Zextra Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 [center]My first single in a long time - I tried to stick with "simple and effective", so I would like to avoid hearing comments such as "lacks originality" or "no creativity". Other than that, I'm open to all comments and suggestions! [IMG]http://img594.imageshack.us/img594/3553/blackwingbristote.jpg[/IMG] [i][b]Lore: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. You can Special Summon this card from your hand by Tributing 2 "Blackwing" monsters you control. When this card destroys a monster by battle, destroy cards on the field up to the number of "Blackwing" monsters you control.[/b][/i] Thanks for looking![/center] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jayman29 Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 I am not too happy about the effect. I mean it is nice but the tributing of 2 blackwings kinda hurts. Maybe make it one since this card is like a 2500+ card(2000 isn't too much). Aside from that I love the background on the card, I wish real yugioh cards were that cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
EndlessOcean Posted April 28, 2011 Report Share Posted April 28, 2011 This is a very good card. The effect is balenced by the ATK, and the template is very nice. (Should be an Exceed Template, you would make loads of points) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted April 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 29, 2011 Thanks for your comments. @Jay - I was afraid that 2500 might have been too much, since then it could run over most cards. I'll try your sugigestion of making it 1 tribute when I edit the card later. @Psychic Almighty - I just knew someone would say something about Exceeds ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ren✧ Posted April 29, 2011 Report Share Posted April 29, 2011 It would definitely be Restricted if not banned if it were a real card, but besides that it is a pretty good. I guess the lower ATK points makes up for the kick-butt effect. Nice Job 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
monty1394 Posted April 29, 2011 Report Share Posted April 29, 2011 woah what template is that? i want it! also, good card, it has a very useful and effective effect (imagine that hehe) i would definately use it if i could stand blackwings Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vough Posted April 29, 2011 Report Share Posted April 29, 2011 Is this is an exceed? IF SO: L2EXCEED It's like a Fusion/Synchro where you list the materials: "2 "Blackwing" monsters When this card destroys a monster by battle, remove 1 Exceed Material Monster from this card to destroy cards on the field equal to the number of face-up "Blackwing" monsters you control." LVs are supposed to be Ranks (Black and Yellow-colored stars) and usually Exceeds use Levels for their summoning so it could be like, "2 Level 3 or 4 "Blackwing" monsters" Good name and effect. 7/10, -3 for mistakes. IF NOT: Then why is colored black? Good name and effect, good cost and effect. Might want to add a cost to it for the destruction of cards, though. 9/10 ---- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted April 29, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 29, 2011 @Talos and Monty - Thanks for your comments! @Vough - Thanks for your comments, though it's not an Exceed (yes, I know what an Exceed is) - it's my own template. I made it black because it was designed exclusively for Dark monsters. Sorry for the confusion ^^ Also, I thought the destruction was balanced out by it's summoning conditions and mediocre stats, so wouldn't that count as a "cost"? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted April 30, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 Anymore comments? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
â™ Decietful Kingâ™ Posted April 30, 2011 Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 OMG gimmie that template 0.0.... But on a more serious note. The summoning conditions isn't really that hard to produce. Because the point of a BW deck is to swarm the field and get a lot of them out. So just two wouldn't be much trouble. But I do love the effect and the mediocre stats do balance it out. 7/10 (GIMMIE TEMPLATE and I'll give you an eight. Increase the Summoning Conditions and we can talk about a ten. xD) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted April 30, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 Thanks for your comment, Decietful King. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mugendramon Posted April 30, 2011 Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 I like the effect. This is one of those cards which eat up advantage when they are Summoned, but quickly regain what's lost by obliterating. Taking into account Blackwings can swarm like hell, this guy could easily kill 3 cards every time. But if he's treated the way Shura is, you won't get to use that as often as you'd wish. He'd also get his ration of the banlist, too. Now for the amusingly obvious comment, I hope I don't break the illusion: Stardust runs this thing over. Completely. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Sleeping Dude Posted April 30, 2011 Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 nice card but it looks pretty OP'd or the 1st effect is wrong "This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only..." "........................................... This card cannot be..." "........................................... You can Special Summon this card in your hand by..." all of them are good but i suggest the 3rd option since its near your currect summoning requirements. okay the main effect is good but kinda OP'd.. Since Blackwing can swarm the field with ease. but i never said you should change it, its good enough. its just its summoning requirements is wrong Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted April 30, 2011 Author Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 @ BlindMonkey, thanksfor the comments - and yes, Stardust beats the crap