vanilla's Flavor Text). Anywho, the card is much more balanced now, and I see no problems for it whatsoever. Great job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 Thx! ^^ Thank for helping me so much? How can i repay? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anbu-of-Sand Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 You don't need to really repay anything big to be honest. A simple rep would do just fine though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 There, popped a Rep in your post above ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren✧ Posted April 25, 2011 Report Share Posted April 25, 2011 Great cards. They are balanced and quite useful. It is a nice addition to your Dark Beauty set. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Venom Posted April 26, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 26, 2011 Thx! The Set is near it's finish Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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