out of this thing just because it's Stardust. @ AngryBird - Actually, I meant for The summoning conditions to be that way - it's meant to be a semi-nomi, not a Nomi, meaning that it can't be Normal Summoned or Set, but it can be normally Special Summoned (unlike cards such as Gate Guardian, which can only be Special Summoned in a specific way). Howeer, thanks for your conments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kato_Zenamara Posted April 30, 2011 Report Share Posted April 30, 2011 A level 5 Monster that must be Special Summoned with 2 tributes? Someones been mixing their summoning rules. Also, this is Realistic Cards, and by the rules, the cards [i]must[/i] be made to look and act like they should if they were real cards. As this is not an Exceed Monster, then the template doesn't follow the rules. Its a cool template, just not a right one. As for the effect, I find it to be a little OP'ed. Blackwings are swarm b****es, so this sucker could make it out on the first turn (since its a Special Summon), and that would just mow down the opponent for turns to com, especially with its effect. It might as well be a Synchro Monster (it would be less OP'ed that way, and the pic looks more like a BW Synchro than a normal monster). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted May 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 1, 2011 @ Kato - I appreciate your input. However, I have a couple of counter-statements: • Tributing 2 monsters are the summoning conditions to the [b]Special[/b] Summon of the card, and can therefore be anything. Also, I made it a Level 6 to match its subpar stats. • I agree that it seems OP'ed at first, but think about it: While Blackwings are known for their swarming, there are really only 4 monsters that most Blackwing decks use that actually allow you to swarm effectively: Bora, Shura, Blizzard, and Gale - the rest, such as Ghibli or Breeze are close to never used. Then, after summoning this card, you would have to re-swarm before you are able to effectively able to use it's effect. Lastly, it's a -3 hand advantage monster with low stats (easily trampled by almost any Synchro) and no immunities whatsoever. However, I may consider making it a Synchro. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted May 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 1, 2011 Any more comments? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Iaashadow Posted May 1, 2011 Report Share Posted May 1, 2011 [quote name='Talos the Wind Ninja' timestamp='1304039719' post='5175041'] It would definitely be Restricted if not banned if it were a real card, but besides that it is a pretty good. I guess the lower ATK points makes up for the kick-butt effect. Nice Job 8/10 [/quote] agree Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted May 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2011 Thanks for your comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Sleeping Dude Posted May 2, 2011 Report Share Posted May 2, 2011 [quote name='Zextra' timestamp='1304186799' post='5179261'] @ AngryBird - Actually, I meant for The summoning conditions to be that way - it's meant to be a semi-nomi, not a Nomi, meaning that it can't be Normal Summoned or Set, but it can be normally Special Summoned (unlike cards such as Gate Guardian, which can only be Special Summoned in a specific way). Howeer, thanks for your conments. [/quote] I know the whole nomi thing it's just that your last placed effect says it can be special summon by tributing 2 monsters... it doe'nt have a correct location in where you can Special Summon it. i'm glad you took my advice there cause if you did'nt notice that it'll be supah-OP'D like you did'nt need a Monster Reborn to Special Summon.. anyways good card (forgot to say that when i last commented, i think) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted May 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 3, 2011 [quote name='AngryBird' timestamp='1304342020' post='5183813'] I know the whole nomi thing it's just that your last placed effect says it can be special summon by tributing 2 monsters... it doe'nt have a correct location in where you can Special Summon it. i'm glad you took my advice there cause if you did'nt notice that it'll be supah-OP'D like you did'nt need a Monster Reborn to Special Summon.. anyways good card (forgot to say that when i last commented, i think) [/quote] Oh, that's what you meant - yeah, thanks for the suggestion, because otherwise, I would unknowingly let it be summonable from the deck. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lunar Origins Posted May 3, 2011 Report Share Posted May 3, 2011 Now, what if you control a whole field of blackwings, no spells or traps and you destroy a monster with him while they control 1 monster? Nukes your field of monsters. Unless your an idiot, of course XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted May 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 3, 2011 [quote name='Kindred' timestamp='1304393187' post='5185310'] Now, what if you control a whole field of blackwings, no spells or traps and you destroy a monster with him while they control 1 monster? Nukes your field of monsters. Unless your an idiot, of course XD [/quote] Well, notice that it says "[i][b]up to [/b][/i]the number of "Blackwing" monsters you control". Therefore, you don't have to destroy anything. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lunar Origins Posted May 3, 2011 Report Share Posted May 3, 2011 [quote name='Zextra' timestamp='1304394496' post='5185328'] Well, notice that it says "[i][b]up to [/b][/i]the number of "Blackwing" monsters you control". Therefore, you don't have to destroy anything. [/quote] Ah, forgot to read the fine print. Stupid me XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zextra Posted May 3, 2011 Author Report Share Posted May 3, 2011 lol, it's fine - I made the biggest mistake ever when making it, so... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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